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Reviewer: Robsblueeyes (Signed) · Date: September 30, 2010 10:08 AM · On: Chapter 7 Second Down
LOL - Edward, Jasper and Emmett are just a bunch of girls with their locker room banter. You've gotta love Emmett he is a scream. How long are Edward and Bella gonna be able to control themselves?
Author's Response: Thank you! I love the three boys together, truly. Could probably do a whole fic of that but I'd get lynched by all the lemon people. Unless I went slash, I guess, which I won't be doing! haha Glad you love Em. He's so much fun :)
Not too long! They're trying but the lust is too much :)
Reviewer: Robsblueeyes (Signed) · Date: September 30, 2010 08:01 AM · On: Chapter 6 Kick Off
“I’m not sleeping with him.” - ROFL only Bella could blurt that out but she covered well, I would have died from embarrassment. I love her internal dialogue she's so funny, this is a fantastic story. Jane x
Author's Response: Hehe So Bella! So much fun! She managed to not offend him despite throwing Jasper's name out there. I love writing her inner voice. Thank you!
Reviewer: robbsweetangel (Signed) · Date: September 30, 2010 06:34 AM · On: Chapter 7 Second Down
Alright, I thought I would squeeze in another chapter. I loved this and the banter and name calling between the guys had me laughing so damn hard. I could so see that. Then the date. OMFG!!! That was hot and sweaty and sweet. I love posessive Edward. The picnic in the hallway was great, loved that idea. Oh, I can't wait until they see each other again because they are so cute together. Bella is just what Edward needs. Can't wait until some pranks from Emmett. BTW, I'm live just south of you in the Venice area. More reviews to come when I can squeeze them in.
Penny
Author's Response: Yeah I seem to be surprisingly good writing guys and their trash talking. I always thought I should be a guy, just solidifies it. hehe So glad you liked it! I love the boys together and I could probably write a whole fic of just them, though people would probably get annoyed!
Mmmm Possessiveward is yummy, isn't he? This one's not all ready to kill the guy, but just a little possessive. Too cute.
Glad you liked the hallway picnic. It just happened as I was writing, like most of this story does. hehe Love to surprise myself. They are really cute and hot together at the same time. I really like them as a couple and individuals, which is nice!
You are close! Very cool :) I look forward to the rest of your thoughts!
Amy
Reviewer: Robsblueeyes (Signed) · Date: September 30, 2010 03:13 AM · On: Chapter 5 Game On
I love Emmett, he's hilarious, all those nicknames he comes up with - *snort*
Author's Response: Hehe I adore him too. He's a heck of a character and I get excited for each chapter that he's going to appear in. More nicknames ahead!
Reviewer: Robsblueeyes (Signed) · Date: September 30, 2010 12:03 AM · On: Chapter 4 Pre Game Speech
'I'm good in bed.' - LOL filterless Bella. I'm glad these two have talked and are back on track, I don't think I could have handled a load of angst. Love this story it's really funny.
Author's Response: Huh, this one came through on delay I guess! Filterless Bella is fun to play with, to be sure. I have a friend just like her, always sayin the wrong thing at the wrong time! Nope, that was about as much angst as we'll get. I'm not an angsty sort, promise!
Reviewer: jordanmac (Signed) · Date: September 29, 2010 08:33 PM · On: Chapter 11 Team Meeting
Thanks for the update. Please update soon I can hardly wait to see what happens next.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it! Next is the big lemon everyone wants! I'll get to it soon :)
Reviewer: Robsblueeyes (Signed) · Date: September 29, 2010 04:21 PM · On: Chapter 1 Halftime
That was so hot. You got me at the end I wasn't expecting that twist in the story. I love that Bella's internal voice screaming at her is Alice, that's too funny. Jane x
Author's Response: Jane,
I'm glad I could surprise you! And that you like it so far! I didn't want them to be that slutty and I liked the idea of them already being in a relationship. You'll see why Bella hears Alice in her head :)
Thanks for the review!
Amy
Reviewer: robbsweetangel (Signed) · Date: September 29, 2010 11:17 AM · On: Chapter 6 Kick Off
beep, bee,be, b_____________________________________________ *thud* SHE'S OUT!!!!!
OMFG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! THAT IS THE BEST CHAPTER YET!!!!!!!!!!! First I was laughing so hard with Alice trying to figure out the plays with football. Then you give me the date. *fanning self* LOVED IT!!!!!!!!!!!! When they kissed WOW!!!! Then to the dinner and Bella's inner dialouge. I cracked up when she said "I'm not sleeping with him" out loud and Edward dropped his fork. That was great. *giggles* Then when she let out the porn moan, I thought Edward was going to take her right there. Then you had to bring out the dessert. When they fed each other, that was extremely sexy. Then that other kiss *pants* I about died at my desk. WOW!!! I can't get over how good this story is. I'm dying here. Next time I update one of my stories I'm recommending yours. This is fantastic. I'm going to try to get another chapter in before I leave for home, but if not I'll be back. GREAT JOB!!!
Penny
Author's Response: Heh, I have a lot of fun with Alice's lack of football knowledge! She's super enthusiastic about learning at least. Wants to support her man. Gotta love it!
Yeah, I keep getting told I'm going well with the UST. I am honored people think so! Writing the humor/sports is easy but I always get a little intimidated with the sexy stuff. I'm getting used to it now though! I love having Bella have those little verbal slips and Edward's ability to roll with them. Makes me smile. And yes, the feeding of the cake...well I'd be porn moaning too!
Wow, thank you for the future rec! That's so sweet! Love how much you're loving it!
Reviewer: robbsweetangel (Signed) · Date: September 29, 2010 10:09 AM · On: Chapter 5 Game On
I laughed so hard with Emmett. He's priceless. No filter at all. *snorts* loved that Jasper was adding to the fire especially when he was describing Bella and that he saw her naked and she was a good kisser. I thought Edward would fly off the handle. *chanting* someone has it bad, someone has it bad *giggles* I just LOVE the football scene. I'm a die hard football fan and I enjoyed that so much. May I ask are you by chance a nole and buc fan. LOL!! I had to ask. I'm a Patriots fan, but I live in Florida. *shrugs shoulders* great chapter. LOVED IT! One more thing, I think this has to be one of the best stories I've read. I don't get much time anymore to sit down and read since I'm busy with validating on this site, but really this is one of my favorites. I'm sorry it has taken me so long to sit down and start reading it. Plus I love football. *winks*
Author's Response: Hee, I knew you'd love my Em. He's a complete blast. His nicknames make me giggle and his pranks are just awesome. *winks* You'll see more of that later.
Jasper definitely had a good time pimping his boy as well! They're true friends that can give each other crap but will stand up for one another when it comes down to it. And it was fun making Edward a little jealous!
So happy you loved the football stuff! I'll have more of that as we go, because I love the game as well, clearly. Yes, I'm a Nole and Buc fan primarily but I have several other teams I like and the Pats are one of them. And I'm in Tampa, so yeah, makes liking the FL teams a little easier!
I'm flattered that it's one of your favorites! I like writing a happy, fun story with minimal angst and people we can all like. That's my goal anyway! So happy you're taking the time to read it :)
Reviewer: robbsweetangel (Signed) · Date: September 29, 2010 08:47 AM · On: Chapter 4 Pre Game Speech
You're right. I loved this chapter and it did bring a smile to my face. Sorry about not getting right to this. I'm at work, but I'm so damn hooked. I about died when she opened that door and he was standing there. He really is a wonderful guy deep down and I'm glad that they cleared the water. Jazz and Alice crack me up. That was perfect. *jumps up and down* So excited about the date.
Penny
Author's Response: Penny,
Oh man, wait til you get to next chapter and all the guy banter. I have the time of my life writing all 3 boys. They just make my day. Jazz, my gossip. hehe
I love that you're sneaking in reads at work! Yes, QB is a very good guy with a good head on his shoulders. He can have ego at certain times but he's really not a dick in any way. I heart him. hehe
Hope you enjoy the date (and meeting Em, because he is awesome) hehe
Amy
Reviewer: lobsters4ever (Signed) · Date: September 29, 2010 06:34 AM · On: Chapter 11 Team Meeting
I loved their BBQ. Emmett was very entertaining and I thought his Edward collage was hysterical. It was nice to see everyone having a great time after all the Tanya drama.
I am so looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Haha Thank you! I want that collage for my very own but I'm afraid I'm a little too old for such things. It might be frowned upon! haha But I love the image of him cutting out his pictures carefully and getting up on the bed to put them up, snickering away. Such awesomeness. Maybe that'll have to be an outtake at some point.
I'm glad you liked it! Tanya drama is over!
Reviewer: robbsweetangel (Signed) · Date: September 29, 2010 06:33 AM · On: Chapter 3 Are You Sure You're Not a Kicker?
Loved this chapter too. I really enjoyed the 'double date'. They really were enjoying each others company then that girl had to come up. Typical. I wasn't surprised that Bella turned on him, but I'm glad that she found the napkin. I had a feeling that he did that. Edward is really taken with her and I know they will see each other again and all will be good. Great chapter.
Author's Response: They will! I'm not much of an angst writer, just decided to get one major issue out of the way before they get started. No nasty surprises then! Glad you enjoyed the chapter! Next one will make you smile I think!
Reviewer: samekraemer (Signed) · Date: September 29, 2010 05:54 AM · On: Chapter 11 Team Meeting
The wrench weilding, spoon chucking, supermodel grease monkey Rosalie...loved her. Emmett is too funny. Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Yay! I really like Rose too and she's gotta be spunky to keep up with Emmett, as we know! So glad you liked it!
Reviewer: robbsweetangel (Signed) · Date: September 29, 2010 05:29 AM · On: Chapter 2 Where It All Began
Oh, I loved this chapter too. I love how they are brought together being the support of their best friends. I also love that it is taking place in AZ. I loved Scottsdale and it's nice to picture that as I read. I love that her first glimse of him was his crotch. Priceless. Great job.
Author's Response: Hahah isn't that fun/ I was always that girl that looked at the wrong place at the wrong time so I loved having Bella's eyes be level with his crotch the moment they met ;)
My pre-reader lives in Phoenix so she's helping me out some, though I'm taking some creative licensing when needed. They don't have Panera's there? WTH? :) HEHE
Reviewer: robbsweetangel (Signed) · Date: September 29, 2010 04:49 AM · On: Chapter 1 Halftime
Alright, I've had this on my favorites for like forever and I just now have some time to read it. OMFG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *THUD* _______________FLATLINE________ That was some first chapter. HOT isnt' really how I would discribe it. FUCKING FUCKTASTIC!!!!!!!! I really do love the idea of this story and I LOVE FOOTBALL so this is a win win. Love how they acted like they didn't know each other then go to find out they've been dating. WONDERFUL!! Great job and I'm looking forward to all the rest. *fanning self*
Pen
Author's Response: Pen,
Well I'll take that as a ringing endorsement! Thank you! I didn't want to make them totally slutty and I liked the idea of them knowing one another but playing it off for awhile. The response was so amazing that I had to go back and show how they met and take us, eventually, beyond this chapter. I always worry about the lemons so I love that you loved it! Thank you!
Amy
Reviewer: GIJoesWife (Signed) · Date: September 28, 2010 07:20 PM · On: Chapter 11 Team Meeting
I love this and I can't wait to see what's going to happen next. PMS
Author's Response: Thank you! I haven't hidden what's to come next! Everyone's so excited to get their lemon :) Cracks me up!
Reviewer: jennmo (Anonymous) · Date: September 28, 2010 04:02 PM · On: Chapter 11 Team Meeting
love the cockcadoddledont comment!!! sooo funny
Author's Response: Hee! I don't think I'll ever top that one, truly! ;)
Reviewer: Lanaeclipsed (Signed) · Date: September 28, 2010 03:15 PM · On: Chapter 11 Team Meeting
Lovin it!!!! Can't wait for next chapter!! ;)
Author's Response: Thank you! I'll get started on it very soon :)
Reviewer: de kate (Signed) · Date: September 28, 2010 01:50 PM · On: Chapter 11 Team Meeting
love love love Emmett.
cant wait for more chapters, is your E&B sexy time next. he he.
Author's Response: Hee, I love all the Emmett love! Yes, the lemon is next chapter ;) No more waiting!
Reviewer: EmiMills (Signed) · Date: September 28, 2010 01:29 PM · On: Chapter 11 Team Meeting
That was awesome. I love Emmett! He was great, that's exactly what I pictured human Emmett like. :)
Author's Response: :) Thank you! I'll take it twice!
Reviewer: EmiMills (Signed) · Date: September 28, 2010 01:29 PM · On: Chapter 11 Team Meeting
That was awesome. I love Emmett! He was great, that's exactly what I pictured human Emmett like. :)
Author's Response: Aww I'm so glad you like the big guy! He's just SO MUCH fun to write. I want to make him real and hang out with him daily!
Reviewer: samekraemer (Signed) · Date: September 28, 2010 11:36 AM · On: Chapter 10 Illegal Contact
God I wish I had an Alice in my life...I could use one! Loved the commerical.
Author's Response: Haha me too! I want her to be real and in my corner! Glad you loved it, had fun with it :)
Reviewer: samekraemer (Signed) · Date: September 28, 2010 10:38 AM · On: Chapter 8 Flag On The Play
Bringing in Tanya to stir the bitch pot...can't wait!
Author's Response: Hee! That and to let Bella see that Edward is not harboring any feelings for his ex :)
Reviewer: samekraemer (Signed) · Date: September 28, 2010 10:14 AM · On: Chapter 7 Second Down
Poor guy's going to get carpel tunnel syndrome! Great chapter. Oh, this almost goes without saying, but I'm going to say it. Love your Emmett. GQ...Esquire...Cosmo...priceless!
Author's Response: Haha I won't make him wait too long! And he has strong wrists you know, all that throwing *giggles* I love Emmett, so very much. Have the best time with him. I want to rip him off the screen and hang out with him on a daily basis. :)
Reviewer: samekraemer (Signed) · Date: September 28, 2010 09:38 AM · On: Chapter 6 Kick Off
Such a great date...only now I'm craving baked potatoe and steak and of course, chocolate cake... Great chapter.
Author's Response: Haha yes, they tend to eat things that I like and want and need! haha It makes me hungry too, trust! It was a great first date, they're so cute together :)
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