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Reviewer: 4Eva (Signed) · Date: July 13, 2009 12:35 PM · On: The Line
This was goooood! :)
Reviewer: twitart28 (Signed) · Date: July 13, 2009 06:48 AM · On: Serious Sunday
Ok miss marroqin i love this story but my mexican mantality wont get passed the fact that bella is a big whore in this one!! i mean I know shes not but like i said i know my welita would say "que puta esa bella" anyway just having a little moment there sorry!!xoxoxOO
Author's Response: Hahahaha...my welita would not no doubt say the same then say a prayer since I'm the one writing it.
Erica
Reviewer: fr33bird (Signed) · Date: July 13, 2009 01:13 AM · On: Torture 101
LOL! I've only just started this story after reading a recommendation somewhere (I forget where)
It's great, very funny! I like a feisty confident Bella. I was PMSL at Alice and Rose stroking her legs. Poor Edward... he is so screwed!!
I have to go and do useful things now, but will be carrying on with this story when I have more time to read later :)
Reviewer: lepi19 (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 09:07 PM · On: Left Behind
*sigh* I still don't understand why they're STILL confused, but I've never been in a situation like this, so what do I know? Getting a little impatient now... OH! I absolutely LOVED Jacob's message, it was so sweet! Anyway, great chapter!
Reviewer: lepi19 (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 07:08 PM · On: Toxic
"Does she love me?
The video told me she did. Why did I still doubt it?"
At this part I was like, very good question Edward! OK, I let out an actual gasp when Edward said "Her fiance" and it might've been joined by a little happy dance... But...I know he's driven by his need to protect her, but why did he take her out of the hospital? That's not protecting her! *sigh* it's ok though, I can wait...
Reviewer: starry-eyed (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 06:58 PM · On: The Good
i liked reading your short story, until, you started including a lot of expletives that are too much for my taste.. even without the many "f" words in there, i think, your readers would still very much enjoy this piece.
starry-eyed
Reviewer: lia47 (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 06:35 PM · On: The Bad
good twist, this sucks, it gets worse doesn't it.
Reviewer: lepi19 (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 06:27 PM · On: Black
Finally! I'm so happy with him it just makes me want to slap him the back of the head and say "Idiot" then walk away. But, OK, I get it, he had to take a deep breath and remove himself from the conversation to fully let everything soak in and finally realize what a butt he's been. OK, you're right, that's more natural I guess, I was just worried he wouldn't ever come to his senses. (well, I knew he would because it IS a ff, but I was worried about the time it would take...) but that's why you're the author and I'm not. *sigh* OK, no longer angry, great chapter! Off to "Toxic"!
Reviewer: lepi19 (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 05:19 PM · On: The Gala
What. The. Hell! Edward is a flippin' maniac/retard/butt/female dog/idiot/moron/b*st*rd and every other bad word in the universe! (I have a problem with cuss words, I know you get what I mean) How can he be so stupid? He saw the pain in her eyes, knew he caused it, knew she said it would tear them apart, yet chose to freak out when he found it, knowing ALL ALONG that something like this would happen, and he promised her he would still love her! Knowing all the pain she's gone through in her life! He's a freaking B*ST*RD! Period.(!)(Great chapter btw!)
Reviewer: wonderingpixie (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 04:56 PM · On: Horrendous Holidays
Poor Edward can't catch a break! I feel so bad for him; hasn't Bella learned her lesson about keeping thigns from him? He tries to do so much for her, and all she does is make him feel like crap about it! It's like Edward can do no right and Bella can do no wrong (which I think she's done the same, if not more, wrong as Edward). Honestly, I can't stand Bella and her righteous attitude toward Edward. Edward deserves someone who actually appreciates what he does (though I understand this is a Bella/Edward story, so the chances of him dumping her sorry butt for someone else is slim, buta girl can dream can't she?) That said, I'm looking forward to the next chapter. I wonder who Bella's real estate agent is...
Reviewer: 4Eva (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 04:42 PM · On: Torture 101
Can't wait to see what's going to happen at the club!
Reviewer: 4Eva (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 04:26 PM · On: Assignments & Introductions
Love it!
Reviewer: lia47 (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 11:54 AM · On: Serious Sunday
Hope he can forgive her!
Reviewer: Kad1282 (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 01:39 AM · On: Horrendous Holidays
OMFG I a loving this story please update soon I cant handle the suspense. You are a fabulous writer!
So God dame hot and yet so soft and sensual al at the same time!!! GREAT!!
Reviewer: lia47 (Signed) · Date: July 11, 2009 11:43 PM · On: Dinner Divine
scooby, spot, fido, leprachan, elf, munchkin ?
Reviewer: Carolyn81 (Signed) · Date: July 11, 2009 11:13 PM · On: The Ugly
Holy fucking shit I can't breathe, I have tightness in my chest, and I can't see because my eyes are swollen. That entire scene where she's in her apartment and he's outside her door....totally fucking bawled the entire time! I was dying. I had to stop reading so I could calm myself down dammit! Thank you for not drawing out their separation because I don't think I could handle more of that.
Then, THEN, that entire scene with Daniel. I was reading like a madwoman trying to make sure that she didn't get shot. I'll admit, when I relized that it was Daniel that was shot, I said "thank gawd!" I know, I'm terrible...but I don't regret feeling that way. The parallels, oh man! I'm thankful that Edward said he'd be there to help her through it...we'll have to see.
Reviewer: Carolyn81 (Signed) · Date: July 11, 2009 10:36 PM · On: The Bad
I should have just gone to bed after reading "The Good" because now I need to get passed "The Ugly" so I can STOP FUCKING CRYING! UGH! That was evil...pure evil.
I was totally lost at first not knowing wth had happened. I thought for sure it was Daniel and he was trying to drug her so he could take her away. I never put two and two together with Tanya...I didn't think she gave a damn about Edward. That was just thoroughly fucked up...and now he has to be a douche again?! NOOOO! Maybe I should just skip "The Ugly" so i can actually sleep tonight. No? Not a good idea? Ugh, alright...
Reviewer: lia47 (Signed) · Date: July 11, 2009 09:39 PM · On: In Her Room
GO BELLA -
I am soo glad he managed to leave I'm sure he won't regret it I wonder how Bella will feel when she finds out she was set up by Alice and Jacob, that should be great. The teasing is great I love how they both can't stand it!
Reviewer: Carolyn81 (Signed) · Date: July 11, 2009 09:27 PM · On: The Good
Hells yes he's got it bad...and I FUCKING WANT ONE OF THOSE FUCKING CHAIRS! LOL!! I can only imagine what happened before that fucking beeping started...lucky for me, I happen to know that you have a side chapter devoted to the tantra chair ;o)
I'm loving how Edward is getting so comfortable, and in front of other people! I mean hell, he just told Carlisle and Esme to go for dinner at their place for goodness sake!
Okay, must go and read the side chapter...shame on you for not telling the readers! Good thing I have great sources :D
Reviewer: lia47 (Signed) · Date: July 11, 2009 09:12 PM · On: Margarita Monday
I'm hoping for good guy but I don't know how much he caqn take!
Reviewer: Carolyn81 (Signed) · Date: July 11, 2009 08:52 PM · On: Serious Sunday
OH my GOD! I can't breathe from crying! That was so fucking beautiful! That entire intervention had me holding my breath. When she knocked his ass out of his chair, I totally gasped out loud. That was such an intense moment. Then him telling her Edward was a keeper...UGH!
Now....HOLYSHITEDWARDWASHERFIRSTFUCKINGTIME!!! I was chanting, "no fucking way" over and over in my head while I was reading that part. So good how you fitted that in there. I loved that we found out her penname too. I'm thinking Edward needs to do some research on this "Susan" person ;o)
Reviewer: soofine11 (Signed) · Date: July 11, 2009 05:15 PM · On: Horrendous Holidays
THEY JUST COULDN'T WAIT COUPLE MORE SECONDS!! WOW! lOOVE IT ADD CN'T WAIT!!
Reviewer: dinx (Signed) · Date: July 11, 2009 11:17 AM · On: Horrendous Holidays
I need more of this story! It's amazing! I can't get enough. I love that your chapters are soooo long and really ellaborate. I love that Bella is vulnerable, yet so strong and able to take care of herself while still needing Edward. I love that the story explores so much of their relationship and takes us on a roller coaster ride of emotions. I can't wait to read the next installment. I hope it's soon! (Fingers and toes are crossed)!!!
Reviewer: Carolyn81 (Signed) · Date: July 10, 2009 11:24 PM · On: Sensual Saturday
Oh my goodness! This chapter was jam packed!
I am just seeing Edward being really pissed off about Bella and his family tricking him. Especially after that crazy display with the random set of lips. I totally dropped my jaw at that part. But it was well played. It made them both see that he's really serious about things, and that was the only way he knew how to lash out. He's still a manwhore after all.
I loved the pictures from your trip to the falls. I had a feeling, with all the details, that you had actually gone there. Very nice!
Reviewer: dinx (Signed) · Date: July 10, 2009 12:54 PM · On: I Need You
Hilarious! I loved the bra in the tree! Classic!! Carlisle is such a cool dad!
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