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Reviewer: CuLLeN_VaMp1918 (Signed) · Date: January 23, 2013 11:22 AM · On: Chapter 1
absolutely luv it! i'll like to hear more from this two ;p
Reviewer: CuLLeN_VaMp1918 (Signed) · Date: January 23, 2013 02:34 AM · On: Chapter 1
absolutely luv it! i'll like to hear more from this two ;p
Reviewer: Chnctgislnd07 (Signed) · Date: December 16, 2011 05:10 PM · On: Chapter 1
Not bad 😉
Reviewer: tashia (Signed) · Date: November 16, 2010 12:27 PM · On: Chapter 1
that was awsome but a little bit to much
Reviewer: vixenjc (Signed) · Date: June 22, 2010 02:00 PM · On: Chapter 1
pretty good but i still like waiting till the wedding lol
Reviewer: JD Thorn (Signed) · Date: April 20, 2010 08:57 PM · On: Chapter 1
Nice One shot. Liked it.
Another one shot idea: Edward/Bella/Jacob all together. There are VERY FEW of those out there.
Reviewer: Missy96 (Signed) · Date: April 17, 2010 12:33 AM · On: Chapter 1
great
Reviewer: NicoleLight (Signed) · Date: April 01, 2010 04:20 AM · On: Chapter 1
Great story!! I liked how you did both POV's - I liked seeing it from both perspectives. You should write more!!
Reviewer: pamirvine85 (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2010 11:42 PM · On: Chapter 1
great
Reviewer: koolchick262003 (Signed) · Date: November 06, 2009 09:49 AM · On: Chapter 1
Great!
Reviewer: Phoenix Rising (Signed) · Date: September 04, 2009 10:35 AM · On: Chapter 1
Since you were so kind to review my work and I saw that you had a story on here, I wanted to check it out! Great job. I liked how you did the two POV's...it's always nice to see things from the other's perspective, and I have a soft spot for EPOV. Nicely done!
xoxo Sarah
Reviewer: bondgirl (Signed) · Date: August 20, 2009 11:50 AM · On: Chapter 1
Ok first off, I did really like this. I though your descriptions were good and yes, it was very hot and well written.
However, I didn't really feel like it was Edward and Bella -- and they rushed into it quite fast.
But other than that, if it was just some normal people who weren't virgins it would have been PERFECT.
:)
Reviewer: EmeraldRain (Signed) · Date: August 12, 2009 08:00 PM · On: Chapter 1
umm a bit too OOC for me, honestly. but still a good read
Reviewer: TinaT (Signed) · Date: June 12, 2009 01:52 PM · On: Chapter 1
good stuff
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review! I really appreciate the time you took to write it!
Reviewer: Kolene (Signed) · Date: June 06, 2009 02:25 PM · On: Chapter 1
You did good and I also know that alot of fenales read this thinking or hoping that it is them and not Bella.
Reviewer: Kolene (Signed) · Date: June 06, 2009 02:25 PM · On: Chapter 1
You did good and I also know that alot of fenales read this thinking or hoping that it is them and not Bella.
Reviewer: ninachr (Signed) · Date: May 29, 2009 03:55 PM · On: Chapter 1
Really FUCKING good....nice...glad to see Edward letting himself go.;D
Reviewer: ilove_edward (Signed) · Date: April 05, 2009 04:15 PM · On: Chapter 1
good
Reviewer: dmarie17 (Signed) · Date: April 01, 2009 05:52 AM · On: Chapter 1
Like the pool concept, but it felt rushed to me. thanks for sharing your story!
Author's Response: I am totally failing at responding because I'm so dang lazy, but I really appreciate your feedback.
Thanks for reviewing!
Reviewer: Bjornsdotter (Signed) · Date: March 25, 2009 08:46 PM · On: Chapter 1
Reviewer: HannaHilarious (Signed) · Date: March 19, 2009 05:13 PM · On: Chapter 1
Good :)
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your feedback!
Reviewer: cullenfever (Signed) · Date: March 17, 2009 07:38 AM · On: Chapter 1
fantastic !
Reviewer: cullenfever (Signed) · Date: March 17, 2009 07:38 AM · On: Chapter 1
fantastic !
Reviewer: Misbehaving Mom2 (Signed) · Date: February 26, 2009 12:07 PM · On: Chapter 1
loved it!!!
Reviewer: Grace Ryan (Signed) · Date: February 25, 2009 04:29 PM · On: Chapter 1
This was a good one-shot, but I don't see edward and bella when I read this. I also, don't see two virgins. I think this reads as a regular story of two human teens that are fooling around for the first time with eachother. If I think of it that way then I say good job.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your criticism! I appreciate it!
But technically, wouldn't Edward know a lot of these things?
But anyway, it is sort of OOC...
Thanks again!
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