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Reviewer: icecoldhamster (Signed) · Date: February 08, 2009 06:49 AM · On: Chapter 7
*Grins* Favourite chapter so far.
Wow.
Wow.
Wow is the only thing I can think to say...
Wow.
I'm feelin' the need to say it again, but I think I've gotten my point across...
I love the brushing her teeth "Human Minute" in the morning. No one like morning breath... Edward lies.
It's so... real, that they're so comfortably uncomfortably discussing things like this with each other.
Bella's impatience, hahah. Horemones... *Shakes Head*
If I were Edward Bella constantly saying I'm not going to hurt her would irritate me to no end... His frustration is tageible. Great writing.
And the kiss! Whoa! The kiss! Wow! The kiss... My God woman! You've been holding out! It was perfect! Your discriptions of his fire and the fight and her smell and the "new" smell, welll... Whoa! Aw, and his pleasure with her irratic breathing! It's all just so... Wow. Wow. Wow. Wow. Wow. I loved it!
Lol, and Bella is still avoiding Alice.
Loved it! Loved it, loved it, loved it, loved it!
-Katie
Author's Response: lol. Well I don't think Edward was lying exactly, just that he doesn't smell things like a human does. My view of things is he can propibly smell her breath even with her mouth closed once she's within a certain distance. It would make sense since our mouths are never sealed air tight.
Ah yes Bella's horemones. :)
It does bother him on some level, however on another it makes him very happy. She has faith in him unlike anyone else, including his family. She has so much faith in him, she has and is putting her life in his hands willingly.
You liked the kiss huh? ;)
Reviewer: icecoldhamster (Signed) · Date: February 08, 2009 06:28 AM · On: Chapter 6
No no, you still have to submit chapter 12! Cause see look REVIEWING! I'm reviewing, not chatting! Ouch! Oh! Owwwww! It hurts you have such little faith in me!
Aw that was such a good chapter!
It's hilarious how everyone wants to help Edward!
Alice, of Alice. Trust her to see that conversation and but it.
I'm glad Bella is helping Edward... It makes sense for her to be in on the preperation too. Love how edward tried to not let her! “It wouldn’t be…proper.” You have Edward so down!
I like how he counted how long she made him wait, builds up the tension nicely.
I'd love to say more, but I really want to read the next chapter... :D
-Katie
Author's Response: lol. I'll think about submitting Chapter 12 today. Maybe. We'll see. I haven't decided yet. I mean you did read them all and review but you were a day later than promised....
Did you really think Alice would stay out of it? This is Alice we're talking about.
Of course Bella wants to help, she will be there. ;) And Edward....well what can I say. I just love Mr. Proper Vampire. Bella hit the nose on the head in Eclipes when she told him he was surprisingly moral for a vampire. :)
Gotta love Edward and his vampire sense of time.
Reviewer: icecoldhamster (Signed) · Date: February 07, 2009 11:55 PM · On: Chapter 5
Hmm, I'm wondering how much you'll hate me if I only read this chapter... You see, silly me left it too late and now I have to get up and do things for the day... heh... heh... Funny story, right?
I know I'm horrible.
Don't shoot me.
I'll read the rest later! I know I always say that but I swear this time I will! :D
Loved this chapter!
It's so understandable for Bella to just want to escape with Edward from the wedding plans. I'd drive me crazy! And the medow, aw that was perfect. They couldn't have a better setting.
Lol, so Edward to not want Bella to think him a pervert! Loved that bit.
Bella's confidence in him... Very Bella.
And aw, him trying to hide what he was thinking with flattery... Priceless!
Loved it eki! I WILL read the next chapters! Later today. I'll put everything on hold! First priority when I get home, this fic!
-Katie
Author's Response: Only one chapter?! That's it? Hmmmm. Well I guess that means I don't have to submit Chapter 12 today then.
Who wouldn't want to escape Alice when she is in party planning mode. That woman is a maniac.
Glad you liked the meadow. It really is quite the romantic setting for these two.
lol well I guess we will see. But I know you...you'll start chatting and not read. *shakes head* ;)
Reviewer: mwild (Signed) · Date: February 05, 2009 03:53 PM · On: Chapter 11
Two chapters in one week? Yippee! Your story has been the bright spot in my sinus-infection-filled week.
Poor Bella. Who wants to hear that the vampire love of your life is leaving for 3 days in 8 minutes? I can't wait for more "practicing". ;)
I love how you really convey Edward's internal struggle. All of your characters are so wonderfully in cannon. Not something I see often enough in fanfic.
Can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: I know. Amazing isn't it? ;)
Sorry to hear about your sinus-infection. I've had those since I was little and they are never fun. I'm glad my fic is giving you some happiness.
Don't worry there will be more practicing both with Bella and some additional preperation on Edward's part if I can keep my creativity flowing.
Thanks so much for reviewing and I hope you feel better soon.
Reviewer: Jensy (Signed) · Date: February 05, 2009 10:10 AM · On: Chapter 11
<< And although the thought of that choice was leading her to her death, I was still insanely happy. That only proved how much of a monster I really was. >>
Aw, that was so sad! Poor Edward.
<< I sighed. I should know better than to try and keep things from Bella. When it’s something she wants to know, she’s very persistent. “You appeared to be dreaming about us…intimately.” >>
LOL! I'm loving their convo.
<< I watched her get off the bed in a very graceful movement for Bella. >>
Ouch! Ha ha Some good moments of humor in this one.
Author's Response: yes this was a chapter of extremes. Some very light hearted moments between the two but also some very deep, sad thoughts Edward is dealing with.
Reviewer: bellas shrink (Signed) · Date: February 05, 2009 10:01 AM · On: Chapter 11
Sigh
Author's Response: LOL. Sigh? That's all I get is sigh? lol
Reviewer: Dulcinea21bella (Signed) · Date: February 05, 2009 07:50 AM · On: Chapter 11
Ah, how do they handle all of this repressed sexual tension? I am dying here just reading about it. I can't wait for more! great job!
Author's Response: These two have been handling respressed sexual tension since the first day they met really. Glad the complex emotions they are dealing with are coming through.
Reviewer: tneb2009 (Signed) · Date: February 05, 2009 06:57 AM · On: Chapter 11
Great chapter! Looking forward to the boys hunting trip :)
Author's Response: Thanks. :)
Reviewer: Eoin Cullen (Anonymous) · Date: February 05, 2009 06:56 AM · On: Chapter 11
This was a good one! I like how Edward realized he needed ot be honest with Bella and then he was! :)
Just knowing what the next chapter was about was a good teaser, as I always like interaction with the Cullen boys :) Can't wait!
Author's Response: I feel Edward does realize that he must be honest with Bella if this is ever going to work. That doesn't mean he is all that excited about the sharing though. :)
The next 3 chapters will take place over the boys weekend.
Reviewer: venomousgal (Signed) · Date: February 05, 2009 06:30 AM · On: Chapter 11
OOOH! The sexual tension is building hotter between them. She is so gonna jump him and have her way soon! LOL!
Author's Response: lol. Well after the first three Twilight books we all know about sexual tension and angst don't we? :)
There will be some fun make out times ahead and also some other things I think you all will quite enjoy.
Reviewer: Christine Lee (Signed) · Date: February 05, 2009 05:43 AM · On: Chapter 11
Your story had me hooked! I can't wait for the next chapter. I think my favorite part about it is that it still keeps Edward so true to charachter. you've done a great job.
Author's Response: I am really trying very hard to stay true to Edward and the rest of the characters. Thank you for reading and reviewing. :)
Reviewer: LolaRose (Signed) · Date: February 05, 2009 05:17 AM · On: Chapter 11
Very nice, I liked this chapter a lot. His self control is a bit frustrating. :) I do feel for Bella a bit in these sit. You do write it well though. He is so prim and proper. I am looking forward to the boys weekend though.
Author's Response: It is but he will need that self control in order to do what they are going to do. Bella, of course being a woman, would love to see him lose himself in her completely but she's realistic so she knows he can't.
Prim and proper would be a good way to discribe Edward. :)
The boys are off to hunt next.
Reviewer: silly sad sarah twilighted (Signed) · Date: February 05, 2009 05:10 AM · On: Chapter 11
wow! That was good. I liked it... I wished it was longer but I guess even short chapters are better then nothing sometimes! i am so looking forward to the next post! Hehehe
Author's Response: lol. well if it makes you feel any better as I write a story my chapters do seem to get longer in general and if you look back to the first few chapters to now they already have so... ;)
Glad you liked it. Thanks for reviewing.
Reviewer: Morrigan728 (Anonymous) · Date: February 05, 2009 04:34 AM · On: Chapter 11
HAHAHAHAHA!!! I am laughing so hard at myself right now!! I totally crossed wires in my brain about which story was which and I panicked when Edward said that he had to tell Bella he was leaving! I had to go back and re-read the last chapter to remember properly!! I am such an idiot at times!
Anyway, loved this chapter, it feels like it is headed well (now that I know which one I am thinking about!). I think their conversation about her dream was handled very well, I like that Bella insisted that Edward tell her. She can't be a silent, shy participant if she thinks she is mature enough to have sex.
Well done!
Author's Response: LOL. That is soooooeasy to do. I think I'm reading over 30 fics right now and writing two of my own. Keeping everything straight can be challeging sometimes. I'm glad you figured it out and hopefully it wasn't too horrible to go back and read chapter 10 again. ;)
I think Bella would be much more open about sex with Edward but she knows the topic is ackward for him plus with all their other difficulties so she is trying to let him lead the way but she won't let him shut her out either. Bella wants to help him as much as he will let her.
Reviewer: The Night (Signed) · Date: February 04, 2009 09:11 PM · On: Chapter 11
always makes me sad when edward leaves... :(
Author's Response: Yea they never part well.
Reviewer: TeamJasper13 (Signed) · Date: February 04, 2009 09:07 PM · On: Chapter 11
This was a nice chapter, but drat that Edward and his self-control, lol. Well, it's good in some areas, but he does know how to leave a girl frustrated! Can't wait to get some Emmett and Jasper moments coming up!
Author's Response: lol. Edward self-control is quite frustrating at times isn't it? Now we all know what Bella feels. :)
Reviewer: LolaRose (Signed) · Date: February 04, 2009 06:34 PM · On: Chapter 10
It Fina;;y posted!!!!!!!!!! This is a great chapter, I cannot wait for more
Author's Response: Yes. Finally.
Thanks. The next one is already submitted so hopefully it will be up soon.
Reviewer: icecoldhamster (Signed) · Date: February 03, 2009 02:09 PM · On: Chapter 4
"So Edward, would you like me to give you some pointers? I mean as you pointed out, Rose and I have a very “healthy” sex life."
Oh Emmett! Lmao, it's so him! Get over the heavy stuff and on to the teasing! Love Emmett!
Aw and when he pictured Edward losing control with Bella and was all remorseful! Awwwwww Moment Alert! (An odd moment to be an 'Aw' one, but I awwed anyway... have I confused you yet?! Lol) I honestly said (inside my head) "Aw give him a hug Edward!" I was nudging him with my mind in Emmett's direction... Didn't work. Lol.
Ha, Jasper trying to be helpful getting Alice to talk to Bella! Would so love to see an outtake of that conversation with Alice! I know Edward said he wasn't to say anything to her (I was paying attention!), but for just a crazy 'what if'. I'd be hilarious!
Hahah, Edward used the W word to scare her off. Poor Bella, crazy little maniac planning her wedding... That's gotta be rough.
I'm gonna stop here for tonight cause I should really get some studying done, but I will definitly read the rest! Promise!
-Katie
Author's Response: Edward knew the teasing was coming but felt it was worth the risk. I guess we will see if he was right or not. :)
lol. Well I wouldn't have thought of that as an aw moment but hey. *shrugs* Everyone has differenent reactions to stories. It's good to hear that the story is pulling you in though.
At this point I have no plans to do outtakes and Perspective will be entirely from Edward's POV but who knows. Never say never right?
I think Alice would make any one (well human anyway) a bit crazy if she were planning their wedding.
Can't wait to hear what you think of the rest so far. :) Thanks for taking the time to read and review.
Reviewer: icecoldhamster (Signed) · Date: February 03, 2009 01:53 PM · On: Chapter 3
Wow... Awkward! They took it well, but still, I'd be mortified if I were Edward. They didn't really help much either did they? Apart from telling him he'd lose control and that they're fond of Bella.
Edward's nervousness is hilarious in a 'Oh God, I'd hate to be Edward right now,' kinda way. Lol. You write it really well! The pacing the stammering the way he wont say sex.
Emmett's frustration with the mind conversations is pretty funny too. Gotta love Emmett. I kinda feel sorry for him, it seems he drew the short end of the stick on that hunting trip... Being left out of conversations, having to put up with deer instead of something tastier ;) (like bear).
Jasper was written amazingly well too! Lol, you can tell they're both just big balls of wisdom in this subject!
-Katie
Author's Response: Awkward would be a good word for this chapter. :) This is one subject Edward is not comfortable with in any way shape or form.
I've always viewed Edward as very proper. He grew up in a time when one did not "talk" about sex. He is well aware of what it is obviously and the mechanics of it but the reality is quite different and he knows this.
Yea they really weren't that helpful were they. Give them some time to think about it; remember Edward just kind of dropped the subject into their laps.
Reviewer: icecoldhamster (Signed) · Date: February 03, 2009 01:41 PM · On: Chapter 2
Well fuck me, I actually feel like I'm reading twilight again! You write just like SMeyer!
They're all so in character it's astounding, I've never read a fic where someone keeps the so much like Bella and Edward! Honestly, wow!
Alice's thought's are exactly what I'd expect them to be, lol. Crazy vampire.
And Edward going hunting with Emmett and Jasper! Oh my God, it's exactly what you'd expect him to do when he'd need advice/guidence! Hahah, the words male and bonding come to mind!
-Katie
Author's Response: LOL. I was laughing so hard when I read this. I'm trying to keep everyone is character so I'm glad you feel I'm doing that. :)
See I've been telling you for how long to check this out? ;)
Reviewer: icecoldhamster (Signed) · Date: February 03, 2009 01:33 PM · On: Chapter 1
Look! It's me! I'm reading! Whooaaa! I know, shocker!
Great start! Love the small things like Carlisle fidgeting and Edward not bothering to close the door. Set's a nice scene!
HAHAH and I looove how Edward was slightly awkward about talking to Carlisle about sex. Lmao! “Bella wants us to try to be…intimate.” -Hesitate much Eddie?? :P
They were very in character. Loved that!
Kay, off to read more!
-Katie
Author's Response: oh my goodness! Your actually reading my fic?! hehehe
Glad your liking it so far. Ok...off to read your other reviews. :)
Reviewer: Leesh (Signed) · Date: February 03, 2009 06:37 AM · On: Chapter 10
ooooooo!!! Please continue!!!!So sweet and sexy...love it!! Wonderfully written!!
Author's Response: Glad your enjoying it so far. I submitted Chapter 11 last night for validation so it is in the hands of the beta now. :)
Reviewer: Leesh (Signed) · Date: February 03, 2009 05:23 AM · On: Chapter 2
Great so far!! Well written and right in line with the characters!
Author's Response: Thank you Leesh. :)
Reviewer: mwild (Signed) · Date: February 03, 2009 01:29 AM · On: Chapter 1
I know it's not your fault. :) Love the story and I can't wait to see where it goes next!
Author's Response: Thank. :)
Reviewer: ds862 (Signed) · Date: February 02, 2009 03:53 PM · On: Chapter 10
I love how uncomfortable and tense you write Edward to be! You can torture poor Edward... I'm sure soon enough you'll give him some kind of release! (pun... intended.).
Can't wait to read your next update!
Author's Response: Well I can promise continued torture for Edward but it will be worth it, I promise. ;)
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