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Reviewer: Melolabel (Signed) · Date: February 04, 2009 06:36 PM · On: Chapter 8: Home

Love it.  so cute as usual.  Can't wait for more!

Reviewer: gordonfan74 (Signed) · Date: February 04, 2009 06:34 PM · On: Chapter 8: Home

Thank you so much for the update!  It was a very bright spot in an otherwise gloomy day for me.  I am still loving this story so much.  With each chapter you write I become more endeared to the story as a whole.  I sincerely appreciate the fact that you are taking time in developing the plot and especially the relationships.  In regards to the relationships in particular, I enjoy how you provided a little backstory on Bella's evolvement with the other characters, but didn't go into exasperatingly long detail.  While I care about Bella's friendships with Alice and Jasper, Emmett and Rosalie, I don't need the finite details of every single thing they say and do with each other.  You have done an exceptional job at emphasizing the importance of those friendships, in relation to Bella's settling in to the new area, without inundating the reader with mundane details.  The story focus is on Edward and Bella and I like that very much. You really are quite good at incorporating everyone into the story without detering from the main characters and plot points.

I liked the fact that both perspectives were contained within this one chapter.  It was a nice change of pace, but when things start to get more complex I am not certain it would be conducive.  Either way, it really worked well with this chapter.  The text message banter is playful and cute and I love the whole interaction.  As Bella so eloquently stated in her soliloquy, it is often times a whole lot easier to say what you feel when not having to look someone in the eye.  Texting has facilitated very open face to face conversation between Bella and Edward as well.  It has allowed Bella to get more comfortable with Edward, to the point she has mention her failed relationship with Jacob to him.  She is building trust and that has been lacking in her life for awhile now. 

I know that when this story began, the summary indicated that Edward and Bella struggle to remain only friends because Edward has concerns about becoming more involved with his niece's teacher.  At least it was something to that affect.  I don't know if your plans are to maintain that basis or not, but I thought I saw some glimpses of that being mentioned again in this chapter, what with Lilly slipping up in class and distinguishing between Ms. Swan and Uncle Eddie's Ms. Swan.  Seems the little one is having a hard time not being Ms. Swan's potential niece Lilly in school since she interacts with her so much outside of school.  Not that this whole ramble has really anything to do with the chapter per say, but I still just wondered if that will become a bigger issue later and potentially a source for problems between Edward and Bella or not.  Maybe I am just searching for some foreshadowing and reading way to much into something that may or may not even be there. 

I am so anxious to read more.  What will drinks lead to?  Perhaps a loose lipped Bella spilling the beans to an over curious Edward about Jacob?  Perhaps a loose lipped inebriated Bella getting all loose lipped on Uncle Eddie?  We will see.  Please update soon. 

Reviewer: historicvampirelover (Signed) · Date: February 04, 2009 06:25 PM · On: Chapter 8: Home

I love the relationship that they are building - their friendship and the slow opening up is sweet and realistic.

Love it.

Reviewer: sarawthouttheh (Anonymous) · Date: February 04, 2009 06:23 PM · On: Chapter 8: Home

I was so excited to see this update tonight!  I think what hooked me to this story first was Lilly... but now the adorable texting has me falling in love with it all over again.  I loooove texting.  Well done!

Reviewer: offthenet (Signed) · Date: February 04, 2009 06:20 PM · On: Chapter 8: Home

I love their banter. Excepting the little Jake drama, it was such a lovely, light-hearted chapter. Ah, young love!

Reviewer: McQueen (Signed) · Date: February 04, 2009 06:11 PM · On: Chapter 8: Home

It is about time you updated. Great background info, but I am still waiting on some real action versus casual flirting.

Reviewer: Cristygen (Signed) · Date: February 04, 2009 06:07 PM · On: Chapter 8: Home

Awww, could they be anymore cute together!

I can't wait until their first kiss. :P

Reviewer: PLV (Signed) · Date: February 04, 2009 06:07 PM · On: Chapter 8: Home

Good chapter. I like the sensitive Edward. He really loves his niece. Update soon. PLV

Reviewer: bellagirl (Signed) · Date: February 04, 2009 06:06 PM · On: Chapter 8: Home

Awwwwwww those 2 are in love already and don't even know it! It's obvious to everyone.... Even Lily!

Reviewer: Bumblebee (Signed) · Date: January 25, 2009 03:11 PM · On: Chapter 7: You're Right

Update! Its cute =]

Will Emmett and Rosalie be in it? Or Carlisle and Esme?

Reviewer: Clancy67 (Signed) · Date: January 18, 2009 02:45 PM · On: Chapter 7: You're Right

I love this story!! I just finished reading all the chapters posted so far and I'm in love. Fantastic writing! I can't wait to read more. Thanks for sharing your talents.

Reviewer: Clancy67 (Signed) · Date: January 18, 2009 02:00 PM · On: Chapter 2: Doing The Best I Can

I really love this story so far!

Reviewer: Clancy67 (Signed) · Date: January 18, 2009 01:55 PM · On: Chapter 1: But Not For Me

How adorable. I love the idea of a little Alice! Can't wait to read more.

Reviewer: GiveUsAKiss413 (Signed) · Date: January 17, 2009 05:06 PM · On: Chapter 7: You're Right

I can't believe I missed this chapter.

 

I am dead of cute.

Reviewer: Twimoon (Signed) · Date: January 15, 2009 10:55 PM · On: Chapter 7: You're Right

AWWW .

hehe . update soon hehe

 

=]

Reviewer: xchic (Signed) · Date: January 15, 2009 10:26 AM · On: Chapter 7: You're Right

this is nice ! this is really nice ! :D

Reviewer: jackbauer (Signed) · Date: January 15, 2009 07:35 AM · On: Chapter 7: You're Right

lovin' it!  I almost just hit submit, but I hate long reviews.  I live in Oklahoma.  It's snowing today and it was in the 70's last week.  Sick.  I must admit I rolled my eyes at the football references - seasons over.  Time for a break :)

 

Reviewer: thedramabean (Signed) · Date: January 15, 2009 12:22 AM · On: Chapter 7: You're Right

Oh crap, Bella made a move and he fell asleep?! Now she's going to think that he doesn't quite reciprocate any feelings she's devolped, there'll be angst... God. I've read way too much angst tonight -- I need some more fluff, lol.

Very cute chapter -- please update ASAP!!

Reviewer: everwondering (Signed) · Date: January 14, 2009 11:14 PM · On: Chapter 7: You're Right

haha Edward doping his niece up with sugar. What is it with relatives who dot that? :)

The texting was sweet. Glad she finally started to open up to him.

Reviewer: katopotato (Signed) · Date: January 14, 2009 10:42 PM · On: Chapter 7: You're Right

Gah, More!! Please.. it kills me when you don't update!

Reviewer: asrial (Signed) · Date: January 14, 2009 07:22 PM · On: Chapter 7: You're Right

ahh, love.  it makes me giddy.  and just a side note, i have a hideaway pizza here in my town.  it IS the best pizza!  LOL

 

Reviewer: McQueen (Signed) · Date: January 14, 2009 05:33 PM · On: Chapter 7: You're Right

This story is so adorable! I'm tagging it so I can keep up with the updates.

Reviewer: gordonfan74 (Signed) · Date: January 14, 2009 03:44 PM · On: Chapter 7: You're Right

Great chapter, as usual.  The texting at the end was way to sweet.  I find it very endearing that Edward would take time out of his busy schedule to attend his niece's open house.  Albeit advantageous for him to do so.  He got to see the beautiful Miss Swan again, but still. 

The banter between Bella and Edward at the pizza shop was well written.  The game of Candy Land a nice touch.  I will say though that I was a little confused about the impending weather.  When he tells her that if it's too bad to drive in give him a call and he'll pick her up.  What does that mean exactly?  Is he talking about the present, or if the weather is bad when she has to go to school the next day or anytime?  Not sure.  I'm probably just to slow to comprehend something simple.  I get that way sometimes.  I read the chapter at work and I was so excited and I was a little distracted.  Sorry for the dunce cap I wear.  I just don't want to miss a beat with this story.  It is one of my favorites.  I know I say that all the time, but I sincerely mean it.  I love the plot and the characterizations.  I can't wait for another update. 

Reviewer: crf720 (Signed) · Date: January 14, 2009 02:44 PM · On: Chapter 7: You're Right

awww they are cute. i hope bella will open up to him!

Reviewer: bellybean (Signed) · Date: January 14, 2009 02:27 PM · On: Chapter 7: You're Right

Now that was a great date.  He should have text messaged her back... not nice to leave a girl hanging when she's putting herself out there. 

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