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Reviewer: JRParz (Signed) · Date: May 12, 2010 01:35 PM · On: Chapter 8

"The visions prompted an agitation so palpable, the tremors that racked my body provoked an audible scream. As I did so, I realized I had released my cloaking, but it mattered not."

Finally!  Now surely Alice will have seen something - for Damian is on his way to  a rude awakening.  :-)



Author's Response:

Ok, now I'm getting a little spooked, JR.  Have you hacked my computer and read ahead?  I told you the Cullens were coming.  Patience, my young Jedi.  ;)

Wait til you see the next chapter . . .  

Thanks so much for reviewing . . .

Reviewer: AussieECfan (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2010 03:17 AM · On: Chapter 8

*bow chick a wow wah* Is it getting steamy in here or is it just me? :P WTG Charlie on managing to somehow be a gentleman, I'm sure you will reap great rewards from Catherine later *winks*



Author's Response:

Hah!  Ladies, get out your electric fans.  ;)

Gah - don't you just love him?  I just want to curl up next to him . . . ah, well, that's for me alone. 

I believe the rewards will be . . . equal.  *snicker*

 

Thanks for reading AND reviewing!  I love your comments!

Reviewer: AussieECfan (Signed) · Date: May 04, 2010 04:41 AM · On: Chapter 7

*shivers in corner* I'm definitely not liking the 'other' character. Hope that Catherine can survive until Charlie gets there.



Author's Response:

Oh dear.  Well, I hope you're not reading this at night, when it's dark out!

There's a long way between Hope and Actually Happen, I'm afraid.  ;)

Thanks for again reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: JRParz (Signed) · Date: May 03, 2010 05:03 PM · On: Chapter 7

LOL...  fine, you made it the tale plausible - somewhat.  :-)

If I were to guess what you didn't have in chapter 7 originally, it would the the two sentences about the wolves. 

It appears this assassin is going to screw up.  Already, he's stretching Aro's instructions as he thinks about torturing Charlie.  What the assassin doesn't realize is that Alice would be able to see that - maybe not him - but certainly Charlie, and as a result the Cullens come to the rescue.  I'm also thinking that the Cullens involvement could come through idle conversation where the Cullens learn about Charlie's case.  In any event - it will take the Cullens to come to the rescue.

My big question is what makes Catherine so dangerous to the Volturi?  Did she learn something in her past that Aro feels a threat?  Or since Aro seems to be able to glimpse in the future (at least that is what the assassin says), maybe he sees Catherine turned and becoming a very powerful friend of the Cullens.  I'm not sure where you are going with this story, and I know this is a Catherine and Charlie tale, but I have a sneaking suspicion that there might be a vampire... or two... joining Team Cullen.  :-)

Thanks for sharing your talent - and of course I'm looking forward to more.



Author's Response:

Muahahaha!

Now JRP, while I appreciate the thought you put into your review, I simply must bow out to answering, and simply plead the fifth.  Otherwise, there would be no reason for you, and all of the other lovely readers to continue, would there?  ;)

I will tell you this, however.  This ain't no Breaking Dawn, but I am an eternernal HEAist.  That should send your head into a spin . . . for now.

Looking forward to your eloquent reactions to the chapters ahead . . . please do stay with me!

Thanks much!

Reviewer: JRParz (Signed) · Date: May 01, 2010 05:09 AM · On: Chapter 6

So, I'm really, really looking forward to the next chapter.  If this assassin vampire were to learn Charlie's surname, and contact Aro before the Cullens hit the scene, it would be interesting to read how you would play that out. 

Now, I guess since this "Other POV" hasn't actually made the decision to kill Charlie, you still are able to argue that Alice wouldn't have a vision - but like I mentioned in my previous review - that's "stretching-it."  And I did mention the 16... correction, I should have said 17 shapeshifters.  Between them and the Cullens, not one of them picked up a scent...?  So, like I said - I'm anxious to read the next chapter as you answer all these concerns of mine. :-)

Oh... and as far as you owing me one for reminding you of something... glad I could be of service.  I realize this is Charlie and Catherine's story, but in order for to believe the tale, it's imperative that what happens could happen.  :-)  -  Thanks for sharing your talent!



Author's Response:

JRParz, JRParz, JRParz . . . ;)

Let me say first, I love that you're a tough, but gentle critic.  In fact, it was your earlier review that prompted me to return, once again, to Ch 7 last night. ;)

So as not to spoil it, but to give you some reprieve, let me say this.  If you think back to all the books, Alice doesn't ever really see everything.  If that were the case, there'd be no drama, no fear, no build-up.  Consider these:  a)Her visions can change on a dime depending upon the decisions of those within them, b)She doesn't see humans, or people she doesn't know, very well, and c)She doesn't see when the wolves are around.  

Those premises, together with Ch 7, will hopefully answer some of your concerns.

I love that you're thinking about this so much.  Please keep challenging me!

Thanks much!

Reviewer: Shamatt (Signed) · Date: April 30, 2010 04:22 PM · On: Chapter 6

I just love this story. Charlie really deserves serious loving and not from La Push. He doesn't need Harry's widow. He needs his own girl. Billy Burke owns Charlie in my mind and I what I wouldn't do to be Bella's step mommy.



Author's Response:

Thank YOU!  Yes, yes he does.  And while I'd offer myself to Billy, er Charlie, er nevermind . . .

Haaa!  Stepmom?  Me?  I'm not so sure about that.  ;)

 

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: Lh2533 (Signed) · Date: April 28, 2010 08:29 AM · On: Chapter 5

Just finished the 5 first chapters. I love your story. Can't wait for some vampires action :) it was time charly finds someone ;)

Author's Response:

Thank you!  The vampire action is coming!  I swear!  ;)

Ahhh, Charlie.  Yes, he needs better representation around here.  Which is exactly why I decided to dive into this ff.  I felt sorry for him! 

Thanks again for reading and reviewing!!

Reviewer: AussieECfan (Signed) · Date: April 26, 2010 01:00 AM · On: Chapter 1

Me no likey this 'other' person. I guess you get that a lot though huh? *L*

You asked me last review why I thought it might be Demetri? I guess I was just thinking of the volturi guard and who's personality fit the bill most. I didn't know if there was any guarantees that the characters as we know them in the series are identical at all. *L*

Charlie & Catherine are so cute together...he's totally awkward and all of the scenes where he's gone on the defensive with his squad boys crack me up.

Author's Response:

You're not supposed to like him.  ;)

Ahhh.  Ok.  I can tell you this:  there are no guarantees in this story, other than canon.

Thank you for thinking so!  I tried to channel every cop show I've ever watched, coupled with the tiniest bit of what we know Charlie to be like.  But my imagination sometimes gets away from me . . . Ahhhhh. 

Thanks so much!

Reviewer: ladybugfan (Signed) · Date: April 25, 2010 12:46 PM · On: Chapter 5

Love your unique storyline....Charley has been close to my heart...please give him a happy ending.



Author's Response:

Thank you!  I was hoping it would be unique enough when I started.  It's kind of grown, becomming it's own animal. 

I believe in happy endings, but there only worth it if there's lots of angst, strife, and struggle to get there, right?

Thanks again for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: mrs_n (Signed) · Date: April 25, 2010 11:57 AM · On: Chapter 5

Loving it.



Author's Response:

Thank you!  And if i'm truthful, so am I!  This whole fanfic endeavor is my own little private escapism!

Thanks for reading and revieiwing!

Reviewer: JRParz (Signed) · Date: April 25, 2010 11:44 AM · On: Chapter 5

Okay, I'm enjoying this tale - and I keep on waiting for the entrance of the Cullens.  Mind you, the fact that a vampire is in Forks and neither eight vampires - nor sixteen werewolves have smelled his presence.  Then throw in the fact that Alice is no where to be found has me scratching my head.  Now, I realize he will be seeking permission from Aro to killl the Police Chief before he actually decides to do it - but surely Alice should have seen something by now.



Author's Response:

You are tough, JRParz.  I can only make the chapters so long!  ;)  Remember, this is a Charlie and Catherine story first.

You will get enough explanation in Ch 7 to last you wee bit.  And yes, I forgot to include Alice on the opening page here, but she'll eventuallly appear along with the rest of them.  In a rather grand fashion, I might admit.

And if you're wanting to ask me if the Volturri will appear . . .well, that's like reading the end of the book before you even start, right?

Thanks for the review, and just so know, you just reminded me of something I have to add!  I owe you one!

Reviewer: Axciom (Signed) · Date: April 23, 2010 03:04 PM · On: Chapter 4

This story is interesting...as I say in most of my reviews, I have a huge soft spot for stories that break from the typical mold, and this one does it amazingly. Even more daring are you, as an author, to create characters that AREN'T teenage girls, well done!

I'm loving the development of Catharine's personality, she seems like she's either going to make a wonderful complement to Charlie's personality, or an absolute train wreck! (Either way, I will throughly enjoy watching how it plays out)

So anyway, fantastic work you're doing here, don't let the review counter tell you what your worth is as a writer...you're doing great!



Author's Response:

To say I'm humbled by your review . . . I'm actually tearing.  Thanks so much for the kind works and reinforcment.  It helps to know that someone appreciates the perspective!

Hmm.  Complement or train wreck - that is the dilemma, isn't it?  :)  Personally, I only know the train wreck!  ;)

Thank you, thank you, thank you!

Reviewer: Edwardsgirl83 (Signed) · Date: April 23, 2010 09:48 AM · On: Chapter 4

You have a good story.  I like the way you are going with this.  Someone specifically for Charlie.  You are going to tie in Bella, Edward and all of them soon right?  That would make the story even better



Author's Response:

Thank you.  I appreciate that you like it!

Now, I can't go and spoil it for you, but if you notice on the initial page, I did include the cast of Cullens.  Show they'll show up . . . eventually.  :)

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: AussieECfan (Signed) · Date: April 23, 2010 12:38 AM · On: Chapter 4

Hmmm....the mention of Aro definitely has me thinking. Obviously 'whatever' is a vampire and I'm trying to consider all of the hints about the way 'he' talks & moves and work out who it is. Is it Demetri? :)

Loving Catherine & Charlie and their game. *L* Glad that Charlie came up to the cabin to try and see her and apologise...I'm guessing he didn't see the 'other'?



Author's Response:

Why does it have to be Demetri?  Why would Demetri come, especially since the Cullens know who he is?  How could he hide from them?  Oooh, but I'm giving too much away . . .

THANK you!  I know everyone wants to get to the good stuff, but sheesh . . . ;)  Nope, Charlie didn't see him.

Thanks again for reading and reviewing!

 

Reviewer: Jenny Cullen (Signed) · Date: April 22, 2010 07:37 PM · On: Chapter 4

Great chapter!  Dun dun dun!  I can't believe the bad vamp doesn't know who Charlie is and about the vamps in the area!  Or if he does, he hasn't said anything...



Author's Response:

To use your eloquence, "Dun dun dun"!!!  Patience . . .

Thanks Jenny!

Reviewer: JRParz (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 05:27 PM · On: Chapter 3

It's moving slow... but it is interesting!  I'm intrigued on a few different fronts.  :-)



Author's Response:

Sorry about the slow, but I'm an old fashioned girl.  *smirk*  It will get there - promise.

Glad you're intrigued, though.  Stay with me!

Thanks much!

Reviewer: Jenny Cullen (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 05:04 AM · On: Chapter 2

Great chapter!  I loved seeing more of their reactions to each other.  And dun dun dun!  Scary OtherPOV!



Author's Response:

Thanks!  These first few chapters were, uh, interesting for me.  As I've said before, I love writing Charlie.  There are just so many possibilities!

Thanks again for your guidance!

Reviewer: Bella Frenzy (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 04:30 AM · On: Chapter 2

Really2 make me curious...update faster please

Author's Response:

I will try!  I promise!

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: Bella Frenzy (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 04:19 AM · On: Chapter 1

Hmm.....make me curious.....

Author's Response:

You know what they say about curiosity and the cat . . . ;)

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: AussieECfan (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 03:14 AM · On: Chapter 2

I'm starting to see a pattern here. You have me all giggly and warm & fuzzy over your alternative POVs from Charlie and Catherine, then you scare the bejesus out of me with the 'other' POV whom is preying on Catherine! *L*



Author's Response:

Heeee!  Warm and fuzzy . . . hmmm I LIKE that description!

If you're scared now, just wait . . .

Thanks so much for taking the time to review!

Reviewer: AussieECfan (Signed) · Date: April 16, 2010 02:45 AM · On: Chapter 1

Hmmmm...the last section definitely stumped me but I liked Catherine's view and it did make me laugh when you wrote from Charlie's POV. Awkward much?! :_



Author's Response:

I'm glad!  It's supposed to!  ;)  Don't worry, I won't make you wait toooo long. 

I LOVE writing Charlie.  I have a certain, um, affinity for him.  I must admit, I do like having my way with him. 

Thanks for reading and reviewing.  Stay tuned!

Reviewer: jondean872000 (Signed) · Date: April 15, 2010 04:34 PM · On: Chapter 1

interesting it is good keep going good work i wanna see what happens next



Author's Response:

Thanks!  I appreciate you reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: seeker (Signed) · Date: April 15, 2010 04:15 PM · On: Chapter 1

pretty good so far thanks



Author's Response:

Pretty good, eh? I'll take that, and raise you to a wow by oh, say Chapter 5.  I hope you come along for the ride . . . it'll eventually get . . . bumpy.  ;)

Thanks so much for reviewing!

Reviewer: Jenny Cullen (Signed) · Date: April 15, 2010 03:32 PM · On: Chapter 1

Great start!  I can't wait to read more about Catherine & Charlie and to hear who it was at the end!



Author's Response:

Thanks Jenny!  My beloved beta! 

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