I just found this story and I am loving it.  I do hope you are planning on Emmett joining the family.

Author's Response:

All in due time ;) I love me some Emmett :)

Well that was very tame by ff standards!  In fact I was having a hard time telling if he was even aroused.  They come across as very young and innocent.  It's sort of a funny juxtaposition of Edward's age with his experience-sometimes he sounds so old!  I also like how you show Edward's suspicion towards those he doesn't know.  Can't wait to hear about this vamp he kissed, and have E & C meet Bella.  Write when you can!

Author's Response:

Yes, it was tame... for now :) It seemed out of place to me, to have these two reserved, sexually inexperienced teenagers going that far, right off the bat. They know they're attracted to one another, but they're both new to this. It's something they'll work up to :) You're also hearing Edward's perspective of the event, and he's quite shy and old fashioned when it comes to Bella, he's not going to be throwing around sexually explicit descriptions in regards to his interactions with her... or I can't imagine him doing that, anyway :P

You're so right about his inexperience being mixed with his age! Sometimes it's interesting trying to strike a balance between inexperienced and curious teenager falling in love for the first time, and old-fashioned, cynical centenarian  :P

that was a great update. so much information to dissect about his gift. I will probably have to read it again to really under stand what Elezar was explaining about the control.  (i'm ninja reading at work and getting interrupted so some of it going right over my head, stupid working for a living) Oh and them getting a little less than chaste with some smoochies and handsy action, but love that he stopped it.  I like the innocence but they are still teenagers who have needs. 

love your story can't wait for more

lb

Author's Response:

Yeah, I know the whole thing with Edward's gift was a little complicated :P I made my beta read it over several times, to make sure she understood my ramblings, and have been assured the idea isn't completely nonsensical, if a little bit unusual :P I liked the idea of altering Edward's gift a bit, to serve my own purposes.

Hehe, yes, it's fun to explore over the clothes action :) Sometimes all the lemons in this fandom can be overwhelming and it's fun to just go back in time a little and remember how much fun it was to makeout on the couch in high school :P The exploration will continue, though, I promise :) Just wanted to give it a little time to graduate naturally ;)

 

aww Jasper and Edward really bonded over that hunt - I think that's the most I've seen Jasper talk in many a fic in quite some time :)

I agree with Edward at the end there though, on waiting to meet the new guy before deciding what "feeling" to attach to him... Rose being "not that bad" versus the new arrival as "nice"... maybe means Edward will be clenching his teeth or something this time? hehe

Jesmond... Rose can be very difficult...I hope she lightens up soon, I just can't help but wonder what happens that makes Rose warm up to Edward, Alice is pretty cryptic about that one...lol
Yes life with the Cullens are going to be interesting

I can't tell you how much I love this story

Great job

Awww! This is getting good- Am enjoying the playfulness!

Thought this line was good:They like to… play with their food before they eat it."

I really liked that jacob got that he and B are not meant... The whole not his imprint speech is soo much better than stupid love triangle. Is this a more mature- reasonable even jacob?!

 Whoa! I'm loving this! "That's at her discretion. I would never impede her decision"... It's a more mature Edward too!!!

"If anything, I was handsome. My mother told me so."

 

LOL!!!  I'm just reading back through this fic, and that line caught my eye.  I don't even know if it's meant to be funny, but Edward is just so cute and geeky... So adorkable. 

Don't get me wrong--I'm enjoying the direction of the story, but I really miss the one on one time with Bella and Edward from the earlier chapters.  Their chemistry is what really makes this fic stand out, so while I'm enjoying the secondary characters it's kind of frustrating that we aren't seeing as much alone time.  Frankly, I can hear about Jacob making vaguely amusing smartass comments in basically any story on this site; the originality you bring to Bella and Edward's relationship is much more significant and entertaining! :)

Love this chapter. I like the interactions between Edward and the Cullens.

The idea that Edward will be ablew to keep all the changes in his life from James and Victoria--two vampires with extraordinary senses and intimately familiar with Edward and his habits--is ridiculous.  The idea that this group of supposedly intelligent adults thinks this is a viable option is ridiculous.

Truly, I love this story.  It is one of my favorite WIPs.  I just find this particular turn unlikely.

Author's Response:

The red colour contacts thing was something thought up mostly as a comedic type of thing. Part of the fun is knowing that the plan is going to fail, and waiting for the shoe to drop... or that's how I thought of it. It was kind of inspired by Bella hiding her new vamp status from Charlie in BD - which was even more ridiculous if you ask me. Someone not noticing a complete full body change via wearing some appropriate colour contacts? Crazy. I think the eye colour thing is pretty tame in comparison.

To be perfectly honest, I think the idea of Edward being able to hide Bella from James and Victoria has also been quite ludicrious. As a tracker, James would certainly have the ability find Bella, if he was looking for her - I'm counting on reader's being able to suspend their disbelief a little, and the fact James and Victoria aren't really looking for her - just as they aren't really looking for something different about Edward. Call it selective blindness :P

But yes, I agree and accept that this plan is ridiculous. I hope, at the least, I can make the ride a little bit fun :P

Great update - I'm drawn into the world you're weaving.