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Reviewer: ed1113 (Signed) · Date: July 27, 2010 07:32 PM · On: Chapter 37: Present Tense

ummmmm, I'm not sure if I'm speaking, I mean writing to you!  I do not like this at all!!  I need my romantic, cuddly B and E!!!   ugh, next chapter.  now!  pleaseeeeeee?????



Author's Response:

You don't like this, Bella doesn't like this, Edward hates this, and I'm not liking it at all either. If only Edward hadn't had all that caffeine, he might have gotten there at the appropriate time and none of this would have happened.

I'm working on chapter 38 already and should have it up by Friday. Keep your fingers crossed.

-bannerday

Reviewer: RobstenLuvre (Signed) · Date: July 27, 2010 12:50 PM · On: Chapter 36: Past Tense

Just get Edward to Forks ASAP..that's all i ask of you. Right now, at least...



Author's Response:

Well, he got there quickly. Lead foot on the accelerator will do that. Turns out he got there a little too quickly for his own good. ;(

-bannerday

Reviewer: RobstenLuvre (Signed) · Date: July 27, 2010 12:40 PM · On: Chapter 35: Highs and Lows

Well, since Jacob's totally fine i have no sympathy for his accident. That sounds really bitchy but i have a strong dislike for him, i just can't help that. SUCKS they never got it on, but Edward comforting her all night was increidlbly sweet, i think i've developed a cavity. Stupid Jacob sleeping at her house though? No no no no, not OK with me.



Author's Response:

Most of us dislike Jacob---I think that's his job and he does it well. Still, you need that little thorny bit in the stories, I think. Edward is such a gentleman. Besides the obvious hotness and the personality, Bella's gonna stay with him because he's so damn courtly. I had a hard time thinking of the word I wanted to use---but I think courtly really sums him up, and I think that's maybe the key factor to a really appealing Edward. There just isn't much courtly these days. I dare you to find much of it on any high school or college campus. ;)

-bannerday

Reviewer: RobstenLuvre (Signed) · Date: July 27, 2010 12:22 PM · On: Chapter 34: A Change in Plans

........................................You better be hiding.



Author's Response:

I thought I needed to hide back in chapter 34. Come to find out, I need to be hiding after chapter 37. But if I hide, it's under my desk, and the computer is on top of the desk, so there's no writing of successsive chapters unless I come out of hiding, so with that thought....*author climbs out from beneath desk and takes seat once again, in front of the keyboard, ready to go to work on the next chapter*.

-bannerday

Reviewer: crazyblue (Signed) · Date: July 27, 2010 11:20 AM · On: Chapter 36: Past Tense

It's Tuesday! It's Tuesday!!! ...I'm waiting!!! haha



Author's Response:

I know! I know!  ;) I wasn't even aware that I was beginning to have a regular schedule.

-bannerday

Reviewer: RobstenLuvre (Signed) · Date: July 27, 2010 09:11 AM · On: Chapter 32: Rocking His World

So far so gooooooood....



Author's Response:

I'm so glaaaaaaad.......

-bannerday

Reviewer: RobstenLuvre (Signed) · Date: July 27, 2010 08:56 AM · On: Chapter 31: Expect the Unexpected

James is a fucking creeper, someone needs to keep a close eye on him. Edward can curse allllll he wants around me...



Author's Response:

James is a nightmare. A recurring nightmare. I love me some Curseward. Actually I love all Edwards, I think. I have yet to meet an Edward I don't want to strip naked and lick. Wow--just had an intense thought. A party, attended by every Edward ever written and then there's me. See you later, I need to go lie down.

-a very shaky bannerday

Reviewer: RobstenLuvre (Signed) · Date: July 27, 2010 08:19 AM · On: Chapter 29: Mood Lighting and Ambiance

I'm very happy with this progression. I'll be happier when they just become certifiably official and get down to the smutty goodness i want...Pervy, i know.



Author's Response:

It's me, your stalker, still replying. I'm sooooooo far behind now that chapter 37 went up and everyone is cranky with me. Certifiable official is nearing, certifiable smutty is down the road--you've noticed that, I guess, since you are now down the road somewhat and there has yet to be smut. I love the perv in you.

-bannerday

Reviewer: accsmom (Signed) · Date: July 26, 2010 10:40 PM · On: Chapter 27: Comparing Notes

love this story...

I have it also over on Fan Fiction.. but is it different over there?  I haven't started to read it over there, but i tried tonight because it seems done over there, but different... chapter numbers and titles are different... please help me out.  i would probably sit and finish up this story.. but if you think it is better here, or too different there... i will stay with this one. 

love the giddy-ward



Author's Response:

Hi accsmom! Welcome aboard The Transfer train. We're chugging right along. The fanfic version was my starter kit , this version on Twilighted is the IMAX-HD/3D version. I've expanded the story and added additional storylines and scenes. This version is beefed-up; nothing from the original is missing, it's just a far better effort here on Twilighted. Please keep reading this version.

Glad you love Giddyward. I love the evolution of Withdrawn Sad Boy into Hot Mr. Silly Pants. ;)

Thanks for the review and the question about the stories. Keep in touch.

-bannerday

Reviewer: RobstenLuvre (Signed) · Date: July 26, 2010 07:31 PM · On: Chapter 26: Points of View

I definitely want to see more "studying" in the DFSF soon. Lots, lots more...



Author's Response:

There will be swanky times ahead for these two.

-bannerday

Reviewer: Clairabell1 (Signed) · Date: July 26, 2010 05:49 PM · On: Chapter 36: Past Tense

aww, i love them. and even though technology is great, why must it be such a pain sometimes!!!! haha, well done...again (hehe)



Author's Response:

They are pretty cute, aren't they? And technology always seems to glitch at the worst time. Thanks for the compliment. Chapter 37 should be up in a day or two.

Thanks again for the review.

-bannerday

Reviewer: RobstenLuvre (Signed) · Date: July 26, 2010 05:15 PM · On: Chapter 20: The Movie Fades to Black

Gosh, i'm sorry for Jacob. Unless, i'm NOT! Good riddance. Ps. such an exceptionally shitty was to spend your 21st birthday..Goodness.



Author's Response:

So, yeah, Jake...He still comes off like a jerk. You didn't review chapter 22 and I'm wondering if your opinion of him softened at all. I didn't want him to remain a total idiot. He's just a frustrated, unhappy camper and he's lost his girl to an unknown---just like he thought would happen.

Yeah, that wouldn't have been my way of wanting to spend my birthday...unless it ended up out on the patio wrapped in a down sleeping bag with a hot and horny boy who was in love with me from afar---although he is nearing his destination...or his destination is nearing him?

You can't tell me Edward's thoughts were too chaste as he cuddled her on the roof. ;)

-bannerday

Reviewer: delilah69 (Signed) · Date: July 26, 2010 01:10 PM · On: Chapter 36: Past Tense

i wonder if jake is going to say something or try something stupid? i hope that billy is doing ok!



Author's Response:

What can I say, Jake will be Jake, even when he doesn' mean to be. Even when he has the best of intentions, he still can't get away from the fact that he is Jake. Billy--an update on him in chapter 37.

Thanks for the review.

-bannerday

Reviewer: zina22 (Signed) · Date: July 26, 2010 12:06 PM · On: Chapter 2: Settling Down, Settling In

Great storytelling! like the humour!

Author's Response:

Hi zina!! I hope you continue to enjoy. Chapters 1 & 2 are a pretty big hook, then the next few chapters are a little slower as I set things up more completely. The humor-that-doesn't-quit will be back down the road. So, I hope you enjoy. Let me know what you think. Keep in touch.

Thanks for the review.

-bannerday

Reviewer: RobstenLuvre (Signed) · Date: July 26, 2010 10:48 AM · On: Chapter 19: This Might Be Working Out

Even though you don't NEED my review at this point, I will anyway... ITS ABOUT EFFING TIME SHE REALIZES SHE CAN'T BE WITH JAKE! That idiot is such a pain in the ass. Edward treats her like a freaking princess. Hmm, doesn't take a rocket scientist to figure this one out, Bells...



Author's Response:

Bella is a smart girl, but she can be a little slow in the relationship game. Part of her problem is that it's not just a boyfriend that she is breaking up with. It is a best friend, a friend she's know all her life, and someone that feels like family. I guess it must feel a little like she's been "married" to him. And it must be awfully hard to begin to think that maybe it's no longer right to be with that person who has always been so much to you. He is acting like a pain in the ass, but he isn't probably like that on a regular basis---he's in a situation he can't accept. But there must be some redeeming qualities for her to have been with him in the first place. She wouldn't just be with someone who is a total jerk.

-bannerday

Reviewer: RobstenLuvre (Signed) · Date: July 26, 2010 10:18 AM · On: Chapter 17: Stepping Off the High-Dive

My thoughts have yet to change. I want more breaking up with Jacob, more communicating between ExB, and wayyyyy more touching... is that too much to as of you?



Author's Response:

As you now know, there WAS more breaking up with Jacob down the road, there was more communicating between E & B, and the touching thing is picking up. Promise. ;) You are all kinds of antsy, girlfriend!

Thanks again,

-bannerday

Reviewer: RobstenLuvre (Signed) · Date: July 26, 2010 09:32 AM · On: Chapter 14: Partial to the Blush

That was child's play. I want more touching.



Author's Response:

That touching had to be under the guise of "saving" Bella from someone undesireable. Touchward couldn't come out of hiding too much, because of the gentleman he is, and the way he is attuned to Bella's feelings of what is right and what is wrong---she won't go behind a boyfriend's back---and that's an important thing for him to think about down the road too when it concerns him. ;)

More touching in a later chapter. Don't worry, I won't let you down. I just love the REEEAAALLLLYYY slow burn. ;)

Thanks again,

-bannerday

Reviewer: RobstenLuvre (Signed) · Date: July 26, 2010 09:17 AM · On: Chapter 13: Your Place Or Mine?

This back and forth is KILLING me!



Author's Response:

The back and forth of going from room to room, or the back and forth of the romance that's brewing? Several back-and-forths going on there. ;)

Thanks for the slew of reviews you wrote. I really appreciate them.

-bannerday

Reviewer: RobstenLuvre (Signed) · Date: July 26, 2010 08:01 AM · On: Chapter 8: One Step Forward

Oh they were getting along so great and now Edward ruins it by asking about stupid Jacob! Bella needs to dump his ass, she obviously doesn't want him anymore...



Author's Response:

Hi RobstenLuvre! Welcome aboard! I see you've been a busy busy girl today!! I've been out of town for the day, so I didn't realize I had all these wonderful reviews to reply to. I'm just going to start with this one, and get back to the others tomorrow. I'm itching to get back to work on the next chappie.

Eddward is a prince among men. He's got to know who Jake is because he doesn't want to step on anyone's toes--including Bella's. If he just lunged in for the kiss she might have left that situation with very different thoughts about the kind of guy he is and she might have recoiled and shied away from him, feeling all guilty. You know? He is a gentleman and she's going to find that out. And that is what will apeal to her.

Bella needs time to work through her feelings for Jake--not just the average boyfriend. They've been closer than most boyfriend/girlfriend couples---they've know each other all their life as friends and near-family. Tricky and difficult for her.

Thanks for taking the time to review. Keep in touch.

-bannerday

Reviewer: Dewbedewx (Signed) · Date: July 25, 2010 11:35 PM · On: Chapter 36: Past Tense

I freaking swear. Only Jacob Black would interrupt intimate moments by getting into a serious accident. Tool.

 

p.s. i practically live for this story. it's kinda amazing.



Author's Response:

If he would have just thought this through and realized how many readers he was going to upset!!! Thanks for the wonderful compliment on this story! I hug myself when I read that yummy stuff! it's kinda amazing!.

Thanks for the review. Keep in touch.

-bannerday

Reviewer: twilight girly 1901 (Signed) · Date: July 25, 2010 08:29 PM · On: Chapter 36: Past Tense

omg next chapter please! :D hahaha i wanna see what jake is gonna say about everything that happened with them...



Author's Response:

omg--next chapter is just waiting on validation!! It's already written and ready to go, so keep your kilt on!!! Jake coming up shortly! Oh, and the weekend at the Cullens.

Thanks for the review. Keep in touch.

-bannerday

Reviewer: bellybean (Signed) · Date: July 25, 2010 04:05 PM · On: Chapter 36: Past Tense

Loving the story - can't wait for a Cullen weekend :)

Author's Response:

Thanks for the Storylove, bellybean! A Very Cullen Weekend is coming right up---at least part one is. Should be up today or tomorrow if all goes well.

-banerday

Reviewer: branlc (Signed) · Date: July 25, 2010 02:17 PM · On: Chapter 36: Past Tense

I'm glad that she text him that she loved him because otherwise the poor guys imagination would've went wild. Maybe jacob can hook-up with his nurse that way we wouldn't have to worry about him anymore. Lol!



Author's Response:

You just know Edward was a big worry wart...or Worryward the whole time. Keep that thought about Jacob. He definitely needs to find someone who isn't named Bella.

Thanks for the review.

-bannerday

Reviewer: bellybean (Signed) · Date: July 25, 2010 05:29 AM · On: Chapter 35: Highs and Lows

I have faith all will be okay - Bella loves Edward!!!

Author's Response:

You are right. All will be okay, as long as Edward remembers that key piece of information.

-bannerday

Reviewer: Sandra (Signed) · Date: July 24, 2010 07:17 PM · On: Chapter 36: Past Tense

Rosalie and Alice, the voices of reason. If a girl wears uncomfortable killer heels and undergoes primping for hours, it means we're serious.

I don’t know what boyfriend manual you were referencing, but I think you hit all the chapters--- It's called 'Do not deliver the package prematurely'

“Shut it. Now. You’re not helping the situation. What kind of Resident Advisor and brother are you, Emmett? If you can’t say something helpful, shut it.” .. Since he then shut it, he's the kind of Resident Advisor and brother that has long ago accepted his girlfriend as his higher power.

"I would have still tried to deliver the package, but that's just me.".  And that means you probably would've spent the night alone.

Jasper looked confused. “What’s the problem with a lacy pink camisole?” he asked.  I love Jasper almost as much as Edward for lines like this one. He's definitely been thoroughly Alice-d. Imagine if Alice had no girlfriends. She'd just have a Jasper- make over. Kind of like that 70's show when Jackie put Kelso in a dress and make-up.

But I’m going to keep my eyes peeled for something pink and lacy in Jasper’s closet. I seriously wouldn’t put it past him.  He'd proudly wear it, that's for sure. Unless it wouldn't match his pants or the kilt and Alice wouldn't allow it.

"I guess I don't really have to go to it, what with what's going on here"  Oh yes you do have to go, missy! How else are we going to get CookWard in full detail?

since the pepper spray had been ineffective, there was maybe no way I’d ever get rid of Edward Cullen.  And why should you?Why would you? He's the king of ALL THAT!

Either that or I would be like Mount Saint Helens: deadliest and most destructive single volcanic explosion in U.S. history. I might take the entire dorm down with me. ..At least E & B would die happy. And it would put an end to the dance moves of Michael Newton. And the feng shui twins, too. Hmm..I see no disadvantages so far..well, there's one. It would be the end of the story, unless you'd continue writing about their afterlife.

Jasper took the first bottle offered to him and held it up to make a toast. "To the women that drive us nuts." We laughed and clinked our bottles.
Emmett was not to be outdone. He raised his bottle, toasting as well. "To the women who drive our nuts, nuts." We clinked to that one as well and laughed a little harder, mostly at Emmett. He just couldn't help being himself.
But I figured I could top that toast. I turned to Jasper. "To Emmett. He's fucking nuts." Jasper was rolling on the floor at that point...
rolling on his nuts? ;)

Good outfit on Bella's part at the end of the chapter; ugly and body-hiding is universal for 'not interested'.

What made me worry? Nothing, really. I have trust in Bella and you.
What made me squee? Jasper and Emmett. They're hilarious! The texting was great too. Just the reassurance Gah! needed.

Have a great sunday (or what's left of it once you get to read this..) :)



Author's Response:

Well Sandra, it's taken me several days to read through your review. I just love good reading material, though, so it's aaallll gooood!

Actually, I've been working on the update, I'm going to try to post it today, maybe it'll be validated tonight or tomorrow night. I can't wait to see the reactions. ;)

I roared my way through your review as usual. Now my husband knows there's a wild animal within me. If he were Edward (which actually IS his name, but he's not THE Edward) anyway, if he were Edward Cullen, he'd already be familiar with the wild animal within me. *lick* *slurp* *drool* *GAH!*

I think Edward wrote the book entitled "Do Not Deliver the Package Prematurely." Apparently Emmett wrote the book "Deliver the Package ASAP---'No' Means 'Yes'."

You just know that Jasper let's Alice do his nails and make-up behind closed doors---or maybe out in public. He seems pretty confident in his sexuality, no matter how much pushing of the envelope is being done. For all we know, Jasper has lacy, racy camisoles in various colors to color-coordinate with every outfit he might wear.

Have no fear, if E & B perished in the eruption of Mount Saint Edward (get it? get it?) I'd write about their sexploits in the afterlife. I'm totally committed to this story and will see it through, no matter on what level of existence or nonexistence.

Feng shui twins. haha. Love it.

Hope you had a fic-ing good weekend. Thanks for the Emmett-like guffaws, Bella-like giggles, Alice-like silvery bell peal, and Edwardesque lop-sided grins.

Yours, truly...really and truly,

-bannerday

I'm going to assume that when Edward made his toast "To Emmett, he's fucking nuts!" and Jasper was rolling on the floor laughing, he wasn't injuring his nuts because he was probably wearing an Alice-created, beautifully bedazzled protective cup or codpiece beneath his jeans. It just seems likely to me.

 Nothing screams "Keep your paws off me!" like Bella's hideous sleepwear choices. 

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