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Reviewer: Nilla (Signed) · Date: March 31, 2010 02:27 AM · On: Chapter 4: Checking
Loving this story so far. Can't wait for more.
Author's Response: Thank you - I appreciate you letting me know!
Reviewer: Dada2612 (Signed) · Date: March 31, 2010 12:40 AM · On: Chapter 4: Checking
Awesome chapter.
Please update soon!!!
Author's Response: Glad you liked, next chappie should be up Fri/Sat -ish.
Reviewer: AliciaZA (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 11:03 PM · On: Chapter 4: Checking
Bella kills me (lol), she's hilarious. Edward is so mean & naughty - he probably knows that she has a thing for him. Can't wait for more...
Author's Response: He hopes she has a thing for him, but he's trying to understand her - it never occurs to him that she' s insecure about herself. He just doesn't see her that way - aww.
Reviewer: Nikkycoly (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 08:57 PM · On: Chapter 1: Starting Lineup
There so god damn perfect together it doesnt matter in what context does it lol
Author's Response: That is so very true!
Reviewer: HockeyChick (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 08:08 PM · On: Chapter 4: Checking
How can you forget Mystery, Alaska and The Mighty Ducks in Bella's quest for hockey movies? Miracle is one of the best ones :) When are we going to get to Edward playing? :) A girl can only wait for so long lol
Author's Response: Mystery is good (love Hank Azaria in any of his performances), but you don't evah mention The Mighty Ducks to any of the guys I grew up with - hockey players, all - that was impressed on me well and good! I couldn't even bring myself to mention it here for fear that they would know somehow...They hate Youngblood, too, but I figured that a teenage girl who didn't know much about the sport would be appreciative. I think the consensus is Miracle, though!
Edward on the ice is coming up in a few chapters...le sigh...
Reviewer: njdevil30718 (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 07:17 PM · On: Chapter 4: Checking
please don't tell me he's gonna let his "friends" influence his decesion wether or not to "hang out" with Bella
Author's Response: Oh, no, he won't do that! Our Edward has better strength of character than to let that happen. He was raised right.
Remember, Bella is seeing his friends behavior through her own feelings of inadequacy - they're just being obnoxious teenage boys. They're not that bad. They were having a boys night out and Edward kind of word vomited the invite to Bella, he just couldn't help himself. He didn't know he was saying it until it was already out there!
Reviewer: chewycui2 (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 07:10 PM · On: Chapter 4: Checking
great chapter! :)
i would hate to see the inner slut girl go too. haha
Author's Response: Thanks - she's on good terms with ISG right now!
Reviewer: hc4metal (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 07:07 PM · On: Chapter 4: Checking
I really like this story
Author's Response: I appreciate you letting me know each chappie - thank you!
Reviewer: april09 (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 07:06 PM · On: Chapter 4: Checking
Oooh--loving their interactions so far! Wondering what made Edward swear off girls for now.....
Author's Response: There will be more details about his being off girls coming in later chappies - don't worry - it's nothing catastrophic.
Reviewer: LilCullen454 (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 07:05 PM · On: Chapter 4: Checking
No I believe Bella needs to let the Inner Slut Girl come out to play because I really really think that Edward would love that!
He obviously has feelings for Bella and he needs to speak up!
How long before we get some loving?
Author's Response: Oh, Bella will come to terms with Inner Slut Girl eventually. They've still got a lot to learn about each other, but once they get over their issues - look out! All those pent-up teenage hormones are just going to explode all over them - after all, besides being a teenager, Edward is a hockey player...
Reviewer: wishfulthinking (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 06:56 PM · On: Chapter 4: Checking
Love love love this story!!!
Author's Response: Thank you! So glad you're enjoying.
Reviewer: cullenstyle (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 06:44 PM · On: Chapter 4: Checking
I WANT MORE!!! This is addictive! What happened, why Edward doesn't date? Just please, please don't make him a manwhore, I hope he wasn't a manwhore, I just hate Jerkward.
The last part- that was sad, she thinks so little of herself :(
And Edward's friends are idiots.
Please update as soon as you can!
Author's Response: There will be an explanation on why Edward if 'off girls' in later chappies, but don't worry - I wanted to try a non-brooding, non-manwhore, non-asshole Edward...he's actually a sweetheart in this story - at least, that's what I'm aiming for!
And yeah, Bella's dealing with some self-esteem issues, she's thought of herself that way for a while, but he's going to do his best to change her attitude, once he gets over his teenage issues himself. Just because he's popular and gorgeous and a jock doesn't mean he's not feeling a little insecure, too. They've got a lot to learn about each other - which makes it fun for us!
Don't forget that Bella's seeing his friends and their reactions through her lack of self-confidence - they really aren't that bad.
Reviewer: lobsters4ever (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 06:16 PM · On: Chapter 4: Checking
I like Inner slut girl. I think that she and her thoughts are very relatable. I do enjoy Bella and Edward's interactions. They have great chemistry. Looking forward to more!
Author's Response: Inner Slut Girl has her uses right now, doesn't she? Lots of fun stuff coming up as they get to know each other and sort through their various issues.
Reviewer: warpedweaving (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 06:02 PM · On: Chapter 4: Checking
Enjoyed it! Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Glad ot hear it! Hope to have the next chappie up by the end of the week.
Reviewer: Nikkycoly (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 05:59 PM · On: Chapter 4: Checking
Oh Bella he asked you to the movies dumb butt... Word to the wise say yes idiot. Love this can't wait for more!
Author's Response: He can't help himself, either - the invite just came out, didn't it? Hmm...
Reviewer: jaymac (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 05:32 PM · On: Chapter 4: Checking
aw, poor Bella....the girl needs some self-assuredness!
Author's Response: I think he's goning to be able to help her with that - it just may take a while!
Reviewer: graceisgone (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 05:25 PM · On: Chapter 4: Checking
omg i love this!
Author's Response: Thanks for letting me know you are enjoying the story!
Reviewer: Meiki (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 05:24 PM · On: Chapter 4: Checking
Woo hooo!!! It's only getting better! *chest-bumps random fellow reader into glass* Aw shit! *coughs* I mean great job!!
Author's Response: Don't make me blow the whistle on you for roughing! Tnaks for letting me know you're enjoying.
Reviewer: TessLouise (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 04:58 PM · On: Chapter 4: Checking
Wonder what's up with Jasper? Hmmmmm
Author's Response: He didn't want to see his best friend jumping his girlfriend's best friend in the middle of the cafeteria! Doh!
Reviewer: Morrisburger (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 04:45 PM · On: Chapter 4: Checking
Cool. I hope you drag out the chase! :-)
Author's Response: Oh, they've got a lot to learn about each other - hope the build-up will be worth it!
Reviewer: chicabonita51983 (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 04:28 PM · On: Chapter 4: Checking
So, as a former spanish teacher, I'm going to be picky :-P For starters, instead of estar, i would use the verb "ser" ... and probably make it plural to "son." And this could be my ignorance of other dialects (I know mostly Mexican dialect), but cabritos means "goats." But like I said, you could know a "slang" word for that.
But besides the point, I'm hooked on your story. I'm just waiting for these two to get their acts together :)
Author's Response: Thank you - really! I had trouble with trying to explain "kid" to translate in the context it is used in the story - most do take it in relation to a goat baby than a human baby...
Glad you're enjoying...and while Bella has to work through her insecurities (and Edward has his own issues, too, as do all teenagers!), they snap out of it pretty soon.
Reviewer: TessLouise (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 11:32 AM · On: Chapter 3: Power Forward
Oh! She's such a spaz! Hah!
Reviewer: be_my_escape (Signed) · Date: March 28, 2010 04:04 AM · On: Chapter 3: Power Forward
Great chapter. Can't wait to read more. Please update soon.
Author's Response: Thank you, happy to know you want more! Soon, very soon.
Reviewer: chewycui2 (Signed) · Date: March 28, 2010 02:45 AM · On: Chapter 3: Power Forward
Lol. Her knight in shining armour. Bella seriously needs to relax. Otherwise I think she'll die at the end of the day from an overdose of Edward :D
Author's Response: She's about ready to self-combust! Poor girl, there's a lot more in store for her...
Reviewer: chewycui2 (Signed) · Date: March 28, 2010 02:34 AM · On: Chapter 2: Hand Pass
Lol tall does it for me too :D I can't believe bella felt him up. Hahaha
Author's Response: Me, too! Love tall. And yeah, Bella has a naughty little hand, doesn't she?
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