Wow. Deep chapter.
Saucy at the start, but whoa at the bottom.
I never really thought of the wedding night to cause such stress. I mean obviously it would be stressful for him... trying not to kill her and all, but all consuming, tearing him apart kinda thoughts? Yeah, never thought of it that way. Very nice perspective on it. :)
The start. Wow, the start. That was great! I like how he imagines her reactions, like she leaned into his touch. She would so do that.
And that he was hesitant about imagining it, even going so far as to defend this actions (thoughts) to himself. "This was okay though, bella was going to be my wife." Loved that.
Even how you discribed him talking about her breasts was very... Delicatly put I suppose. Like, "I knew she'd be softer there." Very nice. Very Edward.
The poker game... Hmm... The poker game. At first I thought it was just going to be a bit of fun, but it turned the chapter a lot... Darker? His thoughts once again being consumed by the situation enough to be beaten at poker was surprising. Obviously he'd be thinking about it, but thinking about it constatly- As I said, I never really quite looked at it that way.
Him going to Jasper for help was kinda... I dunno. It seems from his thought's as if he's giving in... And, God! That must be awkward!
Poor Emmett, he didn't even realise what he'd done he was so caught up in the game! You got his playful side perfectly!
Great chapter!
I told you I'd read it!
By the way, you're luck I like you and decided to leave you a "pretty decent" review as well as my other crappy one!
-Katie
Author's Response: Yea there was a lot going on with this chapter.
My reasoning behind his stress level is two fold. 1) he always hides his nerves from Bella and since BD is told from her POV we don't pick up on it so much and 2) the little view of his nerves we did see on the island were very telling. To me, it was obvious he was terrified and Edward being Edward he would not have just suddenly become so. It would have been a build up of emotions over a period of time.
Edward is quite the prude sometimes isn't he? And of course always the gentelman. ;)
This chapter is a bit darker but I think chapter 14 is more so, so I can't wait to hear your thoughts on that one.
As for thinking about it constantly, one has to remember that he is away from Bella now. Her presense gives him a happiness, a peace, he doesn't have right now being away from her. His emotions are piling on top of one another and he is drowning in them.
In a way he was giving up by going to Jasper. He was admitting he can't do this on his own, he needs help. It was a huge step for him.
I know. Emmett is Emmett and we love him but he does know just the wrong things to say sometimes. :)
Yeah, Yeah. :P
