Wow, that fight was crazy. First I was mad as hell at bella, at her inability to produce a shield when it was needed. Then it came kinda late, but whatever.  I made for good battlefield drama. Then the fight came. O.M.G. I see why you had alot of no names, and even though they didn't have a backstory, I still mourned their passing. It was hard to go unnoticed. I love the fight between alice and chelsea. I imagine alice as darting back and forth in front of her playfully, big smile and everthing, while chelsea looked at her in boredom like alice was a petulant child, but then all of a sudden alice expression changed to something demonic and she attack; then chelsea shitted a brick before alice took her head.

I love that there were serious loses like Amun , Senna,Charles, 5 wolves[ 1 of them possibly seth] and possibly tanya [your weren't really clear since you only mention she was left for dead], but of all the losses, marcus lived just to go off somewhere to commit suicide. smh. I guess he needed to be there to show edward his faith if he had never met or loss bella.

I loved how you describe the fight between charles and the little redheaded vampire that ended up killing him. Good details.

I loved the fact that bella owned demetri. lol, that was glorious. She owned him so bad it scared the fight right out of felix. And that "Fuck You"  that came out of her mouth after she took him apart even ripping his heart out... GAWD!, that was the best!.

I loved that Carlise and Esme didn't leave one another during the fight, and worked as a great team. Also loved the fact that esme wasn't timid, that she wanted to 'Level" any and everybody that wanted to do bodily harm to her family.

I really respected rose to defend bella even while emment was going to buy the farm. She stayed and protected bella for edward, when he was fighting his own fight, almost sacrificing emmett to jane.

I loved! when Rose beat the shit out of Jane 'ole school stye' for what she did to emmett.

But I hated the fact that we had no clue of emmetts progress in the fight. He woulda been good to see. Im suprised NO ONE to date has ever put emmett against felix no matter what fanfic I read. Not your fault I know, but damn.

I love that bella get the centuries she fought and made her enemies literally bleed for.lol

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I can't wait to see what you have in store for the next chapter. This is definetly in my favorites. But not in my top ten, due to missed tactical opportunites and lack of common sense decision making.

 

First off, That plan to disable aro's plane so that he doesn't get back to forks b4 they do, was RETARDED!!!!!!. If you want to leave aro stranded, TAKE THE PLANE!!!!!. 

Second: What is all this leading away nonsense. No matter what, the final destination is going to be back home whether aro gets there first or not. They will still have to get back home to either help or avenge thier losses; for being stupid and not TAKING THE PLANE! like a person w/ common sense would've. The plane is registered to the volturi, any 'illegal'  b.s. w/ the FAA about not having a valid flight plan would've been trace back to them; again their problem.

IT was BEYOND Stupid to write this chapter. Either edward is the biggest idiot alive, or the person who wrote this is!. IT made no F'ing sense!.

3rd, I do enjoy the story w/ the exception of this chapter (chap 25) and the nonsense of them keeping thier love for each other a secret from one another for 23 effing chapters. But the decisions and how they occurred is beyond remedial.  There were sooo many options that could've been taken that would have bought them time and ultimately led to a more timely exit. First off, the wolves inhibit alice's vision... so why are they so close by all the time?. Training could be done anywhere, they don't need to be doing it under her armpit. The decison to have a conversation w/ the wolves in the house was also retarded, it was what allowed them to get caught out there by alec, if they meet at the treaty line, by the time they broke away from the discussion, alice would've had a chance to have a vision 'on the way'. It would've given them a chance to run and buy some time. Clearly they didn't have demetri w/ them. I don't get fanfics where you writers swear the only place to meet w/ the smelly ass wolves is in the middle of the goddamn living room. How about the effing treaty line?. Isnt that the purpose it serves?. And there are so many more. These decisions added more to reader frustration than to the drama. IF you want drama, read "A chance encounter" another twilight  fanfic... now that's drama!. It starts out w/ remedial decisions as well, but good grief what drama!. You will have an aniexty act like nothing before in your life. I know I did. Good lawd, that was DRAMA!.

Well x3, that was a lovely surprise. Almost worth the wait...

[ Seriously, if this happened 5 chapters ago, it would have been perfect!.  You stretch it out for far too long, now it feels like; finally that b.s. is out of the way, instead of what it was suppose to feel like, happy blissful relief for them in thier realization]

. Its about time they confess thier love for one another. Even though your explaination of why she kept her tongue so long was weak, I thought to myself, if she said all of that earlier  she would have came off as a psyhco stalker b*#E$. Especially after only meeting the guy once. So, I completely grasp that there really wasn't a tactiful way of telling the str8 truth w/o coming of off as a bit crazy. If that what you were really trying to get at then gr8, we are on the same page.

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As per her powers. Good lawd. Looks like you gave her a smorgest board of gifts. If Aro ever touched edward now... He would have to kill him to keep her or even kill her out of fear.

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Ahhh, no renesmee. But then again none of that nonesense w/ JB's imprinting. I HATEEDDDDDD tHAT!. That was wrong on SOOOoooooOOOOO many levels. I couldn't finish BD b/c of that alone [ Why do you think I stick to FANFIC's? lol]. I was that digusted by the whole thing. IT made no F'ing sense. There is no way JB should've be so easily 'acceptd' just b/c he imprinted, no f'ing way. But SM did one quick arguement w/ bella and walla; JB is on easy street. REALLY?!!!, GET THE F outta HERE!.  After all the shit he pulled to ruin an thier relationship?, you give up your first born to him?. I dont care what he or SM thinks Bella owes him, he doesn't derseves EDwards first born. F'HIM. That alone was a mine field of arguement that needed to be had but never did. Seperation should've been priotity #1. Followed by the occasional ass kicking, due to the fact that whether its w/ the mother or the daughter, JB can't seem to take no for an answer. So, you would have to break his legs, then when he heals he could try again; till you move away from the area of course. Seriously, that was a big Get the F outta here situation, and NO ONE said SHITTTTTT. After 2 books of this kid trying his BEST to destroy and seperate, he is just accepted as the new smelly member of the family. ARE YOU Fing KIDDING ME???.

Like I said, don't get me started, I can go all night on that topic.

Plus the fact is HE SMELL LIKE DOG SHIT to THEM!. Who would want that around ALL THE TIME?.

This was a long chapter that could've been shorter. Oh well, thanks for taking the time.

I love the fact that you didn't make this a love triangle, I HATED THAT!!!!!. Don't even get me started on JB/renesmee imprinting. ARRRGGGGGHHH. I couldn finish BD b/c of that. I literally couldnt read past the fact that after the so called fight btw jb and bella, the imprinting was just ''accepted''. Get the F outta here. IT MADE NO SENSE! and was WRONG on SOOOOO many levels, even if you leave out the fact that she was an infant. There were sooooo many things else that made the easy ''acceptance'' just sooo wrong, that it was impossible to finish. IT MADE NO F'ing SENSE for them to just 'accept' it as easily as they did.

But back to your story. Bella only thought of JB as a friend. Whatever else was going thru his mind was his problem. At least in this version, she clearly set boundaries to their old/current relationship and didn't lead him on by running over to the rez to 'escape' edward, or kiss him on mt tops after being manipulated into doing so. This version seems to have better sense of what she wants in her life, and the fact that he smells like 3rd world gorilla ass doesnt bode well for him either; no matter how his muscles are defined.

Now if only she opened her mouth and says what she feels about edward, or if he would just figure out what he wants and says it, thing would be swell.

Truly, Edward is the dumbest smart guy anyone could know.

Oh please... give me a break. 8 wolves are not going to be the end of anything. Kiss ass that you believe that. And enough w/ this repressed edward shit. I have read fanfics of a repressed edward, but 14 chapters later and he is still repressed w/ no signs of letting up. Good grief.

Seriously... what.an.idiot. He knows she is his mate, but he plans on leaving her b/c he believes he doesn't deserve her. Too stupid to live. She should go bone another dude in front of him. That is what his stupidity deserves. He is soooooo self destructive, im surprised he lived this long. So effing frustrating to read his pov.

Edward is REAALLLLLYYYY dense when it comes to relationships. I can't stand reading from this guys pov. He is too stupid to be considered intelligent on any level. He has NO life experience. READING minds for 100 yrs does not mean you had the experience too; so stop acting like a know it all!.

Reading Epov's has always been one of the most depressing things. He is so masochistic about everything he does. Sure he deserve some blame, but he takes self inflicted guilt to a whole new level.

His biggest issue is that he never learned to love or even like himself, as a vampire. He took carlise preaching about god, good and evil too literally. Can't he see that even carlise himself doesnt treat himself as badly as he does.

Why can't he see or learn from the ppl around him?. Why can't he see how they adapted to this new life. From what i've read, he just looks at the bad and magnifies it to the point of depression. (bakayarou)

It so ridiculous to see how he see how he interrupts things. The sun is out (I no longer belong), Its raining (this is my life, to be in shadow), Some girl is interested in me(what's wrong w/ her im a monster), and on and on it goes. Depressing, depressing, depressing. Seriously Emoward, Kill yourself!.

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Love bella's reaction when she woke up from the transformation. Calm and understanding. Too bad eward looks at emotions like a math problem. He is clearly planning on subtracting himself b/c that always solves his problems. Distance. He is a runner!. whether it is from pshycial distance or emotional ones, enormous amounts of space is always the solution to him. What.an.idiot.

Just by not picking up his ph, edward seems like such an arrogant ass.

Aha!  Does he have any sway over the rest of the Volturi guard?  Hmmm...

This has been great to read after seeing BD2!

Can't wait for the next chapter!

Excellent chapter all the way around! 

I started your story a few days ago.  I try to sneak it into any spare moment!  Thank you.