I love this story. I have said that alot, but I really, really mean it!
I love drunk Emmett, Jasper and Edward. I think it would be fun to just go out and party with them. I am so going to miss this story.
The journal enteries were phenomenal. I would say Edward really has a way with words, but in reality you truly have a gift for writing. You make your readers feel the emotions the characters are feeling. You pull us into the story and we eagerly hang onto every word. When I reach the end of each update it is bitter sweet. I love finding out what happens, but at the same time, there is nothing more to read.
I can't wait for more "windows".

CM

Author's Response:

Hi CM!

I figured I'd wait until I was about a week late with the review reply, just so you would know this was really coming from me. I guess I have better reasons now...I'm on three sites, working on an outtake and an epi for The Transfer and now I'm also working on chapters for One Stupid Thing. And then there's this thing called a "job" that really keeps biting into my fanfic time...Sheesh!

Glad to know you are still having the Storylove here. And what's not to love about drunk Emmett, Jasper and Edward? I love the idea of Edward so happy that he's celebrating and getting happy drunk, because from his past he did more of the "drowning your sorrows" kind of drunk. I'm so glad I did a drunk chapter. ;) Totally college, I think.

The journal entries felt so "heavy" to me. But I guess that's how Edward would be. I'm glad you really enjoyed them and thank you for the compliments about my writing style. It's good to know that you feel their emotions so strongly. It's not often a story makes me cry, but sometimes reading something that I'm writing from the EPOV really gets to me. Maybe it's because it's my own story and I'm that much more tied to it and the characters. ;)

I'm so sorry this story is coming to a close. It will be like a relationship finishing for me when it's over. And it's been going on for over a year and a half since I first began writing it over on fanfiction. That's a long time to develop feelings for someone(s)---like all these characters. Maybe an occasional outtake will occur to me and I'll continue to post them from time to time. It'll be like visiting with family I haven't seen for a while. ;)

Thank you for your lovely words and for stalking me over on TWCS. :)

-bannerday

it's SO SO SO long... i had to read it in few batches... juz 1 phrase to describe "LOVING IT!!!" it felt more like a monologue than a diary/journal... ^_^

waiting for the next 2 "window" and obviously ur new story =)

Author's Response:

Hi noniLG!

That wasn't quite as long as chapter 69, but I think just because Edward was so depressed through much of it it takes longer to wade through. At least the happy, carefree boy is back...out paying pancake house employees $20 to make sexy pancakes for his lady love. ;)

Glad you enjoyed that first outtake. Two more "extras" to go, and I've posted "One Stupid Thing" in the queue...it's just waiting for validation. But that may take two weeks...meanwhile I'll be working on the next "extra."

Thanks for the review.

-bannerday

nice

Author's Response:

Glad you enjoyed that first outtake, Songii. Two more "extras" to go, and I've posted "One Stupid Thing" in the queue...it's just waiting for validation. that may take a couple weeks...meanwhile I'll be working on the next "extra."

Thanks for the review.

-bannerday

:)

He's just SO sweet *sigh*

Author's Response:

Hi sistajalice!

He is a sweetie, isn't he? *sigh* *drool* *puddle*

Glad you enjoyed that first outtake. Two more "extras" to go, and I've posted "One Stupid Thing" in the queue...it's just waiting for validation. that may take a couple weeks...meanwhile I'll be working on the next "extra."

Thanks for the review.

-bannerday

It was nice to read Edwards Thoughts I love this story he has such great family and friends

Author's Response:

Hi glock26girl!

Glad you liked Edward's thoughts. It's definitely wordy inside that head of his. ;)

He does have such great family and friends. I'm glad you like them. I kind of do too.

I just posted One Stupid Thing in the queue, so be on the lookout for that. It will probably be a few weeks before anything from me shows up here on this site while I wait for validation on that new story. Meanwhile I'll be working on my last two "extras" for The Transfer.

Thank you for the review and the Storylove.

-bannerday

Great story!  The whole thing was wonderful and highly entertaining!

Author's Response:

Hi love2read!

Thank you for the review. I'm so glad you enjoyed the story and found it so entertaining. I hope you will give my next story a shot when it posts. Should be a couple weeks. Meanwhile I am working on two more "extras" for The Transfer. Put me on alert if you want notification.

Thanks again.

-bannerday

gotta love stuff

Author's Response:

Somehow I skipped this review, photogal! Sorry!  Poor Edward and his thoughts run-amok because of "stuff" that Bella may have bought to wear internally or externally. ;)

-bannerday

Banner as always loved it all!  You continue to amaze me.  Are we goign to get a glimpse at them after college or out of the dorm???

Kasi~

Author's Response:

Hi Kasi!

Thanks for the Storylove! Yes, there will be glimpses of the future, both in college and out of the dorm and afterwards into the future. It's going to take a bit to do it, though. I'm trying to decide whether I want to do another outtake chapter first, or jump to the epilogue next. I guess most writers do the epi and then the outtakes, but I knew I wanted to do the journal outtake right away---it probably should have just been a regular chapter. But chapter 69 really felt like the end-point, celebration-wise. If you have an opinion about outtake vs. epi I'd like to hear it.

And I finally just started my other story. It's going to take a bit while it sits in the queue waiting for validation here. Could be three weeks. So I can't post anything else until that's out of the queue. You only get one thing at a time here on Twilighted. I did post the first chapter of One Stupid Thing over on TWCS site. So I'll see what readers over there think while I wait and drum my fingers on my desk. lol

Thanks for reading and reviewing and keeping in touch!

-bannerday 

*swoon* He's such an adorkable, lovable boy!

 

Author's Response:

Hi Tammygrrrl!

Glad you *swooned*. Me too! I'd like to lick that boy, he's just so damn yummy. ;)

Thanks for the review. Next outtake 2 to 3 weeks. Look for the new story to post about then too.

Take care, bb!

-bannerday

that was beautifully written..ahh young and hott love ;)

Author's Response:

Hi CO_M!

Glad you liked the sexy! FINALLY! Right? Thank you for the compliment. I didn't want it to get too smutty...I thought that would have been wrong with who these characters have become.

thank you for reviewing. Keep me posted. You're in the home stretch!

-bannerday

I wouldn't mind studying with Edward in the Swanky Fort :)

Author's Response:

I think the actual line here, photogal, is..."I wouldn't mind studying EDWARD in the Swanky Fort." LOL

Thanks for the smile.

-bannerday

funny how Bella shut Emmett down

Author's Response:

Hi photogal!

I like a Bella with personality...I still want her to blush, but I like that she can be devilish at times...especially with Emmett because he goes out of his way to try and embarrass Edward. :)

Thanks for reviewing again, bb!

-bannerday

*sobs* why? wwwwhhhyyy does it have to end? why i ask why? *rubs tears off face and blows nose* I started reading the update when it first updated, then i stopped. I couldn't bring my self to finish it and know there were not going to be any more of it coming.  Well, I read it today in it's entireity and absolutely loved it. I am not only miss this story and all the characters, but this little bit of interaction you and I have periodically.  Of course until your new story comes out and then I will be harrassing you some more.

On to the chapter review, Operation Forgiveness was in full effect.  The big guns were pulled out figuritively and literally.  The You Mean Everything To Me bouquet was great and so Edward. I love that. Again not a flower kind of girl, but when you put that much effort behind it I could be for sure. I am happy that they were able to talk it out and put all the cards on the table.  Good for Bella for letting him know how she felt and Good for Edward for opening up. Boys are so silly sometimes...well so are girls, but not my point right now. My point is men/boys keep things to theirselves so much it gives us girls the wrong idea most of the time.  As stated before, communication is always these 2 downfall.  

I like how you give us 'coupling' but spare us the intimate seedy details. Don't get me wrong there is a time and place for hot, sticky, steamy deets, but foregoing them in this chapter made it feel like it was sweet and loving make up sex.  The whole condom fiasco was so hilarious.  Also great way to teach responsibility by making it a priority that it will not happen unless they have them.  Oh and Wow 6 times in 12 hours, 'Wild, sweaty, animal sex' - INDEED!!!! Ah to be young again. 

You ended this chapter and story perfectly.  I like that you did not end it in some marriage proposal after only know each other a couple of months. We can determine where we would like them to be in the future. I like that you make these two age appropriate and responsible in their characterizations.  They have much more growing up to do, but both have good sense. 

I am excited to read you have a few more things coming out in regards to this story. Just inserting my opinion and no way is a demand, a peek into their future after graduating college, but with some snippets of their remaining years at college would be great.  I also would like to see Tanya's and Edward's tumultuous relationship because I am nosy. Oh and Edward becoming a father would be absoluting hilarious.

Okay i think i have rambled long enough here.  thank you for a great story, twice, and taking us along this rollacoaster of emotions, drama, and hijenks with all of the gang.  it has been riveting, interesting, and fun.

lb

Author's Response:

Hi lbritt!

Now I'M stalking YOU on several sites!!! :)  Sorry it took me so freaking long to reply to your lovely and lengthy review of the final regular chapter of The Transfer. I guess four days isn't so bad. There were some that I got ten days behind on. I just posted the first "extra" for The Transfer. I hope you enjoy it and will let me know what you think. I wonder if readers will expect what it is.

There were so many readers that told me they couldn't bring themselves to read the last chapter and held off on it like you did. I'm glad you loved it. I know what you mean about missing not just the story and the characters, but the interction we've developed as well. I have quite a few readers that reviewed all the way through or very nearly all the way through. That's amazing commitment. I could complie all your reviews, lbritt,  and post a one shot entitled, "The Transfer: The Review Board" LOL

On to your review of the actual chapter: I'm glad you liked how Edward pulled out his big gun...er, ...gunS for Operation Forgiveness. :) I'm not really a flowery kind of girl either, but for some reason, Edward loves his flower symbolism and he's gotten damn good at it. I keep imagining such a weird looking, rag-tag bouquet with a big, stalky Bird-of-Paradise jutting right up out of the middle. I can just imagine Bella's face, wondering "what the hell...?" as she took it from him. LOL You are right about their problem: it's communication and I guess in most relationships, that's what couples have to really work on. You can't expect the other person to know what you are thinking. And you can't hide things from them, thinking you're protecting them ("Edward! Pay attention here!") So, they struggle with it, but they are also new at this together so they are still ironing out how they work. They'll get there.

I'm glad you made the comment you did about their "coupling". I have a hard time trying to decide how to go. I don't think this story should have been ery smutty, and yet, there was a time and a place for that when they got together...for God's sake they waited 61 chapters, they deserved some SMUT! But I tried to keep it tasteful and youthful. And in the final chapter, of course they had to come ("come" --hehe) together for make up sex, but I didn't want it to be the focal point, other than the fact that Edward finally really needed his brother. ;) And the fact that they went at it like energizer bunnies (Wild, Sweaty, Animal SEX!!!)

I also like what you had to say about my keeping them age appropriate and responsible and that they had good sense. I think it fits them...they are both smart and cautious and they really care about each other.

I do have some peeks into their future planned. As well as the rest of the gang, of course, because how could yuou have one pair without the others? They're all a package-deal.

Thank you for the long and lovely review and all the wonderful things you had to say. Keep in touch, lbritt! Read those outtakes and the epi when they are posted and let me know what you think when you do. I've really enjoyed our "pen-pal-ship."

Take care, bb!

-bannerday