Great job. Well written. I even went back and read it a second and third time to pick up on the subtle clues that you snuck in here and there before the big conclusion.

HOLY SHIT!  Didn't see that coming!  So was this Jake?  Jasper?  Who is the husband?   Edward was adopted so I can see how he would possible be in love with his adopted brother.  I thought maybe he might be gay, based on how hard it was for him to be aroused by Bella, and also for his lingering thoughts about the other men in his life...the assistant, pastor Emmett, his waiter...

It also make sense that he would hate Bella's erotic writings...he knows she's not getting those ideas from him.  He can't accept his deepest feelings and his own sexuality, so why would he encourage her to embrace her's?

Thank God he didn't shoot them or himself!   Please tell me who the huband is!  I skimmed back through and didn't see a name and it will drive me crazy.

Awesome story, found it by accident!

 

 

 

 

 

 

Is the husband In love with Edward or is it just a brotherly love? Your writing style is interesting and different and makes you story unique, though.

While i was reading it, i was pondering over who the husband was, and the one name that i kept on thinking of was James. Is it?

I didn't get the "thinking of people" thing at first, but now I do!  Great story, I loved it!

That was amazing........ I couldn't stop reading it. The angst is adult and relatable but the outcome was suprising, half way through I figured the husband would have killed them because he was just that selfish. I was glued to this until the end! THANK YOU!!

because he loves him as a brother right???? lol

 

really good story. love the style. its so different and fresh :)

Wow, that was amazing! I love the style of writing. I went back and read it a second time to find more details. You're a fantastic writer :)

*le sigh*

I read this when you first posted it on ffnet and I'm still in love with it. I really wish you'd make this in a multichapter story. I think it'd be phenomenal! But there are only so many hours in a day and I'm sure your busy. Anyway, still love it :D

WOW. That was some truly amazing and stirring writing.

This was amazing.  I read it this morning on my phone and fell in  love with it.  You wrote the beautifully.  I think you're an amazing writer and I really wish you would update 'It started with indecency'  I really loved that story and I really miss it *wink wink*  Anyway this was great.