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Reviewer: OCDvampire (Signed) · Date: September 21, 2010 06:36 PM · On: Chapter 51: Surprise, Surprise, Surprise

WOW!! I might (or might not) be the queen of the long review, but you are most definitely the Godess of the long chapter!!!!

How many weeks did that chapter cover? Oh, yes, it was a whole three hours max! lol. I love the way you get right in their heads. Edward must be very fond of you to let you in, I still have no idea what's going on in my sons' minds. And don't even mention 'him indoors'! No, seriously, DON'T MENTION HIM!!!! I no longer WANT to know what's going on there!

Alice has a slick way of manipulating Edward, that was a definite belly laugh! I haven't had to use my powers of persuation since I was about ten (probably around the time Carlisle was changed, or so I like to think). At that age, sitting on their laps worked well.

I knew there was something off about the flowers! Isn't it funny how often James is portrayed as some kind of sicko? Poor James! lol, I don't feel a bit sorry for him.

I love all the Edward/Jacob stuff! It's nice to have a few flaws in Edward (okay, just one), it makes us love him more for being human and fallible. Forks should be interesting!

As usual, the whole chapter's brilliant!!

On a more personal note, I'm having to read Twilight again (such hardship) for my poem (how we suffer for our art), which almost suffered some progress (or more precisely, antigress) until my friend tracked me down in the woods, thereby killing the moment. (sighs) What a burden it is to be wanted.

BTW, you must be highly intelligent, as you seem to have kept up with my brain, even though (if my betas are to be believed, and they are gods - aren't they?) I tend to assume everyone knows what I'm talking about/thinking. Well done!!!

That's all for now, Isabel

P's buns P's buns P's buns P's buns P's buns P's buns P's buns P's buns P's buns P's buns P's buns P's buns P's buns.

I couldn't NOT mention them!! Looks pretty too!

Author's Response:

Hi again Isabel

There are those would would chose to call me "long-winded" I prefer the term "Goddess of the Long Chapter" Thank you for that nomer...or misnomer as the case may be.

I love to be in their thought processes. I can't help myself. And Edward and I are both so fricken wordy it's pathetic. Verbal diarrhea.

James is such a handy sicko for these stories. No one else in the story seems appropriate. Mike Newton? laughable. Tyler Crowley---just not a man's man.

Edward vs Jake--it'd be fun to watch that in the ring. Forks will try Edward's soul. LOL

Glad you liked the chapter.

I don't know that I'm highly intelligent, but if you want to call us that, I;'m on board. It's preferable to "odd", "different", or "frighteningly unique" I don't have a beta---well, I have a validating beta, but no one really betas my work. I just churn this nonsense out and hope it's orderly, mostly grammatically correct, and as interesting/entertaining as I can make it.

Thanks for the review and the hefty serving of P's buns. I think I may have some for breakfast with a little butter and jam on them. Munch on THAT, Isabel! ;)


Reviewer: Rayday (Signed) · Date: September 21, 2010 06:13 PM · On: Chapter 22: Non-date? Nonsense!

I thought that was the sweetest non-date. I'm so glad that they got to do that. Great Chapter.

Author's Response:

The non-date gave them a chance to just be themselves and find that they really enjoyed spending time together. And if Edward sang Happy Birthday to me in a sheltered doorway over a slice of cheesecake that he'd brought along a candle and lighter for...well, I'd pretty much be his forever. Glad you liked the chapter. I think it's a sweet one. They're on the cusp of something major there. ;)


Reviewer: dhull (Signed) · Date: September 21, 2010 05:24 PM · On: Chapter 52: The Gamut of Emotions

Hey BD!  Sorry I've been MIA on reviewing, RL and having to travel between Austin and Houston. 

Anywho, this was a great chapter!  You are such a great writer!  I always feel as if I'm with the characters as your words are unfolding the story!  I just get wrapped up in it!!!

Edward needs to handle the "James the Stalker" with a calm head....  Stalkers = SCARY!  Keep him away from their weekend that's coming up, which, by the way, I am so looking forward to reading!!!!

As always, thanks for writing!

dhull (Austin, TX)

Author's Response:

Hi d!

Glad to have you back. I know RL keeps us busy. thanks for checking back in.

Glad you liked the chapter. Thanks for the compliment about my writing. I'm glad it makes you feel like you are right there with the characters as the story unfolds and that you feel wrapped up in it. I am wrapped up in a warm cozy author-appreciation hug right now. So, thank you for that!

We all know how Edward should handle the situation, the question is...can he do that? Or will he pull an Edward? I vote for pulling an edward! LOL

The weekend away should be fun and entertaining. But first...there's chapter 53. Up shortly. Something new.   !

Thanks for the lovely words.


Reviewer: twilightgma1954 (Signed) · Date: September 21, 2010 04:26 PM · On: Chapter 15: Dawn of the Dilemma

love the truck  nice bench seat plenty of room kids lets find some more girls to bother edward so she can call him pooh bear again or honey pot or tiger ops thats tigger right    lol

Author's Response:

Driving off into the afternoon sun with Edward by your side on a truck bench seat. I'd find a secluded place to park. then I'd pounce on Pooh Bear and lick his honey pot!


Reviewer: twilightgma1954 (Signed) · Date: September 21, 2010 04:13 PM · On: Chapter 14: Partial to the Blush

this is him just being protective of her and the kiss on the head was just brotherly yea right you seriously need to school this girl whe to move her lips in the right direction  and pooh dear ah!!!! talk about a a cute name well I love pooh and we all want her to rub his tummy right  hard abs be dammed  

Author's Response:

I love you gma! You are as pervy a girl as I am. Always trying to squeeze as much lovin'sexin' out of each and every encounter as possible. ;)  Edward isn't really a Pooh Bear sort of guy is he? I imagine there would be lots of eye-rolling at that one. Oh, and Emmett would come unglued. For sure he'd be calling Edward that as well. LOL


Reviewer: Rayday (Signed) · Date: September 21, 2010 04:12 PM · On: Chapter 20: The Movie Fades to Black

AHHHHH.....WOW! I can only imagine what's going to happen next. I hope neither one of them are hurt too much, and I have to say that I wasn't so sure Jake wouldn't hurt her. I'm glad Edward stepped in, just in case Jake accidentally lost his cool.

Author's Response:

This chapter was the TURNING POINT, wasn't it? Jake was kind of edgy, wasn't he? Edward to the rescue...just as we would expect. ;)


Reviewer: divine devon (Signed) · Date: September 21, 2010 03:57 PM · On: Chapter 52: The Gamut of Emotions

whoah...james has been stalking bella!!! .......creepy slimy sleazeballing shit!!

think edward should kick his head in....i know we dont want him carting off to a cell!! but hes soo hot when hes been protective!!

once again youre a genius

Author's Response:

Yessss! We just have no idea for how long. Or IS he stalking Bella? Bella herself raises a good point in the next chapter. Stay tuned for that. Protective Proactive Edward, full speed ahead!

Thanks for the review and compliment. I so prefer "you're a genius" to "what the hell were you thinking?" :)


Reviewer: twilightgma1954 (Signed) · Date: September 21, 2010 03:56 PM · On: Chapter 13: Your Place Or Mine?

omg lets call leah back in fork and have her hit on jake charlie can come by take a photo and email bella then she wont feel guilty and she can cry on edwards shoulder or his abs or in his lap  hehe  come on here work with me   I am a wreck nail biting he whole thing          we have a wonderful book club we started out just reading Twilght but we do fan fiction also we intoduced your story on friday and we have so many questions to ask all want to know what his big secret is why he wont date ????

i know thats why its a big secret   you will tell us all in good time right????  is it important to know what they are studing will they have classes together they only seem to share meals now, they need to have a sleep over cuddle play drinking  games truth or dare   i know you dare him to kiss her   dying here  

Author's Response:

Hi gma

I have to say, your reviews had me giggling. You have some wonderful story ideas here in your first sentence. LOL Personally, I think I would like to cry directly into edward's lap, but they wouldn't be tears of sadness, they would be tears of joy, because of his lap, you see...

So cool that you introduced my story to your book club. I guess you got some of your questions answered. Like edward's big secret...the Tanya thing. Obviously it isn't crucial to this story to know what they are studying---well, when we find out edward's story we find out what he and B are studying. As for the rest of they even go to class? I'm primarily interested in their outside of school life. that was my favorite part of my college existence.

LOL You were dying when you had one chapter after the other to zip through. I'm wondering how you will handle having to wait a week for an update. ;)

Thanks for all of your reviews.


Reviewer: branlc (Signed) · Date: September 21, 2010 03:43 PM · On: Chapter 52: The Gamut of Emotions

I'm wondering when the stalking began. Before or after the party? Damn good kissing going on by the way. ;)

Author's Response:

Hi bran!

The gang is trying to piece that together too. Bella runs through a thought process pondering that in the next chapter. We'll eventually find out. We need to hear it from the horse's mouth. ;) Or is James the horse's ass?  ;)


Reviewer: Rayday (Signed) · Date: September 21, 2010 03:27 PM · On: Chapter 19: This Might Be Working Out

I hope Jake doesn't manipulate/guilt Bella into staying in this relationship. Great chapter...I loved their workout and teasing.

Author's Response:

I think Edward and Bella working out together was fun--we got to see Edward being playful and laughing. He didn't do that much at the beginning of the story. ;)


Reviewer: Rayday (Signed) · Date: September 21, 2010 02:42 PM · On: Chapter 18: Plunging Into the Deep End

Great chapter...I hope Bella can put this whole thing to rest soon, for everyones sake.

Author's Response:

Bella was a slow decision maker. But I think I'd be in the same boat. I think it would be hard when you had that much history with someone...especially if you didn't hate the person, and still, in fact cared about them/loved them...but in a different way.


Reviewer: renesalecau (Signed) · Date: September 21, 2010 01:50 PM · On: Chapter 52: The Gamut of Emotions

Your mind is diabolical! Haha! As always, I was pleasantly surprised by your update. So speedy. I'm excited to get some more Charlie in my life and you already know I'm a whore for Jacob. =) See you in a few days!


Author's Response:

Hi Tay!

My mind is either diabolical or warped, take your pick! I hope to have another update up this weekend. Charlie will be in the following chapter, chapter 54. Jake will show up in 55 I believe. First we have to get through a diabolical/warped chapter 53. I wonder what you'll think of it.


Reviewer: nsturms72 (Signed) · Date: September 21, 2010 09:24 AM · On: Chapter 52: The Gamut of Emotions

Really good!

Author's Response:

Glad you liked it!



Reviewer: HockeyChick (Signed) · Date: September 21, 2010 05:37 AM · On: Chapter 52: The Gamut of Emotions

Oh shit for Bella! However, I love the lunchroom dip n' kiss :) Can't wait for the weekend away!

Author's Response:

Oh shit for Bella is right. And we know what that means for edward, right? Glad you liked the dip n' kiss. I'd take one of those for lunch anyday. I think the weekend hits in chapter 54.  Hope you like chapter 53. It's a real "Oh, Edward" kind of chapter


Reviewer: Siren (Signed) · Date: September 21, 2010 03:52 AM · On: Chapter 52: The Gamut of Emotions

Dun Dun Dun!!! Oh Bella. What are we going to do with you? Excitedly waiting to see how this plays out. Have I mentioned how I love the way your mind works bannerday? Its so lovely and fun!

Loved it!!! Love you!!!


Author's Response:

Oh Kate, I wonder what you will think of chapter 53. It's a little bit different, but probably not what anyone is expecting. My mind must work in mysterious ways...aka weird ways. LOL

Thanks for the chapterlove and authorlove!


Reviewer: glock26girl (Signed) · Date: September 21, 2010 03:26 AM · On: Chapter 21: A Black Day For All

I'm glad their friends still I think now Bella get over your self please and kiss him(shit)!!!!!!!!

Author's Response:

You seem to have this thing with fan fic impatience! ;) I love just means you're caught up in the UST!


Reviewer: glock26girl (Signed) · Date: September 21, 2010 03:03 AM · On: Chapter 20: The Movie Fades to Black

KIck ass Edward!!!!!!

Author's Response:

Edward, normally a sweet guy, can be an ass kicker when called upon. And as you know, he may be called upon to do that again. Ohhhhh it's going to be good! When we get there! ;)


Reviewer: Siren (Signed) · Date: September 21, 2010 02:56 AM · On: Chapter 51: Surprise, Surprise, Surprise

Oh Edward... Thats pretty much all I can say. Lol. I wish that boy wouldnt be so quick to jump... I mean Bella has pretty much given herself over to him so Im not sure why Edward isnt getting it. It could be that he trust Bella but trusts Jake as far as he can throw him? Im thinking thats the thing.

Sorry this review took so long.. Im still here.

Loved it!!! Love you!!!!

Kate :D

Author's Response:

Edward just sees red when it comes to something bad happening with his girl. So possessive and protective and proactive. LOL I think Edward is protective of something he didn't imagine himself having...and now that he has it, he doesn't want to take the chance that he might lose it somehow.

Glad to know you are still there. )


Reviewer: glock26girl (Signed) · Date: September 21, 2010 02:17 AM · On: Chapter 18: Plunging Into the Deep End


Author's Response:

Thanks so much for all of your review, glock!

 I was slow getting replies out this week. Lots of RL stuff. But I appreciate you leaving me your footprint on my story. So, as you know, they did finally kiss. They're just slow. ;)


Reviewer: oplok71 (Signed) · Date: September 21, 2010 02:14 AM · On: Chapter 52: The Gamut of Emotions

oh shoot!  very creepy........

Author's Response:

I'm pretty sure that "of shoot! very creepy....." is James' middle name. Imagine his drivers' license:

James oh shoot! very creepy...... Hunter LOL


Reviewer: Rayday (Signed) · Date: September 21, 2010 01:24 AM · On: Chapter 11: Movers and Shakers

I really liked the chapter, especially about them reading the county music lines and Alice wanting to keep the lyrics away from Jasper..

Author's Response:

Hi Rayday!

I am slow about keeping up with my replies this week---that and the fact that you just blasted through my story. I hope your eyes are okay after all that reading. thank you, thank you, thank you for all of the lovely reviews. I had the best time reading them all. Now I just have to try to answer some. ;)

Glad you liked the little country/western musical choices our girls made way back in chapter 11.


Reviewer: glock26girl (Signed) · Date: September 21, 2010 01:17 AM · On: Chapter 15: Dawn of the Dilemma

Alright let Jake keep being a whinney asswhole!!!!!

Author's Response:

He is his own wedge that is being driven between himself and Bella. ;)


Reviewer: glock26girl (Signed) · Date: September 21, 2010 12:11 AM · On: Chapter 14: Partial to the Blush

Ok come on jacob off a cliff and Edward and Bella happy please!!!!!!!!!

Author's Response:

Cliff diving at low-tide,'s lots of fun! Try it!


Reviewer: twilightgma1954 (Signed) · Date: September 21, 2010 12:08 AM · On: Chapter 12: Just Let Go

this has been so funny, reminds me of my days at university   I spent so much time with my  roomates boyfriends roomate it felt like we were married but they need alot of alone time in his room so i got his roomate all the time he was hot and funny not complaining now just sharing  hot dorm sex   yea cant wait to see your version of it

Author's Response:

I think we all probably have such fun, silly, sexy memories of a lighter, more carefree time. You'll notice that much of this story actually concerns classes or an education in the classroom. This is all about the "other education you get whil at college. ;)

Thanks for the review and the college memory.


Reviewer: bellybean (Signed) · Date: September 20, 2010 11:52 PM · On: Chapter 52: The Gamut of Emotions

dun dun dun! ooooh, this is getting suspensefully good!

Author's Response:

Glad you are enjoying the suspense. the next chapter is rather suspenseful as well. Just be careful not to fall off the edge of your seat.


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