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Reviews For Like A Bridge Over Troubled Water (One Shot)

Reviewer: k1942 (Signed) · Date: August 24, 2013 11:50 AM · On: Like A Bridge Over Troubled Water

A moment in Jasper's journey, portraying things about him that compel me to sympathize with both predator and victim! Surely murder is wrong, but eating to sustain yourself puts a slightly different slant on it! At the time he didn't realize there was another way, as his salvation hadn't yet informed him of it! Beautifully written vignette of a mightily troubled soul!

Reviewer: pbswimmer (Signed) · Date: May 02, 2010 03:31 AM · On: Like A Bridge Over Troubled Water

Wow! This was great. Full of mystery and intrigue, questions like: Why was Jasper pretending to be blind? Can he redeem himself and not kill this lovely woman?

I loved the description of the people on the bus. So vivid. And how the reader doesn't know that Jasper is a vamp until the cows move across the field away from him. Well done, meow!

Author's Response:
Ooh, wow, I'm so glad that my attempt at a little mystery/misdirection in the beginning actually succeeded. One never knows with such things. So glad you liked the story, too.

~~ Why was Jasper pretending to be blind? Can he redeem himself and not kill this lovely woman? ~~

If I ever continue the story, I would try to answer these questions, and more. Right now I have ideas but no words.

Thanks so much for your lovely review! ~'meow'

Author's Response:
Ooh, wow, I'm so glad that my attempt at a little mystery/misdirection in the beginning actually succeeded. One never knows with such things. So glad you liked the story, too.

~~ Why was Jasper pretending to be blind? Can he redeem himself and not kill this lovely woman? ~~

If I ever continue the story, I would try to answer these questions, and more. Right now I have ideas but no words.

Thanks so much for your lovely review! ~'meow'

Reviewer: vegetarianvamps (Signed) · Date: April 30, 2010 07:19 AM · On: Like A Bridge Over Troubled Water

I guess the warm food was Christi.

This was sad. Shows how empty and desperate Jasper was when he left Maria.

Leaving Maria had been right. He had been ravaged beyond all endurance by the violent life she’d led him to. I loved that line, I loved this one shot :)

Author's Response:
Hmmm I just tried to post a response and the site ate it. Weird. Hope this works better.

Thank you so much for this lovely review! The sadness of the story haunted me, too, even after I had gotten it all written. You capture perfectly my intent about Jasper: empty and desperate. And now to kill and drink someone who offered him solace and trust. *sigh* Thanks for loving the story even though it was sad.

Best. ~mkch

Reviewer: FrozenSoldier (Signed) · Date: April 30, 2010 07:01 AM · On: Like A Bridge Over Troubled Water

Oh my, that was beautiful. I have no words. I wasn't going to read this, for some reason.. I don't know. But I saw it was Jasper so I thought I'd read it. And I'm so glad I did.

You have a very beautiful writing style. I keep saying that word in my reviews. But oh well. The way you wrote Christi, I really liked that. It was so sad though, because she was obvously hurting, as was he, and they fitted together.

But then the ending :( She realised that he wasn't blind, and this part:

“But you still need a change of clothes. And some warm food in your stomach.”

“Yes.” And he could not lie. No matter how much he wished it were not true. “I do.”

Amazing last line. There is a thing about one shots, they always have to have a strong closer that makes you think or evokes emotions etc. That one did. Nice one :)

I know technically this isn't Jasper/Alice, but I would like to add this to my series Eternal Hope. What the heck, it is my series, I can do what I like with it. What do you say? Can I add it?

Author's Response:
Wow, your review blows me away. I'm so glad you read my story too. I like serendipity.

I would be totally HONORED!!! to be included in your series. Thank you so much for such a kind invitation. For what it's worth, although I haven't put anything to paper, in my imagination the untold remainder of this story does lead Jasper to Alice, so, in a sense, she is in the story. Please feel free to include that bit in any intro you may wish to write.

And thank you so much for reading and reviewing. It was a sad story to write. I fell in love with Christi as I was writing her, and the thought of her dying (even if it is in Jasper's arms) is hard. One just knows that he will remember her, too.

Thanks so much. ~mkch

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