ok, you really outdid yourself on this one. AMAZING.

Matter of fact. I liked this chapter so much I am reviewing twice in a role.

 

I love you.

 

I love your words.

 

YOU ROCK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Wow!  Nice one!  He finally stops being such a pansy and just makes it happen!   Super hot and cute :)

I wish Edward would have just given his explanation instead of being soooo whiny.  But I get it. :)  I'm glad they had a conversation about a realistic way to approach a relationship... not a part of many stories!

Nice work! :)

This was more than just a lemon. I was reading it and panting at the same time myself! Oh my God! I need some release! You write so well and the love making is so intense that...well...I have no words to explain what it does to me. I so need to find my Edward!

I'm really digging the story overall.  The writing is descriptive and moving.  The plot is well-structured and I like that it sticks to the true characters and surround of the Twilight-verse.  There are a few sections that feel too angsty to me; however, Edward is like that in the books.  Some of the embarassment over sex and the like also seems to go too far.  And in this chapter, I see and understand the conflict but it feels almost beyond ridiculous that Bella would flip out so badly over something like this.  Then again, I'm much older and can see that 18 year olds are rather dramatic, so what do I know?!  

You're doing a great job and I'm utterly hooked, so keep it up :)  Thanks!

Oh...my....God!   That was INCREDIBLY hot!  And I'd bet everybody between there and the Arctic Circle got an earful.   I hereby declare them both to be officially no longer VIRGINS!!!!

OMG. I registered on this site just so I could you leave a comment. This was about the best love scene I have ever read. I was blown away. Wow.

I need a minute. No, seriously, A minute........

I don't know what to say. I'm...speechless. That had to be the most passionate, romantic, emotional, and heart stopping chapter thus far. I've never, in all the hundreds of fanfictions I've encountered, read something so fulfilling. It had everything, and then some.

And just when I thought I'd never come down from that most erotic love scene, I burst into tears with Bella at "“It’s my favorite sound in the whole world; you know that, don’t you? I don’t know what I’m going to do without it. I…' he choked, that same strange, strangling sound that was my signal he was crying".

What a wonderful, wonderful, wonderful chapter you've given us. It's often impossible to find a story line that just gets better and better with each new chapter, never giving way to moments where the reader (in my case anyway) thinks, "oh, I would've not put that in there". But with yours, we've hit the JACKPOT. Thank you, oh, thank you!

By the way, I am extremely curious to learn how far you plan on taking us along on this glorious ride. Through Bella's change? Her time afterward? It's almost a given, I think, since you've gotta give us that standoff between Bella and Emmett. Oh please let us know. I don't know if I can handle knowing it's gonna end anytime soon. I don't wanna let it go.

What a chapter! TAKE A BOW, my dear!

holy JESUS that was incredible!  I was NOT prepared for Mr. Super Sexy Edward!  MAN!!!!!  WHEW!!!  If you stop this story I will certainly die of sadness!!!!!!!!!!

Thinking?  Thinking? Who can think after that?  OMG, that has to be one of the HOTTEST, SEXIEST things I have ever read.  Unbelievably sensual.  I literally read that with my mouth hanging open.  New side of Edward indeed! That boy is like walking sex!  You write these type of scenes beautifully, you really do.  I don't feel they are over the top and amoral (as Edward would say) in any way.  You can feel their love through your words which makes the whole thing just exquisite.  I really felt for him at the end when he was saying he didn't know what he was going do without the sound of Bella's heartbeat. Very moving.  Obviously I loved this chapter and can't wait until your next one.

Amazingly well written love scene. I love how you are showing that just because a couple gets married does not mean that all things go smoothly. I love what you have done with the sex storyline. I love how you have characterized Edward and Bella. Great job!

What can I say??? Beautiful, just beautiful! You capture the scene beautifully.