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Reviewer: Yikes_Vampires (Signed) · Date: January 09, 2009 07:32 PM · On: Chapter 11- Burning
That...was...amazing...
Reviewer: angelicwish (Anonymous) · Date: January 09, 2009 07:07 PM · On: Chapter 11- Burning
Well worth the wait - the best changing scene I have EVER read :)
Reviewer: CNB123 (Signed) · Date: January 09, 2009 07:06 PM · On: Chapter 11- Burning
I loved how you described the change!! So much detail!! Excellent!!!
Reviewer: siouxchef (Signed) · Date: January 09, 2009 07:01 PM · On: Chapter 11- Burning
Awesome! That was awesome. I'm glad you made mention of the loss of bodily wastes and fluids, as no one seems to touch on that subject. I really really like your story, thank you very much for the update!
Reviewer: absmw1618 (Signed) · Date: January 09, 2009 07:00 PM · On: Chapter 11- Burning
Wow this is one of the best stories ive ever read, really great chapter. please update soon.
Reviewer: bga1974 (Signed) · Date: January 09, 2009 06:58 PM · On: Chapter 11- Burning
Well done ! Although I am a little surprised she was conscious for so much of it. Really great though. I can't wait for her to wake up.
Reviewer: Laura Cullen (Signed) · Date: January 09, 2009 06:55 PM · On: Chapter 11- Burning
Overall, I really liked it. I really don't want her to forget the Cullens though. Not after all they've already fought through. None of the others forgot completely everything that came before their change...good intensity here!
Reviewer: eviltigereye (Signed) · Date: January 09, 2009 06:50 PM · On: Chapter 11- Burning
that was really good! i like how she was awake and communicating throughout her change, and edward was so vulnerable. really great job, i can't wait for more! this is my favorite ff!
Reviewer: booksgalore (Signed) · Date: January 09, 2009 06:40 PM · On: Chapter 11- Burning
Hi there is there a psychological condition known as "change envy" cause you totally outdid SM with that chapter. Just amazing writing. Just one question - when she looks into Edward's eyes is she remembering their color? Or is she seeing their current color? I was confused on that one as I don't know how much of her blood he took but I would assume they'd be red or maroon or whatever. But the relational dynamics you captured the physical sensations you described - meticulous detail - well done!
Reviewer: Mayfair1285 (Signed) · Date: January 09, 2009 06:30 PM · On: Chapter 11- Burning
Wow....that was a good one...update soon plz!
Reviewer: Mya Jacobs (Signed) · Date: January 08, 2009 04:46 AM · On: Chapter 1- Preparations
Amazing I have read all the way through and now I'll be reading it again. This is exactly what I envisioned before I read Breaking Dawn. Only you make it sound so much better, and add a lot of details I would never have thought of. Please oh please keep them coming!! GREAT JOB!!!
Reviewer: RMCC (Signed) · Date: January 06, 2009 10:22 PM · On: Chapter 10- Decision
FANTASTIC, as always. I do love this story. Please tell me it's not ending there... I'll be heartbroken.
Reviewer: a beautiful night (Signed) · Date: January 06, 2009 12:06 AM · On: Chapter 10- Decision
My first review! I've been so moved by your writing, your version of his story that I had to finally write a review. I've read this story 4 times now and its just like the SM Twilight series for me...I enjoy it every time I read it! Thank you so much for giving us this gift. I severly hope you are planning to write more chapters to this series as I am dying to know what happens next! Such passion before she's a vampire, I can't even imagine what you could bless us with during her change and after she's indestructible! Please please please keep writing...I check back daily looking for more.
Thank you again!! I hope this new year is wonderful for you and keeps you inspired to write! You are very talented!!
Reviewer: sherilynn (Signed) · Date: January 05, 2009 04:03 PM · On: Chapter 10- Decision
update soon please!! kept me haning on....
Reviewer: chocolatelover (Signed) · Date: January 05, 2009 11:25 AM · On: Chapter 1- Preparations
i love love LOVE this version of BD. it is the best one i have read and i am a huge fan of jen wordsong's "Die to Self." PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE keep writing this story.
...oh and chapter 9? hottest f*cking shit i have ever read!
Reviewer: totallyeclipsed (Signed) · Date: January 04, 2009 10:52 AM · On: Chapter 1- Preparations
The story wass okay. There were some creative intimate moments between Edward and Bella that I enjoyed overall. And the seconds leading up to Edward biting Bella were absolutely beautiful.
But, I was disappointed with your depictions of Edward and Bella. Edward, although not physically weak, seemed extremely weak otherwise and Bella came off as immature, impetuous, selfish, inconsiderate, irrational and vulgar.
In the Twilight series, I generally like Bella. She may or may not be physically plain, but internally she's beautiful and that makes her more physically attractive. But here she was just too ugly internally to like. In the series, Rosalie is the classic illustration of someone who may appear beautiful initially but once you get to know her, you realize she isn't because of her internal ugliness.
Also, Bella's serious disagreement with Edward was completely avoidable if she had only taken the time to think things through.
Additionally, Edward and Bella getting married and then spending their wedding night in his room at home just seemed like an uncomfortable situation. What happened to going away for their wedding night, even if it's to a hotel in a nearby town? And with the money the Cullens are supposed to have, couldn't Edward afford better?
Reviewer: bellas shrink (Signed) · Date: January 03, 2009 08:22 AM · On: Chapter 10- Decision
Hi
I loved your story - I was up until 2 am reading it!
I think what was amazing was how you captured a side of Edward (his anger, controlling nature) that had been building in the first 3 books - but then once she changed he completely changed - stopped following her, trusted her, let her leave him. As a psychologist, I had always been aware (and concerned - hell, once a shrink, always a shrink) of Edwards behavior...if the books were a TRUE story, I would have expected his control and jealousy at some time to turn to violence - so when he broke the chair I thought, "aha...that rings true." I am sure others may have been horrified, but I felt it was very read. I hope you aren't offended (everyone loves E - but I see some flaws in his character - as are in all of us - a lot of women don't want to see).
Is this finished or will we experience her change from BPOV or EPOV?
Well done!
Reviewer: Panda1499 (Signed) · Date: January 02, 2009 11:35 AM · On: Chapter 10- Decision
So I found your story yesterday, New Year's Day. I am hooked, I waited to review until I was caught up to the last chapter that had been submitted. This is very good. I literally sat reading it for 5 hours straight, i lost all track of time, staying up until almost 2:30 am even though i had to be up for work at 6 this morning. I literally had to pull myself away by turning off my wireless router to stop my internet access. Please Please update soon...
Oh and I hope you had a happy holidays and A healthy and happy 2009!
Reviewer: eviltigereye (Signed) · Date: January 02, 2009 08:04 AM · On: Chapter 1- Preparations
i only created this account to tell you that i absolutely love this story. i cannot wait to keep reading it more.
Reviewer: jemm101 (Signed) · Date: January 01, 2009 05:20 PM · On: Chapter 6- Mrs. Edward Cullen: Part IV
I've reviewed this story before, but I still love it! I've followed it for so long, and I always love your updates. Can't wait for the chapter that's going to tell us about Bella's transformation!
Reviewer: Starla ann grace (Signed) · Date: January 01, 2009 01:49 AM · On: Chapter 10- Decision
Ok this is a great story very good plot I can't wait to see how the transformation goes and How things are for Bella and Edward after. I'm excited to know if you will give Bella a special power or not I hope so she needs something cool. Any way keep up the good work and I hope you had a great holiday and a Happy New Year.
Reviewer: Twilight_Fanatic123 (Signed) · Date: December 30, 2008 11:54 AM · On: Chapter 10- Decision
Great chapter! Absolutely terrific! No need at all to be nervous - Bella changing this way was exactly how I had pictured it myself. Keep up the good work, and as always, I'll be checking in for updates every chance I get!
Reviewer: Emmybooboo (Signed) · Date: December 29, 2008 10:33 PM · On: Chapter 10- Decision
Thank you for your writing. This truly is how Breaking Dawn should have been written. I'm so glad someone posted this on my regular message board. I have loved reading every word. Please update soon!
Reviewer: erato12 (Signed) · Date: December 29, 2008 08:04 PM · On: Chapter 10- Decision
Fantastic!!! I can't wait for the next chapter(s)!! :)
Reviewer: iwantedwardtobemine (Signed) · Date: December 29, 2008 09:12 AM · On: Chapter 10- Decision
I have to say that was awesome! All the emotions were so strong and so real! The way that you kept Edward in character was amazing through this. Great job! I cant wait for more and see how Bella does, in a way I am hoping that she will do just fine and remember Edward right away. The poor guy has been through enough. Hurry back!
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