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Reviewer: sonja2010 (Signed) · Date: April 01, 2010 10:56 PM · On: Chapter 8

Again terrific chapter! So Jake had the nerve to show up at her house or do I miss something? Can't wait for more

Author's Response:

I'm so happy to hear it! Thanks! Yes, Jacob did show up at her house. Thanks so much for reviewing each chapter! You're awesome! :)

Reviewer: sonja2010 (Signed) · Date: April 01, 2010 10:14 PM · On: Chapter 7

I think the song was great for this chapter!! I can't wait for Edward to find out! I also hope Bella finds a way not to go to Jacobs

Author's Response:

Glad you liked the song! 

Reviewer: sonja2010 (Signed) · Date: April 01, 2010 09:42 PM · On: Chapter 6

Oh my Bella better try alittle harder to hide this from Edward, so far she isn't doing that well!

Author's Response:

Yes, it is not an easy thing to hide.

Reviewer: sonja2010 (Signed) · Date: April 01, 2010 09:22 PM · On: Chapter 5

I'm gonna try this again I just posted a review and it wouldn't let me send it. Great chapter hun!! I don't think I've ever HATED Jake as much as I do right know for what he has done to Bella!!! I'm glad Edward is back but kinda worried that Jake is going to want to see her again and what will happen.

Author's Response:

Thanks so much! Yeah, I think everyone hates this Jacob. 

Reviewer: Michrob (Signed) · Date: April 01, 2010 08:11 AM · On: Chapter 8

Aaah, what a cliff hanger.  I can't wait for the next chapter.  I love this story.

Author's Response:

Thanks so much for taking the time to review! I so happy to hear you are enjoying!

Reviewer: sweetblood17 (Signed) · Date: March 31, 2010 12:35 PM · On: Chapter 8

okay, this story is INTENSE. awesome, but intense. can you PLEASE have edward rip jacob's balls off?

Author's Response:

lol. Well he does deserve it. But I'm not so sure about that. You'll just have to read more and see what happens. Thanks for reviewing. 

Reviewer: Sarahippy (Anonymous) · Date: March 31, 2010 03:46 AM · On: Chapter 8

AHHHHHHHHHHHH I'm crying so much right now and in a moment my sister will come in here and be like "What the hell?" AHH so beautiful and can I say, again, that i HATE Jacob. Goddammit! Loved Emmett's reaction ;) He knows how to handle things :) Once again, you have lived up to the standards, delivering an amazing chapter :D well done xx

Author's Response:

lol. Yeah I think everyone hates this Jacob. Thank you so much!

Reviewer: daggers4u (Signed) · Date: March 31, 2010 12:51 AM · On: Chapter 8


Author's Response:

Lol. Thanks so much for your review!

Reviewer: monica1981 (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 11:45 PM · On: Chapter 8

Finally! I'm glad he knows now. I hope he's in time before Bella gets raped again.

Author's Response:

I wouldn't worry too much about that. Thanks so much for reviewing. 

Reviewer: djwolf55 (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 07:52 PM · On: Chapter 8

CAN'T WAITTTT!  Hurry and write the next chapter. 

Author's Response:

Thanks soo much for your review! It makes me happy to know you want to read more. Next chapter should be coming soon. 

Reviewer: Aleea-b4u (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 06:04 PM · On: Chapter 8

You did a wonderful job with this chapter. Bella's current mindframe is heartwrenching. She's so broken and not thinking clearly at all which is in keeping with all that has happened. I truly appreciate that you aren't trying to gloss over the realites of rape as I'm afraid so many writers do. Kudos to you for tapping into those emotions so eloquently and visually. It's very powerful.

Seeing Edward put the pieces together was also painful and well written. I will admit I was furious at first that Edward left her, had to do deep breathing exercises and everything, lol. But then I realized this reaction fits. It fits the story and it definitely fits his character in the sense that he would have no clear idea of how to deal with this. The level of confusion and pain would overwhelm him, making it impossible for him to think/react properly. So yes, big mistake for Edward, but a wise decision for the writer. :)

Gorgeous song choice btw. Can't wait to find out what happens next.

Author's Response:

Thank you very much. It really means a lot to me and made my day!

Yes, I thought some people might be upset that Edward left her and so that's why I included that note about him at the end. I'm so glad you agree with it in the end though. I am really trying to make everything realistic. I'm happy you liked the song! Once again thank you so much for you lovely words and for taking the time to review :)

Reviewer: GoSpikey (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 04:41 PM · On: Chapter 8

Hey there,

I've been reading bits here and there of this story, and just had to comment on one thing here:

"Bella. Nothing could ever change the way I feel about you. I’ll always love you, no matter what.”

Over here, one of our radio stations are doing a 'back to the 90s' week, and the song that was playing when reading that sentence, was 'Whitney Houston - I Will Always Love You'.

Just thought you really needed to know that. ^^


Author's Response:

Hmmm. You're right that song fits as well, and I like it too. Thanks for sharing :)

Reviewer: ollie404 (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 04:34 PM · On: Chapter 8

woah.. that was awesome.. cliff hanger alright.... UPDATE ASAP

Author's Response:

Thanks so much! Next chapter should come soon. 

Reviewer: SouthrnBelle (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 01:42 PM · On: Chapter 8

I was just listening to that song earlier this morning. Classic :) :) But I do like how you brought it to the bottom. It helped keep the story together. I can't believe Edward left her. He's going to beat himself up in every way possibile for doing that. He's just not thinking straight...being a guy and letting his emotions overtake his logic. Oh gah but HOW could you leave us there with Jacob in Bella's room?! You HAVE to PLLLLEEASE update SOOOONNN. I'm worried about my poor Bella! This is such a great story. I know I keep telling you that...but I mean it 110%. Can't wait for your next chapter! I hope you have a great Easter week. :) :)

Author's Response:

Yes, I can see that it is better to include the lyrics at the end as not to distract when reading. Edward is certainly going to be angry at himself for leaving her. He really shouldn't have. I don't think it should take too long for the next update. Thank you sooo much! It makes me really happy to hear you like the story :) I hope you have a great easter week as well!

Reviewer: Lady-Gemini (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 10:49 AM · On: Chapter 8


Hurry, hurry, hurry. Please, please, please. X

Author's Response:

He He. The update should come soon. Thanks so much for your review!

Reviewer: ddcdragonfly (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 10:46 AM · On: Chapter 8

Oh NO! You cannot leave it there! What happens next ... I NEED to know. HURRY HURRY HURRY ... update ... I'm waiting.




Well, I'm still waiting .......................................................................

Author's Response:

lol. I don't think it should be too long a wait for the next chapter. Thanks for your review. It's nice to know that you want to read more :)

Reviewer: Talena (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 09:53 AM · On: Chapter 8

Woah - you're killing me here - so much excitement is NOT good for my heart. *snicker* Very good chapter - please update soon.

Author's Response:

LOL. Are you trying to make me feel bad here about giving you a cliffhanger? lol. I'm happy you enjoyed the chapter though! Next chapter should come soon. Thanks for reviewing! :) 

Reviewer: MeIshAlice (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 08:48 AM · On: Chapter 8

You should really think about.... Oh, I don't know.... Updating sooner? Yes, that's it!! Lol. Really really loving this!! {for reals} update sooner??

Author's Response:

lol, I'm happy you are enjoying. Well, this chapter was actually ready sooner but it took longer than usual for my Beta to validate it. I'm assuming she was just busy. The next chapter should come soon but it also depends on my Beta. 

Reviewer: trollmuffin (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 08:02 AM · On: Chapter 8

OMG! The song makes it just so sad... But the lyrics definately fit this chapter. I really hope that Cullens will hurt Jake as much as he hurt Bella.

I hope that Edwards makes it in time!

Please update soon again!

Author's Response:

I'm glad you thought that the lyrics fit. Thanks so much for reviewing. Next chapter should come soon. 

Reviewer: Trysh (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 07:48 AM · On: Chapter 8

Another amazing chapter! I find myself wondering if the rest of the Cullens are going to follow him...hmm...but then again Jacob would be able to catch their scent and either take off or phase and call the pack...which would let the pack know what sick things he was doing...hhmm....a cliff hanger for sure. Please update soon :)

Author's Response:

Thanks so much! will have to wait for the next chapter to find out. Should come soon, but it also depends on my Beta.

Reviewer: bigsis0829 (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 04:42 AM · On: Chapter 8

Whaaat? No! *sniff, sniff and wipes eyes* Th-that can't be the end of the chapter. It just can't! I have to know if Edward made it in time. Please, Edward!! You have to make it! And I'm with Emmett...LET'S TEACH THE STUPID MUTT A LEASON!!

POST SOON!!!! plz?

Author's Response:

LOL. The next chapter should come soon but it also depends on how fast my Beta can validate. Thanks so much for reviewing! 

Reviewer: Venus_Star2_com (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 03:17 AM · On: Chapter 8

Ok Edward knows but what happens now? People need to know...Jacob needs to be put down or something. I have no idea what's going to happen next and I hope that the next chapter is a little bit longer


Poor Bella



Author's Response:

Well, I don't want to give anything away. But thanks so much for reviewing! 

Reviewer: Saydonee (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 03:16 AM · On: Chapter 8

please tell me they  get back there in time even if jake does get away. they need to drag all of the truth out of bella about his threats

Author's Response:

Yes, they definitely need to talk to Bella. But you'll have to wait and see what happens in the next chapter :)

Thanks so much for reviewing!

Reviewer: wendeline (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 02:48 AM · On: Chapter 8


Author's Response:

Thanks so much! It makes me happy :)

Reviewer: airekel (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 02:42 AM · On: Chapter 8

Aaaacccckkkk!!!!  I can't believe you left us here!  Yes, it helps that you've promised that nothing as bad as what happened to Bella in Chapter 4 will happen to her again, but my stomach is in knots worrying whether or not Edward will get to her before Jacob takes her away.  I hope that Emmett and Jasper run to Bella along with Edward, so that they will be there with him to fight Jacob.  Edward *has* to get to Bella before Jacob forces her to leave with him!  I don't think I could stand it if Edward doesn't get to her in time.  And I want Emmett and Jasper to be there to help too.  And I want Carlisle to call Charlie.  Someone needs to tell him, and Edward is in no shape to think about Charlie right now.

So, since you have left us in this horrible place, I hope you will post the next chapter as soon as you can.  I'm glad that Edward figured out what Jacob did, but it tears me up that he left -- even though Bella told him to go.  And it's even worse that he didn't stay close like he was planning to do.  I understand why he took off to Jacob's, but that understanding doesn't help when I know that Jacob is at Bella's window.  The only good thing that came of that is that now Emmett and Jasper, as well as Alice knows.  Since Edward didn't tell his family, I think Alice needs to tell them so they can be there for both Bella and Edward.  Plus, I want Charlie to find out.  Go figure!

I like that you put the lyrics at the end of the chapter.  While it didn't bother me that much they they were in the mist of the last chapter, I like them better at the end,  And I *love* this song for Edward's thoughts in this chapter.  It's perfect.  Also, thanks for making the playlist that we can listen to.

Thanks for another great chapter -- even if the end made me scream at my laptop!  In case you can't tell, I'm *really* looking forward to the next one.  :)

Author's Response:

lol. Yeah I know it's not a nice place to leave it. The next chapter should come soon, but it also depends on how quickly my Beta can validate the chapter. You will see quite a bit of Charlie in the next chapter. I'm glad you like the lyrics better at the end of the chapter. I'm so happy you liked the song choice and the playlist. 

LOL--at least you didn't cause it any physical harm. Thanks so much for your review! I LOVE hearing from you :)

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