Chapter Eight: Heart of Darkness - Part Forty-Eight - About That Marriage Business
First of all, Mea Culpa for the late review. Things are all over the place with the new job. I still havent found the right balance between work and off-time. Glad I managed ot read and post this review before the next chapter though ;)
Yet again, you wrote a fantastic chapter, I really enjoyed reading it! A CC update is always a happy time :)
Such a lovely image to open this chapter. I am not sure Dalmatian dogs would be too happy with you though. Going from them to Bubonic plague victim, I can't see that going down too well ;)
And my poor little SSE! How mean of you to strike him so hard so early on *rushes over to comfort him, playing him "Hallelujah" - Jeff Buckley version of course*
Oh, and that new demon heading for Bella through Maria is just what edward needed to keep him occupied. He was gettingbored the poor soul. Wait, has he agreed he has one at this point?? He must have or we wouldn't be blessed with SSE & Jug.
Uh-uh. Talk time with the siblings. Someone should have told him to "Run, Edward, Run" for the sisterly part. The brother and elder part was much more to his taste though. See, men are easy to understand. Not complex, like women are... Uh... yeah...
Think Bella got a point across by going to sleep over at the cottage? How many times will E need to be told: You have to work at relationships. And talk. And think before you speak. Or act. Especially when an idea seems good. That's a red flag right there.
The scene in the school garden and the roses made me think of "The Little Prince" (including the part about taming the fox)
And if that isn't progress between our lovers! They are TALKING. And it's not even a planned conversation. Kuddos CCE!! You didn't put your foot in your mouth once this time. It was a good talk, explaining things further to Bella about who's who and the why's. *getting the out to cheer on CCE*
Although I guess I can understand where it is coming from, Arria's comment about only perfect ones being turned and Bella being a freak is still outrageous from a mum. Or is there another reading to be done? Like her being turned by and for her true love? I wouldn't put it past you ;)
Aaw, poor CCE turned into the bullseye of the food fight target. Teens are mean. I felt really bad for him. Very nice of erik to go mke sure he was ok though. CCE might be able to soon add "making friends" to his list of skills.
And Bella is slowly but surely "cracking" the No-Edward shell she's built aorund her (ok, she had good reasons to put it up and it can't magically disappear overnight, but still. It's good to see it thinning).
I get a Team E vibe from Carlisle, Esme and Marcus during their meeting with Mrs Corelli. Kudos once again to E for remaining polite to her when she asked what was going on with Bella.
So much can be said about Bella's ordeal. And i am sure you will in times yet to come. E is caught in a bad place with her offer. That does not bode well with his own plans for getting her back. Now he can only fake have her... Just like he intended to at first before it all turned real. Oh the irony of it!! Whoever said love was a bed of roses need their head checked.
Ummm... A marriage proposal?! In those circumstances?? You're evil, Woman! In the best possible way. I didn't see it coming. Not at that point, at least. And those words come out effortlessly from E's mouth too... Wow! Speechless. How's my dear little rocker SSE feeling about it? Has he had his tux cleaned yet? I bet he's got a whole folder of appropriate readings, hymns and so on at the ready for the event.
Oh, and I love the bending on one knee to... tie the shoes and soartaproposingatthesametime. Clever! 2 for the price of one LOL And no one amongst the B-E-show audience is the wiser about the proposal. Sneaky!
I really enjoyed (yep, I enjoyed lots of things lol) the B/E interaction where he explains people's behaviour regarding some of the "lies". It puts a whole different perspective on things for Bella doesn't it? There are always 2 or more sides to a story, and how one feels about things can also turn it into something completely different from what it really is.
Killing Jasper?! Bella was trumly out of it! Maybe she could have come with an alternative like feel miserable around him to affect his own mood? LOL Killing is a bit extreme. Though I am surprised she seems to have given up on the idea rather easily.
And so the problems keep rolling in... Poor edward really needs a bucketful of good luck charms doesn't he? *sigh* He still manage to get some pressed-against-Bella time out of his latest "complication" though. The silver lining to that cloud.
And E in bed with B, kissing her collarbone? Naughty, naughty!! The boundaries are crumbling, sort of. And SSE didn't even bat an eye. Was he busy looking at potential suitable undergarment for His little Peach on their wedding day? ;)
Great writing, Books, as always :)
Until next time, my friend!!
Hi there, hon,
No worries on the timing. I am always honored when someone writes a review. And wow! You have given me such fantastic feedback. I'd gladly wait any amount of time to hear your thoughts. :) Hope all goes well with the new job.
When I started this story, one of the things that I was trying to get across at the beginning of the HOD is that for all their vegetarian ways, the Cullens treated humans as "other". And in so doing, they were using a lighter form of the attitude that the aristocrats had. The aristocrats kept human lines alive living with their covens under guard because they wanted them to breed to continue the line. Their only value to the aristocratic Lost Coven vampires was in what kind of an immortal they would make. If one stayed human, it was because that person was not considered good enough to turn. And to me, by having Emmett portrayed as disabled, he represents an oddity in their world. Only people that were considered desirable were turned (either for looks or potential power or bloodline). And if that vampire did not come out like a "normal" vampire should, that vampire was destroyed.
So Emmett technically would be an outcast in the aristocratic world if they figured out about that whole brain damage dealio. That is why Arria did not want Bella turned. She knew that the brain damage was permanent, and that turning her daughter would never cure it. She did not want to see her daughter scorned because she loves her daughter - not because she looked down upon her. So what you are seeing in this last section is the culture clash between the Old Volturi Guard, the Lost Coven Vampires, and the Cullen philosophy of being a vampire. Arria might be cold, but she is pragmatic. She knows her daughter is painfully shy and she simply wanted to protect her. Which is why she never intended on revealing Bella's lineage to the vampire world - her Mother surprised and infuriated her on that matter. Now she's doing her best to try to help her daughter while still keeping mind that her daughter is fragile and she has a lot to learn about humans.
In my mind, Edward is always a gentleman in public with women. Even if he doesn't have gentlemanly thoughts. So I liked having him be all overly mannered with Mrs. Corelli. When I read the books, the whole bargaining part just did not make sense to me given Bella's characterization. If she unconditionally loves Edward, why would she be so cruel to insist that he had to be the one to turn her. If he turned her and failed - and killed her Edward would be in eternal agony. So I had a different take on how that deal came to be. I wanted it to be thought up hastily - coming out of a long simmering conflict. And thanks for the "you're evil" flattery :) I wanted that to surprise people - I'm glad it did.
Writing that scene was so challenging in terms of trying to explain all the nonverbal behaviors that they were "acting" so that the people outside the room could not figure out what was going on. So for me him going down on bended knee was meant to show several things at once. First, he's trying to propose to her honorably to make up for the last time - and he's trying to do so while livid, confused, and hurt. Second, he's hiding his face in her shins tying her bootlaces because he feels rejected. He's also hiding the proposal from his family because he thinks since she's drugged that she'll most likely change her mind. And he's most definitely not going to do a "We're engaged" given their past - if that was not what Bella really wanted.
I'm glad you liked the conversation about lies in Bella's life. To me Bella is flawed because she's like all other humans, inconsistent in who she forgives. I've had her refusing to have any contact with Renee throughout the story after she learned about her brain injury and their lying about it to show that. She really did forgive Edward and Leah when they asked. Now reconciliation is an entirely other issue. And trying to repair a relationship when you find out that so many people have lied to you for so long - I wanted to show the damage that it did to Bella. And I wanted to have Edward making her think. Edward at the beginning of the HOD arc would not have been bothered by her feeling anger towards the late Clearwaters. He would have decided that it would be easier for her to mourn them if she could dismiss them from her mind. I wanted that section to show just how much he has grown, too.
Bella was out of it with the whole killing Jasper part - but she's also scared out of her mind. She already had to deal with Victoria. She's petrified about Maria. Her giving up on the idea was meant to show her being just a wee bit irrational and drugged - another reason why Edward is thinking she'll change her mind. You are the only person who has caught him kissing her when he thinks he can get away with it. Five gold stars for you. :)