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Reviewer: nwalto (Signed) · Date: August 03, 2010 07:46 PM · On: Chapter 5: Of Hanging Up and Hunting Down

You're transporting me back to this time with your vivid descriptions!

Reviewer: nwalto (Signed) · Date: August 03, 2010 07:12 PM · On: Chapter 4: Of Finding a Job and Formulating a Plan

Love that she's concerned about affecting the future. Pretty mature way of her to view things!

Reviewer: nwalto (Signed) · Date: August 03, 2010 07:04 PM · On: Chapter 3: Of Fainting and Familiar Faces

I love that I can't tell what in the heck is going on!

Reviewer: nwalto (Signed) · Date: August 03, 2010 06:55 PM · On: Chapter 2 - Of Corsets and Confusion

Loving it!

Reviewer: nwalto (Signed) · Date: August 03, 2010 06:44 PM · On: Chapter 1 - Of Rituals and Really Big D***s

One of the most unique story ideas I've ever read on the site! Very respectful treatment of the Quileutes, too.

Reviewer: dnabgeek (Signed) · Date: August 03, 2010 06:28 PM · On: Chapter 16: Of Letters and Lauper

Okay Shovelward is ADORABLE! and I just can't seem to stop reviewing... I'm never going to get through this at this rate!!

Reviewer: dnabgeek (Signed) · Date: August 03, 2010 04:41 PM · On: Chapter 11: Of Making Peace and Meeting the Parents

ROFL... I love that he can't play!!

Reviewer: dnabgeek (Signed) · Date: August 03, 2010 04:08 PM · On: Chapter 9: Of Motor Cars and Making Friends

I was going to wait until I got caught up but did you mean to have her call him Mr. Cullen or not at the end of the chapter?

Reviewer: jesicka309 (Signed) · Date: August 03, 2010 03:22 PM · On: Chapter 23: Of Rings and Revelations

Oooh I can't believe she told him!  Doesn't that break all the rules of time travel?   I guess she isn't aiming to keep the future the same, she wants to shake it up a bit.

A good chapter, though I'm going to miss BT while you are away! :( lol

Jess xo

Reviewer: CyberKeiko (Signed) · Date: August 03, 2010 02:48 PM · On: Chapter 23: Of Rings and Revelations

Holy moley that was a big chapter! Bella finally accepted marriage! I have to admit, when Edward put things like that [in the last chapter], Bella didn't have a chance in hell! *fans herself* Those two are gonna burn the sheets when they have their wedding night! :D Carlisle is such a good friend, and I can't wait until he has Esme in his life. It's nice to see him less than perfect, but still such a good person. I hope the change in events don't affect that. Although I admit I'm worried. Bella hasn't taken into consideration how dangerous it is for her to have such high immunity... I mean, isn't that the reason why many indigenous people died when the White Man invaded? The WM had immunity to certain diseases, and they brought it to the New World, affecting those who lived there... I fear that the influenza can infect Bella, although since she's immune it won't hurt her, but she can still carry it, and worst of all, have it mutate to a stronger form that can cause such a bad epidemic and kill Edward anyways, which is even worse if it would happen far away from Carlisle!

Ok I'm getting depressed. Great story, my dear! Keep up the awesome writing!

Reviewer: eliza3ame (Signed) · Date: August 03, 2010 12:32 PM · On: Chapter 23: Of Rings and Revelations

Noooo, OMG why did u end it there. I need more pretty please. This chapter was of so freaking awesome. please update soon

Reviewer: sistajalice (Signed) · Date: August 03, 2010 12:22 PM · On: Chapter 23: Of Rings and Revelations

wow! That was...hot.

It's too bad that she feel so guity about what's going to happen to those around her when the influenza comes. The poor girl can't save everyone.

Looking forward to the next post :-)

Reviewer: ElektraLane (Signed) · Date: August 03, 2010 12:20 PM · On: Chapter 23: Of Rings and Revelations

Wow! You really left us with a cliffie! Good job too, as that will make the next chapter even better! I wonder if Edward will insist they bring his parents? This is very good and I love it!

Reviewer: hc4metal (Signed) · Date: August 03, 2010 10:22 AM · On: Chapter 23: Of Rings and Revelations

This is one of the best Twilight fan fics I have ever read!

Reviewer: TexasTwilight77 (Signed) · Date: August 03, 2010 08:19 AM · On: Chapter 23: Of Rings and Revelations

Yummy! Cannot wait to see how far they take it, though I don't think it'll be all the way. Things are starting to get interesting, the flu is almost here and I know they still have a ways to go but I can't wait to get it going, great job. ;)

Reviewer: LilMoCullen (Signed) · Date: August 03, 2010 08:08 AM · On: Chapter 23: Of Rings and Revelations

WOW it shounds like its going to get crazy, i cant wait :) Till tehen take care :D PS: Thanks for the update

Reviewer: rubyred_fm_tx (Signed) · Date: August 03, 2010 07:56 AM · On: Chapter 23: Of Rings and Revelations

Oh my!!!!!!!! Can't wait for the next chapter.

Reviewer: Dahlia Raynes (Signed) · Date: August 03, 2010 07:36 AM · On: Chapter 23: Of Rings and Revelations

So exciting!! Finally a movement to get them out of the city. Although we know Edward likes to keep people safe and she gave him the list of places. I get the feeling he'll try to get his parents out too even though she didn't outright say that they were going to die.  Ooh! I can't wait to see what happens next!! I wonder if Edward will actually go as far with Bella as it seems like with the cliffie?  We know his stop and go tendencies.

Thank you for the warning about your absence. I will have to find a way to log on here on the 13th to read the next chapter as thats when I leave for my vacation away from computers. Even if that means trying to read it on my iPod touch! LOL

Keep up the good work.

Reviewer: mom2bells1 (Signed) · Date: August 03, 2010 07:13 AM · On: Chapter 23: Of Rings and Revelations

Oh. My. Gosh!!!!!

I love your story. Great chapter the plot moved along very well.

I love that Bella told Edward the truth about the future. If she had lied...he probably would have seen right through her. It was the best option. :)

You really create an attachment to these characters through your words and sensory details. They are so loveable!

I will be patiently waiting for the next posting----I know it will be worth the wait.

Thanks for sharing your writing!

Reviewer: xbellex (Signed) · Date: August 03, 2010 07:08 AM · On: Chapter 23: Of Rings and Revelations

Haha! You're trying to make this a shot-gun wedding afterall. ;o) oooh! Maybe she returns to the future pregant with Edward's child.. but he's been turned into a vampire.. but now they have a fully-human child..

Haha.. Sorry train of thought.. Great story, can't wait for the next storyline. ;o)

Reviewer: marti1013 (Signed) · Date: August 03, 2010 07:03 AM · On: Chapter 23: Of Rings and Revelations

dammit, I shoulda held off and waited til the next chapter gets up when you return!

 

Great chapter and  a great read of course.

 

Marti

Reviewer: GoSpikey (Signed) · Date: August 03, 2010 06:45 AM · On: Chapter 23: Of Rings and Revelations

I tell you this now, so you don't get down to the end and want to break my kneecaps!

 

Ah, those kneecaps... No fun dancing without them! Or so was said somewhere, on a tv show? Don't remember which one. They probably were going to put a bullet in them, I guess.

 

Also, some raised concerns that the story will be fluff heavy from here on out... the next chapters will be, but the drama will return down the road.

 

Why is Fergie starting to sing "No, no drama, we don't want no drama"? I don't think I've had enough sleep this night. Must be that.

 

But other than that, yes, I hope we all get there will be more drama to come. I mean, were ST time travel stories complete fluff? I think not! And like I said on the board: Future!Edward still needs to get his butt kicked, I think.

 

"I just want to be with you," he murmured before devouring me in another hot kiss.

 

Poor lad, really. What kind of molesting he has to go through before getting her to agree to marrying him... It's almost like he has to sell himself with his body, instead of her appreciating him for his brain, and trusting her love for him. Can we hug him? And molest him after we say ‘I do'? :-D

 

He didn't hold back, and it was all I could do not to climb on top of him and rip his shirt from his shoulders.

 

In fact, I was halfway there when rational thought reared its ugly head.

 

This was wrong.

 

Yes, it is wrong. You know how Edward feels/felt about his virtue. *cough* I hope she'll keep that in mind. If she wants him, it's Vegas, baby!

 

"My mother blamed my father for taking her away to a small town. She felt stifled. My father couldn't understand her. They grew apart. They were unhappy. And I was caught in the middle."

 

It was so funny, wasn't it, how easy Renee was after Bella told her she was getting married to Edward. But Renee was right, they were meant to be, and Bella wouldn't do it for anything less, marrying that early in life. I wish she'd get that insight. I mean, she knows she's Edward's mate. Or perhaps she doesn't, since all she knows is that he left her, could leave her. She was but a distraction...

 

"You're mighty sure of yourself, Mr. Masen," I teased gently.

 

Phew. She didn't even choke on the name. And don't you just love it when Edward's eyes darken when she calls him ‘Mister something'? There's a Shyward around, or a Nerdward, call him whatever you want, and his eyes do that, too. You should really give that story a chance: JSFazz - Discovering You, Discovering Me. Awesome read.

 

"Some people search their whole lives to find the one that's meant for them," he began in a low voice. "I never expected to have her walk into my front yard and call me by name."

 

And then that Jackass, yes, here he is again, the one from the future, just drops her like a stone. I went to reread chapter 2, she knew he was lying, sure, but he did say he was looking for her for 90 years, and still he denies himself. And then you're here, in the past, and this Edward says such pretty things, and then you're back there, watching him leave you behind.

 

Edward's face positively beamed as he smiled. He slid the ring on my finger, then threw his head back and laughed for a moment before leaning in to kiss me.

 

Was that a ‘woman conquered' kind of laugh? Or an ‘I won' kind of laugh? Sweet either way. Boy must be so happy. I'm happy for the boy. And worried where it'll all go wrong-ish?

 

"I think we should wait to tell them about our engagement."

 

I choked a little on my tea at the word, but recovered quickly.

 

*falls next to her chair*

 

Bella, what do you think that ‘yes' was for? There's a step in between ‘seeing each other' and ‘being married to each other'. :P

 

"It was my grandmother's," Edward told me. "She gave it to me before she died. She said I'd know I'd found the right one to give it to, when I couldn't imagine it on anyone else's finger."

 

His grandmother's, huh? I wonder where it went, future wise. Since Edward would have used the one from his mother for Bella, would that mean the one from his grandmother was missing? Hmm, I'll think further on my ‘VampBella's out there' theory. Does she still have it on? Hmm...

 

Unless she's getting mugged, or something. God, I hope not. Edward's pretty ring... Given with all the right intentions. :-(

 

"I wanted to make sure he was... deserving of your trust."

 

"You mean you spied on him," I stated flatly.

 

Yup, like father, like son.

 

Carlisle sat down behind his desk, flipping through a file. "A while."

 

A while. He and Edward are more alike than either one would care to admit.

 

Hehe. I think I said that in the previous chapter's review for the first time, right?

 

"How long ‘a while?'"

 

Carlisle's sheepish shrug gave him away before his answer. "Since I first met him... after I heard you arguing outside the hospital."

 

I gaped. "Months? You've been spying on him for months?"

 

I can't believe Carlisle's been spying on him for months... And like Bella said, she's still not convinced he does like like her... Because we all know, even if Carlisle thought he loved Bella, it's nowhere near what he was going to feel for Esme... But months? Wow.

 

The truth was, I wasn't really worried about me. Charlie was adamant that I get a flu shot every year, and the previous fall, I'd not only gotten one, but two.

 

I was pretty sure my H1N1 vaccine could kick the 1918 Spanish Influenza's ass.

 

She of course works under the assumption that her flu shots came with her to 1918... Hmm, we'll see. Perhaps she'll be able to persuade Edward to go somewhere else with her, but they'll both get sick anyway, and Carlisle has to turn them both... But that doesn't make much sense with the ‘why aren't Bella and Edward together from that day on' part. I don't think they can be, in order to make the time loop work (if there is one). But then there's the matter of Carlisle and Edward not knowing anything anymore... Unless it's a hallucination. Grrr. You're very frustrating, you know. But 7 more chapters, yes? ^^

 

"I know what you're thinking," Edward whispered in my ear.

 

"I really hope not," I whispered back with a teasing smile.

 

No mind reading yet, and not with her, Edward... See? Bella is thinking the same things as Jessica and Lauren and all the other chicks at Forks High were thinking about. It seems that only the human Edward gets it, though. Vampward seemed pretty clueless when it came to women, when he encountered one who's mind he couldn't read.

 

I shook my head and smiled softly. "So you will run away with me?"

 

He smiled back, leaning forward to kiss me gently. "To the ends of the earth."

 

‘Like that's going to happen,' part of my brain is whispering to me. We'll see, brain, we'll see. Will she need to call Carlisle's help when it turns out he's infected after all? Painful, angsty... Oh boy.

 

His free hand gripped my hip, rubbing it gently with his thumb while pressing me closer to his body... his heat. The air thickened around us, mimicking the moisture and feverish want growing between my legs and spreading throughout my body.

 

"Edward," I moaned as his lips moved to my throat.

 

"Bella, I want... to be with you," he murmured,..

 

Ya wouldn't last 3 minutes, man, if you're getting yourself this worked up before doing anything...

 

Now, where's my fan?

 

I literally thought my blood would boil and my body would explode all over Maggie's petunias.

 

Oh, I beg of you, do... Is that some kind of ‘deflowering her flowers' thing?

 

"Take me to your room," he said in a low voice.

 

"What?" I asked, dazed and a little stunned.

Assuming he'd want to do more than dry hump... Did Bella ever read that folder that Eleanor, or what was her name, gave her? It would be funny if she were sent to the present pregnant. (Hey, if her flu shots have a chance of having made it to 1918, then why can't a baby travel to the future?)

 

I grabbed his hand, and I dragged him up the stairs to my room.

 

*wonders who the cock blocker is going to be*

 

Maggie? Maybe they made it back by now? I mean, if Bella doesn't hear Edward's parents coming when they're all up front, then she definitely won't hear Maggie coming back home when she's more at the back, or something?

 

Two weeks... We can survive that. Definitely with that teaser you left for us on Monday. So Alistair is still at the house, huh? Ew. Like I said on the forum, I was thinking that they'd better lock the door, and put something in front of the keyhole, because who knows if he's a peeping Tom or not... EW!

 

;-)

 

Have a nice journey!

 

Spikey

Reviewer: twilightmomct (Signed) · Date: August 03, 2010 06:40 AM · On: Chapter 23: Of Rings and Revelations

Well I was a bit surprised that Bella told Edward so many things that would happen in the future. At least he didn't think she was certifiable.

I certainly hope you enjoy your week away & I'll be anxiously awaiting the next chapter to see what sorts of naughty things these two get into alone in Bella's bedroom.

Reviewer: NinaWright (Signed) · Date: August 03, 2010 06:28 AM · On: Chapter 23: Of Rings and Revelations

GUUUUUUUUHHHHHHHH!!!! Woman! As for the rest of the chapter, I loved the proposal! All around, it was a fantastic chapter as usual!

Reviewer: Lenore (Signed) · Date: August 01, 2010 02:00 PM · On: Chapter 22: Of Carousels and Cracker Jacks

oh love!

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