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Reviewer: FanNan46 (Signed) · Date: December 08, 2010 10:49 AM · On: Chapter 62: Across the Night Sky

All together now....AWWWWWWW!!!!!!!   Thanks for the extra lemons.  These 2 are so cute (and HOT) together.  :)  Just LOVE this story!!!!



Author's Response:

Hi FanNan!

Glad you liked the extra zestiness of the additional lemons. ;) They are awfully cute, aren't they? Thanks for the Storylove! And thanks for the review.

-bannerday

Reviewer: Indianwalker (Signed) · Date: December 08, 2010 10:35 AM · On: Chapter 62: Across the Night Sky

sweet!

Author's Response:

Glad you liked it!

-bannerday

Reviewer: silly sad sarah twilighted (Signed) · Date: December 08, 2010 09:53 AM · On: Chapter 62: Across the Night Sky

wow great story I am all caught up and although it took me a few days my husband was dragging me to bed I had the story in my lap reading well into the am hehehe  Great work I know I failed on reviews but clicking next was more important when it came to my addiction and now as you tell me my addiction is coming to an end I morn sniffle this story has been so much fun and theres no way it can end right now we still have alot of James we can toy with and I'm just not ready LOL pout hehehe



Author's Response:

Hi ssst!

Thanks for reading and dropping me a line. I guess the highest compliment someone can pay is that they couldn't write reviews because they were too involved in the story. So thank you for the compliment. ;) I'm going to miss this story when it is done, but I probably have a chapter or two more than what I think I have left, because I keep thinking of things I want to include. We'll see...

Thanks again,

-bannerday

Reviewer: songii (Signed) · Date: December 08, 2010 09:39 AM · On: Chapter 62: Across the Night Sky

hhmmm....what happen on Oct 5?? Was it another girl, did i miss something in previous chapters? Oh well...glad Bella seems to change his thought process around this time, doesn't sound like it was good



Author's Response:

Sorry for the confusion..I thought it would be obvious, but maybe not. There was only one other girl for Edward, Tanya, who committed suicide, exactly three years ago. More on that part of his history in the next chapter. But Bella has changed him and brought him out of the guilt trip that his life had turned into...even though he had nothing to do with her death. If you want a refresher course, go back to chapters 16 and 48, where Edward first tells her about his romantic history and then where they both talk about his geelings of guilt regarding her death.

Thanks for the review.

-bannerday

Reviewer: TeamAllTwilight (Signed) · Date: December 08, 2010 09:32 AM · On: Chapter 62: Across the Night Sky

Banner~

Loved this chapter it was soulful and I really enjoyed that they not only had some citrus fun, but talked more.  Joking around the way they do shows how much they care for each other. I love that bella was imagining if you will her future.  I can see this story carrying on and going so many places now that they have this extra connection that has bonded them more then they already were bonded.  I wonder how he is goign to feel returnign to campus with James stalkign and what not....is there potential for our favorite 3 couples gettign off campus housing together??  It would be a sexting frenzy...LOL

Really loving the story thanks for sharing it with us all!

TAT~



Author's Response:

Hi TAT!

Glad you liked that last chapter. I think it was a little more soulful too. They are in their own little bubble, no distractions, free to be citrusy, silly, sexy and soulful. And I think the talking a little more shows that there's a lot behind all of that other stuff. They are obviously really comfortable with each other.

I think Bella imaging what her "future" might be like if it involved Edward is a very natural thing to do, kind of trying it on for size. I think she realized they would maybe be a good fit.

Edward is not going to be happy about the James thing. If anything this weekend has just made Edward feel that much closer and more protective of Bella.

I already have a housing plan up my sleeve. We'll get there. ;)

Thanks for the continued Storylove,

-bannerday

Reviewer: Yrollam (Signed) · Date: December 08, 2010 09:26 AM · On: Chapter 62: Across the Night Sky

WTF already almost done? Am I the only one who wants this story go om forever and ever and ever. Gotta admit I cant wait for the james drama but u already know that lol

Author's Response:

Okay, Mal, so this story HAS gone on forver. :) How can you possibly write "WTF already almost done?"  ROFL The James drama will be back, but I am going to be a little slower with updates now with the holidays.

Thanks for the Emmett-like guffaw.

-bannerday

Reviewer: lawruhn (Signed) · Date: December 08, 2010 08:54 AM · On: Chapter 62: Across the Night Sky

You are amazing! These two are so great. Can't wait to see the end result. 



Author's Response:

Thanks for the compliment. And thanks for reviewing.

-bannerday

Reviewer: Twifan_02 (Signed) · Date: December 08, 2010 07:47 AM · On: Chapter 62: Across the Night Sky

Another great chapter. Sigh......

I can see why they can't get out of the pool house.  I wouldn't want to leave either!  Not disappointed at all that there will be a few more chapters.

Thanks for continuing to write!



Author's Response:

Hi Twifan,

Glad you liked that chapter, and thank you for being understanding about them not being able to exit the poolhouse. ;)

Thanks for reviewing.

-bannerday

Reviewer: twilightgma1954 (Signed) · Date: December 08, 2010 07:09 AM · On: Chapter 62: Across the Night Sky

Something are hard to get just right but you got it  just perfect........ I am so impressed most collage sex is just that you built areal bond here and the waiting just made it more prefect 



Author's Response:

Thanks, twigma!

I think the reason this seems like such a bond is the fact that both B & E were reluctant about a relationship to begin with. So it wasn't about sexual entertainment, or them hunting for someone to have sex with, it was something that gradually grew out of a closeness that they achieved naturally. They were both lacking something in their lives and the other filled that void.

Glad you liked it. thanks for the review.

-bannerday

Reviewer: lbritt (Signed) · Date: December 08, 2010 06:40 AM · On: Chapter 62: Across the Night Sky

I just read this on FFn, but can't review there at work. Stupid blocks anyways, i was wonder where you were and then we get this lovely update.

I can't say it enought these two are so freakin' cute.

I am glad that you split this night into several chapters so we could get all the details of what he had planned.  Just so you know your lemons are perfect.  Just enough lemon zest to make it tart, but not too much juice to make is sour.  does that make sense?

As always enjoying the words you share with us. Thank you so much



Author's Response:

Hi lbritt,

I've been running behind on replies to reviews. So maybe I'll try going backwards. It's just been hectic with the holidays approaching. That and I've been playing on the MotU thread waaaay too much. ;)

Thanks for reviewing---I appreciate you going to the trouble of reading it on one site and reviewing on another. That's fan-dedication!

I'm glad you were happy to get the update. And I still have one more chapter to go with their little escape before they are back to reality. I'm glad you like the way I write my lemons. I don't want to be too vague...but I just can't get too clinical either. And I think they have to be kind of innocent yet steamy. So, I try my best. ;)

Thanks for reading and reviewing. Keep in touch.

-bannerday

Reviewer: delilah69 (Signed) · Date: December 08, 2010 06:32 AM · On: Chapter 62: Across the Night Sky

they are so sweet together! they really are the perfect match!



Author's Response:

Thanks for loving them and loving the way they are together.

-bannerday

Reviewer: cbell (Signed) · Date: December 06, 2010 05:07 AM · On: Chapter 48: A Slow Dance to Fix You

Sad and loving chapter.  They both get another chance to express how they truely love and feel about each other.  Bella being able to simpathize with how Edward wants to fix things and end up broken himself really hit her deep.  She may not have been as broken.  But she needed someone who made her happy and not stess the way Jake made her.  I'm jealous of the both of them.  Too cute.

Reviewer: cbell (Signed) · Date: December 06, 2010 04:59 AM · On: Chapter 48: A Slow Dance to Fix You

I liked this chapter alot too.  Bella feeling very strongly for the little boy that Edward was and the young man that he became.  Wanting to fix everything and not being able to, which broke him.  Bella truely loves him.  To feel someone elses pain and understand how it came about and wanting to be their is truely loving and sharing your life with someone.  Beautiful the way they are together.  Do you know people this connected in real life.  I've seen similar relationships on twice. 

Reviewer: cbell (Signed) · Date: December 06, 2010 04:54 AM · On: Chapter 46: The Business of Appetites

Swallownign hard and need a cold shower.  Thanks alot!



Author's Response:

Yeah, it was a fairly hot and heavy chapter...expecially given the fact that there are other people in the house...but who can resists Edward's charms??????? Nuff said.

-bannerday

Reviewer: cbell (Signed) · Date: December 06, 2010 04:53 AM · On: Chapter 45: The Food Network

I will alway remember the pain-in-the-as, Two -Layer Chocolate Bastard Cockblocker Cake.  Eddy should know that if it wasn't for that cake it would have been Emmette, Alice, Jasper, mom or Dad.  That house is too into his buisness.  I love the tour of the pantry and how Esme has her can alphabetize. 



Author's Response:

Hi cbell! Still catching up...I think that cake of Bella's will go down in infamy...at least as far as Edward is concerned. You're right, if it hadn't ben the cockblocking cake, it would have been a cockblocking brother, or sister, or a cockblocking mother or father...Everyone is soooo into Edward's business, because Edward has had so little business these past three years. It's cause for celebration. ;)

I'm not so sure Esme has her cans alphabetized...but at least that's Bella's story and she's sticking to it. ;)

Thaks for the review.

-bannerday

Reviewer: cbell (Signed) · Date: December 06, 2010 04:48 AM · On: Chapter 44: Just Desserts

Yep Mrs. Cope tracks down Mr. C.  Even the kids hd to sit and watch the hot mess which is Mrs. Cope come on to him....  Another funny.  Poor Edward and his crazy loving family.  I'm jealous.



Author's Response:

I love that you referred to Cougar Cope as a hot mess. Most deff! Poor Carlisle...he can't help it that he's so hot, and now his kids have to watch that woman put the move on him.

I love the crazy Cullens. I think I want to move into the Cullen Compound. But only if I can share Edward's room with him. Because he smells like himself, you know? ;)

Thanks for the review.

-bannerday

Reviewer: cbell (Signed) · Date: December 06, 2010 04:45 AM · On: Chapter 43: Miles of Aisles

I'm back getting caught up with my reviews.  I loved this chapter and how fun it was to read.  Antics in the supermarket.  Edward and Mrs. Cope that was too funny how he discribes her as maybe fake parts.  Boy!  What's with the family throwing him condom?  I know the parents want him to be safe but give a guy a break.  It's funny though how everyone had the same idea.



Author's Response:

The supermarket/multi-condom-pack/Mrs. Cope chapter was a kick to write. It was very fast-paced. That many hot Twilight men in one supermarket, it's surprising the building catch on fire, there was so much hotness in there. ;) I love Mrs. Cope. She works so hard at being youthful. And it must be so costly, if Edward's observations of her fake parts are to be believed.

 

And as for the condoms...I just know the pack that Jasper presented to Edward was the festive, multi-colored, glow-in-the-dark variety. LOL

Thanks for the review.

-bannerday

Reviewer: Amnotkim (Signed) · Date: December 05, 2010 10:40 AM · On: Chapter 58: Part of the Build-Up

Oh my goodness!!!:) haha that was hilarious!! And so awesome! I love how she brought that up!! Edwards reaction was PRICELESS!! I'm still laughing bout it!! Sorry I haven't reviewed in a while I've been too caught up in reading the story! I haven't been able to put it down, if that's the right word choice!:):)

Author's Response:

It's such a compliment for a reader to tell me they were so caught up in the story that they didn't want to stop to review. that makes the not-reviewing totally acceptable. ;)

Glad you liked the chapter at the Black's. Renie could have been a little more thoughtful talking about Edward and Bella having a child. Poor Edward, coughing his lungs up like that...

Thanks for the compliments and the review.

-bannerday

Reviewer: Nathyette (Anonymous) · Date: December 03, 2010 02:55 PM · On: Chapter 61: Orbitting Celestial Bodies

*Sigh* You definitely did not disappoint, missy.



Author's Response:

Glad you liked that last one. Hope you like the next one. A little more sighing to be done, I think. ;)

-bannerday

Reviewer: cbell (Signed) · Date: December 03, 2010 11:33 AM · On: Chapter 39: Let the Fun Begin

These two are killing me with all this sexual tention.  I loved it.



Author's Response:

The sexual tension is killing them, too, if that's any consolation to you. ;) Thanks for the review and the Chapterlove.

-bannerday

Reviewer: cbell (Signed) · Date: December 03, 2010 11:32 AM · On: Chapter 38: Say It...Out Loud

Edward was pissing me off with his emo attitiude earlier.  He was saved by Bell's gift for forgiveness. 



Author's Response:

Hi cbell!

Edward was rather frustrating. Imagine how Bella was feeling. But you are right, Bella is forgiving. She also realized the absurdity of the situation with the coincidence of Edward turning up in time to see Jake kiss her, but not seeing the resulting aftermath. I think I can forgive him. She also realizes that his baggage has done a real number on him. But now they are moving forward.

Thanks for the review. Keep in touch.

-bannerday

Reviewer: Rory1984 (Signed) · Date: December 02, 2010 11:07 AM · On: Chapter 61: Orbitting Celestial Bodies

Hey BD :)

Now it took me a while, but it is :) I have quite a few things to say ;)

First of I loved them all: Jell -O- Ward, Stressward, Rambleward...

And our poor boy had a the fuckfest of stress this past few days - I am glad that now he feeling all better :P .. I could really imgagine his face sitting on that bed in the poolhouse with Bella in his arms and thinking and rambling on...

- the night at the Police- Chief father´s house " We are talking a shitload of stress with that little disclosure"

- then of course: Jasper Hale´s Rules of Behavior Modification to be Adhered to in the Presence of an Armed and Potentially Lethal Parent... that was hilarious that is one hell of a title for a handbook!! Btw I love your Jasper!!!!!!!

-then his realization: "Shit! I hope I never have a daughter." Followed by "And thanks, Renie, for planting that little seed today. I´d sure as hell better not be planting any seeds any time soon." ... I can imagine he wold freak at that thought.. and as much as I love little E/B babies I dont see that happening here, right?? ;) (maybe in an Epilogue?? *prettyplease*)

-then Edward and the underwear drawer - 1 of his favorite fantasies to come true ;) - I am gald for him he was so stressed out that day when they moved...

- now my favorite: "Extreme HD- Imax- 3-D- Sound Hardcore Sensory Overload" + the hilarious thoughts going around in his head with which he is trying to distract himself... - the poor guy ;) but he made it and as he himself said: "Practice makes perfect"

Thankfully B. agrees: "What if you are right? Waht of there is room for improvement? We should find out. Right now."

Then another favorite part of mine is:

"And here comes the blush in 5,4,3,2 ... - What? No blush...?" - thought that was really good especially become HE blushes right afterwards :) - Well Edward you said it yourself. You like that Bella is unpredictable ;)

And the chocolate explosion apple - seems very fitting!!!! To have sth chocolaty they can enjoy especially after Edward was mocked by that Double -Layer- ... Cockblocker- .... (what was the name of the cake again;) all weekend!!

I have said it before but I must say it again. You write them sooo well. It is just the right amount of serious and silly. I love all the giggling and teasing- makes them so much more relatable!! I see them in front of me when I am reading:) - which is quite a nice sight!

I have started reading your story from the beginning.. you there is always something you miss only reading it once ;) and some this you can enjoy more now that you know what is going to happen...

I think I will write reviews for some chapter as I am going along :) - but my favorite until now are the two afternoon/evenings on the rooftop - so intimate and just perfect!!!

Before I forget: Thank you for your song! Was a pleasure sticking with you for the past 60 chapters!!

I cant wait for the beginning of the new story. I know it will be great!! Is it AU-Human? Didnt quite get what you wrote about the validating process. Are not allowed to post a new story when the other one is not finshed??

Well, I hope you are well and you enjoyed your holidays! And did you see Rob buying the guitar? He looks well our boy - I guess Thanksgiving with your girl and her family does that to you ;)

Hope you can update soon and let us know when the sleezebag James is getting what he deserves!!!!

Take care :)



Author's Response:

Hallo Schatz!

I just looooooooove me a long review. Nearly as much as I love Edward. ;)

I'm glad you loved all my -wards: Jelloward, Stressward, and Rambleward. I love those boys too. I like to write them.

Edward really needs to just let himself unwind, but noooo, he's got to continually re-process things. You just know that he really didn't enjoy spending too much time with The Chief,; he was on pins and needles waiting for the time to pass. But he did okay, he just doesn't trust himself.

Glad you liked the title of Jasper's self-help manual. Such words of wisdom. And I'm glad you love my Jasper. I think he's awfully cute.

And no...no little E & B babies. Perhaps in the epi, we'll see.

Sexually stressed Edward was kind of funny. What a nightmare to suddenly find yourself experiencing Extreme H-D IMAX 3-D Surround Sound Hardcore Sensory Overload at a very crucial moment. But Edward knows how to bring himself under control: he just needs to think of preposterous situations involving parents.

It's funny that Edward expected Bella to blush and then he wound up being the one to blush. He forgets how well Bella has dealt with Emmett in the past, so he should realize that she can defend herself from him and his smirky comments. ;)

Now as to the Chocolate Explosion Apple---you did make the connection with the cover art of Twilight, didn't you? ;)  (The cake was called the Two-Layer Chocolate Bastard Cockblocker Cake. Edward was on the verge of calling it the Two-Layer Chocolate Bastard Motherfucker Cockblocker Cake, but the cake let up a little, so Edward didn't have to go too far.)

Thank you for the kind words regarding how I have written these characters. I really have fallen in love with them. They do seem realistic to me. I can hear them in my head and their personalities have begun to really kind of write themselves. I think it's interesting too how much Edward has changed and that wasn't something that I consciously wrote as I went, it just sort of unraveled that way as I told the story. I'm happy with that.

WOW!!! You are re-reading! I've been thinking about going back and re-reading for myself starting at the beginning, because of one of my final chapters. It's a lot to read!!!

I would love to hear what you think now that you know where the story is going. If you notice something that you didn't the first time, or anything you want to comment on, I would love your feedback. Maybe I should email you and tell you what my idea is for one of the final chapters, maybe you can give me feedback. I just don't want to mention it here.

I can't post my new story yet. Once I submit a chapter for a new story I can't post chapters for this story until the new story gets validated and that is currently taking around three weeks. I don't want readers of The Transfer to have to wait three weeks for me to be able to finally post another chapter. Any way, the new story is AU-AH.

Hope you enjoy chapter 62. Keep in touch. Thanks for another wonderful review.

-bannerday

P.S. Loved Guitarrob. Seems very content these days. ;)

Reviewer: jenaflower (Signed) · Date: December 02, 2010 09:01 AM · On: Chapter 1: Putting the Move On

Oklay, WTF.  I officially hate blackberry.  I had a whole wonderful review typed for you Bannerday, it was like 4 paragraphs.  Now I must Paraphrase.  don't kill me if it's not too detailed.

It started off with:

Bannerday, I <3 you. Killing me softly FOR SURE.  But worth the wait.  A friend of mine from another online forum both read the transfer, and she PM'd me on facebook and called this lemon night (both chapies, not just this one) a "How to" guide for men, and that this whole story should be required reading for men in college.  I couldn't agree more.

Stressward is sooo funny.  He panics over the smallest things, and that is what makes him unique in your fic.  I love him.  And Bella is not a lay around and let bad things happen to her Bella, she's independent and strong.  I am not a fan of all the fics where she just rolls over and does nothing.

I do wait to read your updates for last, just because I know you are getting close to the end.  Please just give us a good finish with the James story line.  I have read some fics where the storyline of the pretador is resolved in the Epi.  Please don't do that to me.

Sorry that blackberry killed my first review, I read most of the twilighted stories on it while I nurse my 7month old son, and hang out watching Mickey Mouse with my three year old daugher.  (It's hard to carry around a desktop ya know. lol) so when I review, I have to actually log onto a real computer from now on.

Have an awesome day, and I am awaiting your next update.

Jen



Author's Response:

Hi jen!

You took all that time to write me such a nice long review and then I fell off the face of the Earth for a few days. I wanted to finish chapter 62. If I force myself to stick with it and tell myself I can't answer anymore reviews until I finish, that helps to spur me on. ;)

Glad you think that the fact that I was Killing You Slowly was acceptable in the loooooong run. ;) I'm glad your friend found Edward's plans and deeds to be worthy of a how-to for men. Probably because I want my man to do these things for me. And a few of them he has, just not all in one evening, and not too recently. Oh well, I have my memories.

I love Stressward/Rambleward. He's just too funny. He's very candid and sweetly vulgar. He does panic and obsess over the smallest things. Very anal retentive. I hate a Blah-Bella like you do. I tried to give her a personality. I think often she doesn't have enough personality, or else she has too much personality and is too "snarky". I wanted someone believable and someone we would feel was worthy of Edward's time and effort and love.

I think I'm working up to a good finish. I'll try not to let my readers down. I just posted chapter 62 and I will begin working on 63 in a day or two after I've caught up on reviews a little more. I need time to marinate my thoughts about what is coming as we near the end of the story. It has gone on longer than I thought. I've already written four chapters since I said that there were four chapters to go. Now I think I still have two chapters. (So maybe that means three???) What can I say, I'm a wordy bitch and we've established that over the course of 60+ chapters. ;)

James will be resolved before the epi. And before the other chapter that I don't know what to classify it as...;)

Thanks for taking the time to write me such a lovely review, especially being the very busy mother of two small children. Been there, done that. Loved it. (Mine were the same age difference...but son first, daughter second.)

Take care, get some sleep, I'm sure you don't get enough, and enjoy chapter 62. Keep in touch jen!

-bannerday

Reviewer: luv2readff (Signed) · Date: December 01, 2010 10:58 AM · On: Chapter 57: So Near and Yet So Far

woo hoo... great chapter!!! i'm slowly catching up, but enjoying it all just the same! :)



Author's Response:

I'm glad you are still enjoying the story. I'm behind in my replies, but I'll get there! Thanks for the review.

-bannerday

Reviewer: Cina24 (Signed) · Date: December 01, 2010 10:41 AM · On: Chapter 61: Orbitting Celestial Bodies

That was such an amazing chapter. Edward is funny and oh so romantic. Looking forward to more pool time!

Author's Response:

Hi Cina!

Glad you liked chapter 61. Sorry I am so slow about replying. I have been working on chapter 62. I force myself to finish before I get back to replies. I love Rambleward. He's so candid, funny, off-color and sweet in a very vulgar kind of way sometimes. ;)

More pool time available now. and even chapter 63 will have a touch more poolhouse before I can drag these two away. ;)

thanks for the review.

-bannerday

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