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Reviewer: Starnani21 (Signed) · Date: February 23, 2011 09:03 PM · On: Chapter 4: Homework Was Never Supposed To Be This Much Fun
!!!! What the hell did he do??!!!! The entire cheek??!!!! Ahhhhh!!!! I would be absolutely mortified!!!! And, it took him way too long to react if Mike was able to see her blushing ass!!!!!!!! Ahhhhh!!!! I can't get this smile off my face! Really! Too funny!
Author's Response: Hi there Starnani21!
Yes, he ripped off the entire left buttock of her jeans. And yes, I would be too. And just because he's a vampire doesn't mean that he's going to react to everything in immortal time. He was stunned at what had happened. I'll let you in on a little secret about me. I have a sick, twisted sense of humor. So thinking up this chapter I pondered the notion: How can I get Edward stripping Bella (partially) in public without her being in physical danger (like on fire) in a way where he thinks he has the moral high ground? Hmmmmmm And I dreamed this up. I liked the idea because Tanya's joke was intended to be on Edward. On him walking around and freaking out that a) he looked at that part of Bella, and b) that he was in the store with Tanya's costume winking at him from Bella's pants. Tanya thought, Edward being Edward that he'd rip off his coat and cover Bella up. She never dreamed he'd tear her clothes off. She's shaking her head in wonder at the stupidity of the boy. Really *tsks*
Glad you enjoyed the chapter. Thanks so much for the review!
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Reviewer: Starnani21 (Signed) · Date: February 22, 2011 10:09 PM · On: Chapter 2: The Bachelor Party: Survival of the B!tchfest - Part Two
That was too funny!!!
Author's Response: Hi Starnani21!
Thanks so much! It makes me smile that you are enjoying my sick, depraved sense of humor. :) LOL.
There's more. Much more.
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Reviewer: Starnani21 (Signed) · Date: February 22, 2011 09:01 PM · On: Chapter 1 - Tanya and the Bachelor Party Bet
You were not exaggerating about these early chapters being funny as all hell!
Bella is quite a peach.
Tany is wonderful.
But, to have your wedding be the talk of the vampire world is a bit too much. I don't like crowds very much. Especially ones that are staring at me and that I know are talking about me.
(shivers)
Author's Response: Hi there Starnai21!
Thanks so much for the review! I'm delighted that you are enjoying the story. I really enjoyed writing the front chapters in particular. So many fanfictions use Tanya as the evil wench trying to seduce Edward and make her a cardboard character. Don't get me wrong, in this story she's trying to do that as a bet, but not because she sincerely feels anything for him. She just doesn't understand how he could tell her "no" and *gasp* mean it. She is outright hysterical in the rest of the story once you hit the Heart of Darkness arc.
And because of the Volturi being invited, yeah, Edward and Bella's wedding is the talk of the vampire world and Bella and Edward both are cringing at the idea. I've written both of them as extremely shy characters. I'd be shivering right along with you.
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Reviewer: notmyself (Signed) · Date: February 22, 2011 07:38 AM · On: Prologue: Bella, Sex, and Privacy
I got it. And now I love you even more you devious, wretched wench.
~Mia
Author's Response: Ah, but I bet my love for you is stronger. LOL! You are, after all, my muse for naming characters. If you go to the story thread, I posted another teaser at A Different Forest, and I left the link to it on the thread. I will, of course, post something later specifically for Twilighted, too.
FitzCarrion is winking at you.
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Reviewer: notmyself (Signed) · Date: February 22, 2011 05:54 AM · On: Chapter Eleven: Undead Man Whimpering
You, my dear, darling woman, kick serious ass. A lot. A lot, a lot. I have been forlorn without easy access to internet as of late. Especially when missing your most entertaining prose. Thank you for this. I am biting my fingers in anticipation.
~Mia
Author's Response: Hi there Mia!
Thanks so much for the review! I am sorry to hear that you haven't had Internet access lately. Jugurtha and the FitzFlock have missed you! I will be sending you your teaser through the Twilighted PM system. If you do not get it within the hour, please tweet me
@bookishqua
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Reviewer: shifterwriterpixie (Signed) · Date: February 20, 2011 10:36 AM · On: Chapter 5: Indecent Exposure at the Thriftway on Aisle Three: Shameless Hussy Part Three
As I've said before, you're story and writing enthrall me. If given a choice between reading the original series or reading your rewrite, I'd pick your everytime. It's more imaginitive and holds my attention better than the original and that's saying something because a year ago I would have told you that Stehpanie Meyer's Twilight series were my most favorite books ever... that is until I stumbled upon your fanfiction. Love your writing.
Cassie
Cassie@cassieblack.com
www.cassieblack.com
Author's Response: Hi Cassie,
thanks so much for the review and the stars! I am delighted that you are enjoying Cullenary Coupling. I have had so much fun writing it. :) I do think that when it comes to fanfiction that people who write it do have an advantage over the author in that they can take the original source material and add more to it. The author's work is sealed in time on a printed page.
I'm reading Cate Tiernan's Sweep series. You might want to check it out.
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Reviewer: akemi (Signed) · Date: February 19, 2011 07:48 PM · On: Chapter Eleven: Undead Man Whimpering
there's so much to touch on. i wish i could sit here and type it out but i can't. i neglected my hw to read this chapter. will the honeymoon plan work or will edward actually penterate bella??? awesome chapter.
Author's Response: Hi there akemi!
Thanks so much for the review and the stars! You can always PM me if you have a question that you don't have time to ask right now. I understand you have some homework waiting for you *wags finger* LOL! School comes first! Remember that.
And you know me well enough to know that I never spill future plot secrets any other question about the story is fair game. I will, however, be delighted to send you a teaser for the next chapter. It is going to come through the Twilighted PM system. If you don't get it within the hour please tweet me
@bookishqua
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Reviewer: akemi (Signed) · Date: February 19, 2011 01:37 PM · On: Chapter Ten: Revenge is a Dish Best Served Bold
aww hell!!!
Author's Response: Hi there akemi!
Thanks so much for the review and the stars! Keep reading. You'll thank me later. mwa-hah-hah.
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Reviewer: TraceyJ (Signed) · Date: February 19, 2011 01:18 PM · On: Chapter Eleven: Undead Man Whimpering
Can't wait for more....... Wheew. My head is still spinning.
Author's Response: Hi there TraceyJ!
Thanks so much for the review! I have the chapter (next one) open right now and am working on it. I am going to send you the teaser through the Twilighted PM system. If you do not get it within the hour, please tweet me @bookishqua
And I don't have a lot of experience writing love scenes, so thanks for the feedback. :) I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter.
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Reviewer: missscarlettbelle (Signed) · Date: February 19, 2011 05:48 AM · On: Chapter Eleven: Undead Man Whimpering
It feels like I have been reading this story forever. I don't know how you manage to top yourself chapter after chapter. I love how detailed your writing is. I admit I rarely review stories and even when authors promise teasers and such I still don't. But I'm so hungry to read more of this story that I am breking my silence. Thanks for another wonderful chapter!!!!
Author's Response: Well, hello there, misscarlettbelle!
Thanks so much for the review and the stars! And since it has been a little over two years since I first started posting, I completely understand the "feels like forever" sensation. It feels like I've been writing it forever, too. :) We are, however, coming to the last section of the story. I am honored that you came out of lurkdom to review my chapter. As a writer, it really helps me understand if the ideas that I wanted to get across were interpreted in the manner that I hoped. And even leaving me a :) lets me know that I am on the right track. I will be PMing you the teaser through the Twilighted PM system. If you do not get it within the hour, please tweet me @bookishqua
I understand the reluctance to review, really, I do. I have had some authors that went bonkers when I left them a review because they weren't open to constructive criticism - even if the review had praise as well. So I tend to review on smaller stories. Or I scan through the review responses at Twilighted to see how an author treats her/his readers. Your voice matters. Don't let anyone tell you otherwise.
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Jugurtha is leering at you.
Reviewer: shifterwriterpixie (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2011 07:43 PM · On: Chapter 6: Lies, Dreams, and Schemes
I'm rereading this story for the fourth time in a row. I actually like it more than the originals--and that's saying something because I'm one of SM's number one fan girls. It's because of her I want to try writing young adult as well as paranormal romance. Anyway, another great chapter, I can't wait to get to the end. Hopefully the next chapter will be up by the time I reach the end again.
Author's Response: Hi there shifterwriterpixie!
Oh hon, you totally made my day. I am beyond flattered that you find my story interesting enough to read more than once, much less four times. Oh my stars. :) I don't know when the last time you read the story, but I did a lot of editing on the front end. I rewrote three chapters and I added in some scenes to the HOD one chapter that had dialog because I had a reader suggest that it would improve the chapter (and I agreed). I have added about 2k to the current chapter although I dont' have a goal in mind for how long it will be. I'll be writing this weekend and you do have my word that I will get the chapter posted as soon as I can, although I don't see it going up for at least a week if not slightly longer. To me, this is the most crucial section of the plot, so I want to make sure I get it right.
Thanks for making my day! I look forward to your feedback.
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Reviewer: Hecta (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2011 06:29 AM · On: Chapter Eleven: Undead Man Whimpering
Another awesome chapter.
I thoroughly enjoyed seeing the maternal side of Arria. I think most mothers would agree that threatening castration is an appropriate way to convey displeasure with the enemies of your offspring.
So Lucius got him a Telecles female after all, I'm not sure who I feel more sorry for, Arria as she is stuck with him for eternity or Edward who now has him as a father-in-law!
I know I have voiced my opinion on the Vulcan nerve pinch plan numerous times but thinking about it wasn't half as disturbing as actually reading it. Carlisle, Jasper and Emmett perched in the bushes giving Edward mental pointers (Emmett) and doing an impression of a countdown timer (Jasper and Carlisle) was disturbing beyond measure. Although as always it was written in such a way that you can't help but want to read more. As with Edward, if this story was written by any other author we would have quit reading the first time Bella was referred to as ‘My Human', let's face it Edward was a total douche for most of the HOD arc and I'm sure I wasn't the only person hoping to see him smacked around a little, but you wrote it. Something about your writing and the abundance of snark makes it so much fun to read.
Favourite line - ‘My brothers and Father were literally going to lurk in the shrubbery like perverts and make sure I did not kill my bride' Oh yeah, there are no words for how disturbing that image is.
Author's Response: Hi there Hecta!
Thanks so much for the review and the stars! Arria is definitely got some maternal instincts buried deep down inside of her. They just come out in ways that surprise Edward. She also has, off page, been spending more time with Esme in order to learn about modern parenting. Not that her throwing Lucius to the ground had anything to do with Esme's influence - let's be clear - although Edward does have a point in that Esme would not disagree with those actions. Don't feel sorry for Arria at all. If Lucius steps out of line or irritates her, she can always kill him herself. Lucius has been welcomed into the family but not welcomed into the family by King Larce. He's going to have to work his backside off to earn the good graces of the Telecles family.
I don't disagree with you on how disturbing the Vulcan pinch nerve plan is. I meant for it to be interpreted that way. What Edward is doing is wrong. In the chapter you read, he's starting to back out of it bit-by-bit by making concessions that in his mind make it easier for him to justify what he's doing: not letting his family see Bella naked, keeping her on the staircase to properly kiss her, and then blocking the family from hearing, not opening the curtains wider, etc. Edward feels that he has no option. So the question I have for you - put yourself in the shoes of an extremely shy repressed male from his era. And remember, this is Edward so you have to keep him in character with what I've established. What else could you see him doing given the situation? He has blinders on formed by his attitudes and views, and he perceives the world through them. And I do agree with you on Edward's behavior in much of the HOD arc: the whole point of it was to show his evolution. Don't make the mistake of thinking that when the arc ended that Edward had learned everything he needed to learn. heh heh.
Thanks so much for trusting me on this and not running screaming into the woods. I am sending you the teaser on the Twilighted PM system. If you do not get it within the hour, please tweet me @bookishqua
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Reviewer: Hecta (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2011 03:24 AM · On: Chapter Ten: Revenge is a Dish Best Served Bold
Another awesome chapter.
Holy Hamburgers I wasn't expecting that end to a chapter! I am so glad I don't have to wait to read the next chapter as I think the suspense of that cliffy would have finished me off.
Gaia is the master of revenge. I half hoped that everyone would see the crone version if Tanya but the reactions would have made the lesson redundant as she would have holed up in a cave somewhere to avoid the screams.
I loved it when Jugurtha aped the ‘Twice. Professional' line. It is guaranteed to make me laugh and groan simultaneously whenever Edward says that and to have Jugurtha use it was brilliant.
Favourite line - ‘My cousin really was demented. Or stupid. Or both.' My vote is for both.
Author's Response: Hi there Hecta!
Thanks for the review and the stars! See you make an excellent point about Gaia's revenge. If I had everyone else see Tanya in the crone form, then Tanya would just run away and hide. And yes that would bother her to no end, but her punishment would be muted. This way is so much more fun. because everyone else can see Tanya on the outside as her lovely slightly sagging in one boob self - except Tanya. Tanya for the record is just so horrified and emotionally numb that it will probably take a few weeks for what she went through to process. But Gaia has Tanya over a barrell for eternity. If Tanya EVER screws up again, she's going to have that punishment forever. Don't think Tanya doesn't know that Gaia means business. I also liked Gaia pointing out to Tanya that she's wasted years of her immortality being shallow. Tanya would like to think of herself as bringing knowledge to the masses and Gaia yanks that image right out from under her feet. I also liked that in the confrontation with Arria and the Gorgon, they also held Kate and Irina accountable for not interfering and stopping Tanya. I have a group of readers that just love the Doctor. Twice. Professional line, And it's been challenging to find new ways to use it without beating a dead horse, so to speak. So I'm glad you liked me having Jugurtha use it in this chapter. I do so love Edward's mental snarky commentary about the abilities of others - particularly Tanya. Glad you do, too. :)
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Reviewer: Hecta (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2011 02:22 AM · On: Chapter Nine: Married With Issues: Hair Pulling Has Never Been This Much Fun
Another awesome chapter.
I'm very excited to be read the new chapters, it took longer than I planned to re-read the front arc and although it was fun it is good to be reading new material.
Dear Lord Tanya is an idiot. She is about to be reduced to ash by a VERY pissed off ancient yet she's griping about not being in the ‘Edward is all kinds of gifted and can turn into a giant Wolfpire, no seriously, don't piss him off' loop. She and Jacob would make a great couple if they could get over the stench. They are equally stupid.
A well deserved round of applause for Great Grandmother Gaia for her impeccable timing and dramatic flair in snatching Tanya from the Gorgons grasp and spiriting her away to her cave of gloom. I can only hope she has managed to have her land in a huge pile a excrement upon her arrival. What can I say, I'm petty that way.
Favourite line - "Yellow-hair laughing mean slut fights poor." Not only has her English improved but her character definitions are pretty impressive too. I hope she doesn't stop calling Bella Sweet Girl though, I love that.
Author's Response: Hi there Hecta!
Thanks so much for reading the new chapters! And the review and the stars! I was a little worried when I noticed that they weren't getting the hits that they usually do on this site. They did fine over at ff.net. I wanted to "show" how Tanya, by her own biases, landed herself in this situation. She and her sisters refused to allow just about everyone except Carlisle and Eleazar and Carmen (if they had a really good reason) to ever mention the Volturi around them because a) they are still angry at how their Mother was executed, and b) They had the attitude that their rage would cool if they didn't have to hear about the Volturi. But in so doing, they cut themselves out of key information that they needed. They did not know about Bella's ancestry which all the immortal world was buzzing about because no one was willing to risk their wrath to tell them - except their other coven members and blithely Tanya was not returning Eleazar's phone calls because she was busy trying to clean up the damage that Phoenix had caused - in part to avoid having the Volturi pay them a visit. Ironic, eh? So it's her own fault she wasn't in the information loop about Edward. Had Tanya any idea who Bella really was, she never in a million years would have played the joke on her and Edward that she did. Okay fine, that's horse hockey - she would have played a joke, but it would have been less mean and done in private. I wanted to "show" with their reaction to Tanya's prank that the Telecles clan stands up for Bella. I wanted to "show" Arria caring about her daughter's emotional needs even if she has an odd way of doing that. and I just love Great-Grandmother Gaia. She's so much fun. Tanya only knows that Marcus' Mother is reputed to be some deranged priestess. She has no idea who she really is.
And Grace - yeah I will never have her stop calling Bella Sweet Girl. Her English will always be rough. I have fun thinking of lines for her to say since she rarely speaks aloud to Edward.
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Reviewer: Hecta (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2011 01:09 AM · On: Chapter 7: The Webers - Flowers and Pasties for Jesus
Another awesome chapter.
I laughed my ass off from the moment Emmett opened his mouth to Tanya's declaration that she's a born-again Christian. At that point I fell off my chair I was laughing so hard. My neighbours probably thought there was a Sea-lion loose in my house with the noise I was making.
Favourite line - ‘Oh fuuuhhhh-" he bit off an oath, "um, sorry Rose. I mean shit. I mean...." He stopped talking as his mate put her fingers on his lips. "I'll be a good boy," emerged muffled from him.' As eloquent as ever Emmett.
Author's Response: Hi there Hecta!
Thanks so much for the review and the stars! I had entirely too much fun with Emmett and Tanya in this chapter. I'm delighted that you enjoyed it. I liked the irony of Tanya trying to pull the wool over the Webers' eyes and them seeing right through her.
And Emmett is always a joy to write. :)
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Reviewer: Hecta (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2011 12:40 AM · On: Chapter 6: Lies, Dreams, and Schemes
Another awesome chapter.
I had wondered when the mushrooms were introduced whether this chapter would be hugely different. I loved the reactions of the Pak when I read this chapter the first time and I was worried that the amnesia effects would negate the opportunity to see their horrified puppy faces. Also I was worried I wouldn't get to hear my all time favourite line - ‘I'm going to need therapy for life. Quill hold me.' God Bless Seth.
Author's Response: Hi there Hecta!
Thanks so much for the reviews and the stars! And I cannot thank you enough for re-reading the chapters to give me your impression now that you've finished the HOD arc. I had intended on revealing once the HOD arc that Jake had been influenced by drugs, but felt upon further consideration, that it should be introduced earlier. I did not want to change the way people reacted to his behavior. The pack doesn't have experience with the muchrooms that Jake was on, so they suspected he was high but didn't know for sure until Edward confirmed it. So I had no intention of cutting Seth's snarky lines. I felt like there needed to be a stronger support from the beginning as to why Jacob was acting like such a jerk. He doesn't really love Bella. And when his father passed, it secretly relieved him because it got the pressure that Billy had been putting on him off his back. But children always long for the approval of the parent that rejects them - and Jake when drugged reverted back to channeling the hogwash that Billy fed him. I would hazard to guess that if Jake actually did carry out his plan while drugged and managed somehow to succeed that he'd be every bit as horrified as everyone else. Because he really is just not that into Bella. He doesn't hate her, but he resents her because they have a sibling rivalry vibe going on - Bella coming into town meant that Jake saw less of Charlie. But Bella coming into town also meant that Billy would pressure Jake and Jake took out his anger internally on Bella rather than Billy. Hope all that made sense. :)
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Reviewer: cin4lotr (Signed) · Date: February 17, 2011 04:59 PM · On: Chapter 7: The Webers - Flowers and Pasties for Jesus
this just keeps getting funnier & funnier!!!
Author's Response: Hi there cin4lotr!
You've reached the end of the first arc of the story. Now we're getting ready to head into Edward's point of view with the Heart of Darkness arc. Here's what I can promise you. A) Edward is a little mopey at first, but he'll get highly snarky and entertaining soon. and B) If you liked the first arc, you ain't seen nothing yet in terms of humor. You have my word. Thanks so much for reviewing!
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Reviewer: Fleuritup (Signed) · Date: February 17, 2011 04:27 PM · On: Chapter Eleven: Undead Man Whimpering
One of my favorite chapters hands down beause of the ending. I knew Lucious would stick I thought the man chosen was very appropriate flash backs to his hottness in The mummy. That man is FINE! anyway kinda upset that stinkygrams used them as bait. But I guess it was necessary. I can honestly say I was surprised at arriah or whoever it was that accepted Lucious' hand as the bride that was promised. I was like"Hell to tha No!" not after all that drama of him trying to kill edward. But hey as long as its still Bella and Edward together I can't complain. I didn't like that Marcus didn't know what one of his men was doing,(tormenting Bella) It makes sooo much sense now how she was just dead inside and not really opening up to edward. Didn't like that his family was outside of the house while he was about to satisfy bella. Very uncomfortable(I know its for her safety) But I'm like Edward focus on bella and not the minds of your family outside. Loved the long awaited I love you, you too. Seriously made my day. Great chapter. Looking forward to more details and no freaking fade to black moments.
Author's Response: Hi there Fleuritup!
Thanks so much for the review! And I enjoyed using the reference to stinkygrams in the snarky summary. That was an awesome term. :) Thanks for letting me use it. I'm glad you liked the picture I selected for Lucius. I totally agree with you. I watched the mummy movies for him. He also had a series on US tv for a brief amount of time that was, if possible even hotter. *sigh* Lucius is blinking all innocently and saying he didn't really *try* to kill Edward, he just had to sell it to Marcus' family that he had every intention of *trying* - because if he really wanted Edward dead, well, he would be. *blinks* Lucius was using it as a power move to "show" the Telecles clan that a) he had powerful resources on his side, and b) he wanted a Telecles bride like they promised. Or else. The fact that Marcus let him live should indicate to you that they see some purpose in Lucius and feel that they can control the situation. You are confused on Perdiccas (the seer that tormented Bella). He was NEVER Marcus' man. He was raised as Lucius' foster brother and worked as Lucius' seer. Lucius had absolutely no idea that Perdiccas was tormenting Bella. He never would have stood for it. Perdiccas was following the will of the goddess whispering in his will - he would have gone after Bella regardless of Lucius' wishes because he craved power. Being Lucius' seer all those years gave him an appetite and he wanted more. He honestly thought that his plan (Kill all the Telecles females) would get his foster brother in charge and they would both share the glory. Marcus had no idea that this was happening. Bella never told anyone. That's part of why she was so hostile towards Edward when he came back. She thought it was Perdiccas playing mind games with her. I completely agree with you that Edward's family being outside is just squicky. I wrote that to "show" just how far Edward has painted himself in a corner with his lying by omission. He, who is so very private, who is so protective of Bella, because he cannot open up and admit his sexual problems, fears that Bella would leave him if she knew. So he's trying to "please" everyone while his conscience is stinging him. That's why he makes sure that his family never sees her naked. That's why he's blocked them from hearing anything. That's why he has the two of them underneath blankets in the chilly house - and why he's not going to open the curtains. Despite all of the things that he's doing, Edward is very aware that it's wrong. So we'll have to wait and see how the situation works out. Thanks so much for reading.
I am sending you the teaser through the Twilighted PM system. If you do not get it within the hour, please tweet me @bookishqua
Thanks so much for reading and supporting my story. If you have any further questions that I can answer, please drop me a line.
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Reviewer: brandella14 (Signed) · Date: February 17, 2011 03:53 PM · On: Chapter Eleven: Undead Man Whimpering
I haven't read this story yet. It's been in my favorites for over a year now but I don't want to start reading it until it's completed. I will go crazy if something happens and I don't get to see how it ends. I'm very excited to read it though. I usually look at your author's notes to see if you mention how much longer it will be before it's completed. Since this is the honeymoon, I'm thinking I won't have too much longer to wait =) I don't want to miss out on a scene that won't be posted anywhere else though so please send me your preview. This will be tricky..I will be super tempted to read the preview but won't want to ruin the story so I will once again force myself to wait to read it until I actually get to the end of this chapter when I read this story and will then read your preview. Hope that made sense. Your story has me very excited to read it and your ratings just keep getting better.
Author's Response: Well, hi there brandeela14!
Thanks so much for the review and the stars! I'm flattered that you've followed my story for this long. I wrote the vast majority of it two years ago and have been editing it ever since. I can assure you that this story will be completed. It's over a million words long, and the majority of it is not skimmable, so you are safe to start reading it. I'm happy to send you the teaser. I also offered a teaser if people reviewed the "About that Marriage business" chapter - actually it's not a teaser it's a satire of Bella's Diary from BPOV (The majority of this story is told in EPOV - and the Diary is Fake, but funny).
Aside from telling people that we are nearing the end of the story, you will never see me get specific as to how many chapters are left in an AN. I don't want to disappoint people if I write more - they'd end up feeling jerked around because I promised them X number of chapters and then kept writing. I can tell you that we are nearing the end of the story - and you are right as we are on the honeymoon - we are in a key section of the climax of the plot.
I'm going to send you the teaser on the Twilighted PM system. If you do not get it, please feel free to tweet me @bookishqua
Feel free to follow me as well. When I am done with the story, I will tweet that, as well.
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Reviewer: modern_audrey (Signed) · Date: February 17, 2011 03:50 PM · On: Chapter Eleven: Undead Man Whimpering
I enjoyed this chapter so much! That crafty Douglas...always turning up at just the wrong/right time. Interesting use of Lucius as well. Is it bad that I picture him similar to, although vaguely more threatening than, Gilderoy Lockhart? How I enjoy the image of Arria controlling his ass for all eternity.
Author's Response: Hi there modern_audrey!
Thanks so much for the review and the stars! Made my night. I do have fun dreaming up inventive situations to put Douglas in - it wouldn't work for me to have him gadding about in Edward and Bella's bedroom during that last section of the chapter, yanno? Too much on the squick factor for me. I liked that he was sending a nonverbal message to Emmett that he disagreed with what they were doing by dropping the food and leaving. Maybe Emmett can take a cue from the animal kingdom. I see Lucius as somone who was raised under the yoke of his father's legend. And to me? That really sucks. Alexander had a human military dynasty not an immortal one. So he's had to hide and build up his power over time. And Edward really pressed a button with him comparing his lack of military conquest to Alexander's history. I would say that was every bit as painful for Lucius for Edward to do that in public because a) It's true, b) It's public in front of all the aristocracy at a time he's making a power move trying to look good, and c) Edward has a reputation in the immortal world for being all but mute he talks so little. So here's Edward verbally spanking Lucius. With the truth. Ouch. Expect definitely sparks between Arria and Lucius. She is so going to keep him on his toes. Heh heh.
I am going to send the teaser through the Twilighted PM system. If you do not get it within the hour, please tweet me
@bookishqua so I can rectify the matter.
Thanks so much for reading and supporting my story. Jugurtha is leering at you. *leers*
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Reviewer: KristinHazzard (Signed) · Date: February 17, 2011 10:36 AM · On: Chapter Eleven: Undead Man Whimpering
OMG!!!! MOST EPIC CHAPTER!!! I can't beleive I just finished it today :( RL was a bitch this week, with basketball playoffs (coaching), road trip for my own hockey team, and being sick as a dog the last 2 days :(
I don't even know where to start there was just so much epicness! Loved how Badass Arria was. She certainly took one for the team! I could totally see her going praying mantis on his ass.
Do NOT mess with Miss Grace! Seriously.
SSE/Jugurtha had me howling: Starched Shirt Edward ejaculated. Verbally. Pervert. "You cannot take our dear little peach on the stairs like a trollop."
And sooooooo much growth for E/B. They were confident, talked in full paragraphs, and shared some passionate embraces. My have they come so far!
Can't wait for more :D
Author's Response: Hi there KristinHazzard!
*runs and tackles* It's so good to hear from you. Jugurtha has been pining lately. I'm sorry to hear that you had a rough week, take care of yourself! I hope you feel better soon. I can totally see Arria being a window, too, truth be told. Although Lucius does have a certain charm about him that she is finding amusing.
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Reviewer: mousekemom (Signed) · Date: February 17, 2011 09:40 AM · On: Chapter Eleven: Undead Man Whimpering
Okay, so I finally got hubby reading it and it has been ages since I started the story, so now I am confused...it seems silly and a totally different story up to chapter 8, the you get into this whole crazy family and vampire relatives story, but then you have the grocery story pasty thing come up in the story just recently. I am a little lost on the sudden shift between chapter 7 and 8. Is it because we are really seeing what Edward is like and how he has been hiding, or could the first 7 be a separate story that was revamped into the masterpiece it now is? Sorry that sudden change is a little blurry and I am trying to get it. Thanks for sharing your talent with us!
Author's Response: Hi there mousekemom!
Thanks so much for the review! The way that this story is set up is that it starts out in 3rd person limited point of view. So we get to see a bit into the minds of many of the characters. And I set up a situation of conflict (Tanya, pastie-gate, Vulcan-pinch nerve plan, Bella having nightmares and not talking about them), and then went back to the beginning of the story from Edward's point of view in the Heart of Darkness arc. We finished that arc a few chapters back. Now we are picking up where the first arc finished off - with solving the problem of Tanya, getting the couple married, etc, in order to finish the story. We will stay in Edward's point of view for the rest of the story. The entire point of the Heart of Darkness arc was to show you all that Edward had been hiding, yes, you are exactly right on that score - but also from his point of view all that Bella had been hiding as well. Since the first seven chapters start off about 3/4ths of the way through the story and almost two years later we have finally returned to that section of the story, I had to go back and edit the first arc in order to make sure that the characterizations presented there were in line with the ones in the more recent chapters. As CC evolved in my mind, the characters did change a bit, and I hope my writing improved. So I went in and edited all the front arc chapters. They were intentionally written to be skimmable, so you might want to go back and re-read that section. If you have any other questions please feel free to ask. I will be sending you your teaser through the Twilighted PM system. If you do not get it within the hour, please tweet me @bookishqua
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Reviewer: vampiremom1221 (Signed) · Date: February 16, 2011 07:46 PM · On: Chapter Eleven: Undead Man Whimpering
I am too curious as to what their plan is and how they are going to carry it out. I do think it a bit odd that Edward would agree to having the boys watch outside the bedroom while he pretends to have sex with Bella. Oh well we do what we have to right. I can't help but to wonder if their plan will somehow not work and Bella will still walk away a happy woman along with a very well satisfied Edward. I am intrigued. As for the whole Arria and Lucious thing you have to commend a mama who will marry to help out her little girl. Even if she is a Teleclese woman. I loved the whole chapter and I anxiously await more. Until then.
Author's Response: Hi there vampiremom1221!
I agree with you that it is highly out of character for Edward to engage in such behavior. That's why he went out of his way to make sure that they could not see Bella unclothed, and cut off their ability to hear. He's having major second thoughts. He agreed to the plan out of desperation. Now that the time has come to put it in action, he's a wreck. Glad you enjoyed the chapter. I'm having too much fun with these characters. Arria is preening at present.
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Reviewer: fanficreader83 (Signed) · Date: February 16, 2011 04:26 PM · On: Chapter Eleven: Undead Man Whimpering
I love where you take this story. Hopefully Arria will make things interesting for her new husband! ;)
Bella and Edward certainly have faced a lot from the immortal world. They have come so far. Edward was even somewhat truthful, about his fantasy anyway and not the damage said fantasy being carried out could lead to. I am curious to see if Edward's plan will play out or if the often underestimated Bella will deal with things in her own way. Edward was warned not to count her out too quickly. Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Hi there fanficreader83,
Arria is smiling widely at the moment after reading your comment over my shoulder. I'm too terrified of her to look more than once. Methinks Lucius is in for the ride of his life. heh heh. Not that ride. Pervert. I like the point you make about Edward's progress and how he is finally getting around to telling Bella the truth. His main sin all along has been lies of omission. He appears to have learned. Somewhat. He also appears to have finally appreciated just how much Bella means to him. At this point in the game, his mind is still very much focused on the "she could leave me, if I don't kinda sorta keep the deal," as he is trying to have his Bella and not eat her too. (Gosh that was a bad pun. I think it's going in to the next snarky summary. You're inspiring me tonight). Ah, the things we do for love. Stay tuned for more antics with the next chapter of CC.
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Reviewer: cin4lotr (Signed) · Date: February 15, 2011 01:40 PM · On: Chapter 5: Indecent Exposure at the Thriftway on Aisle Three: Shameless Hussy Part One
oh god that was hilarious!!! i am really glad u warned me not to drink while reading,,,,, i would have probably shorted out my laptop LMAO!!! i love Aro!!
Author's Response: Hi there cin4lotr!
Aro is a hoot in this story. I'm delighted you are enjoying him. You're about ready to hit the backstory. Edward will be gloomy in HOD one but he gets snarky and hilarious right after that. Thanks for reviewing!
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