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Reviewer: bella93 (Signed) · Date: March 29, 2010 05:37 AM · On: Chapter 1

Sweet mexico!!!!

Yeah alot people read on twilighted because it isnt blocked....:D i love twilighted.

Sooo in the words of a 5year old "are we there yet?"



Author's Response:

I love Twilighted TOO. I think the review response system they have set up is SO much cooler.

ONE MORE babe!!!! Almost there . . . .

Reviewer: bella93 (Signed) · Date: March 29, 2010 04:20 AM · On: Chapter 1

lol does it really matter what i boost ;) lol

southdakota

and school its soo boring writing a paper on child abuse its like 10 pages long and its grrrrness! i mean really!

lol

thats my goal 100 baby! lol



Author's Response:

HOly shit! I've never met anyone from South Dakota. I'm SO excited. I'm originally from Mexico, but now I don't have a home. AW.

One time I had to write a paper on child neglect, that one sucked. SO I feel your grrrrrness and raise you an ARRRGH!!!

I have NO idea why I'm not asleep yet. I really don't.

And no, it doesn't what you boost. I like it! You're so much frackin' fun and hilarious . . . stay up with me every night!

When I first started writing I had no idea I would even get one review so I'm all pysked (sp?)

Reviewer: bella93 (Signed) · Date: March 28, 2010 08:21 PM · On: Chapter 1

hey i might as well right! lol

i mean its right there!

it says rate reveiw or both lol i like two not one ;) lol jk



Author's Response:

LOL--I love it.

Hehe plus if we keep it up maybe I'll tip the scales past 100 reviews, WHAT, WHAT *Amy Pohler style*

Two is always better than one--great things come in two. Two twix, two reese's cups . . . breasts. Noah's arc represent.

Where are you from? What you up to besides boosting my ego . . . erm ratings! lol 

Reviewer: bella93 (Signed) · Date: March 28, 2010 08:15 PM · On: Chapter 1

lol i suppose....*drops it* oh shit fire *hose :D*

alright all good...



Author's Response:

*Whew*

Smiles all around!

LOL, and I love how even though we're just bullshitting around you still rate the story!!!! BAHAHA so funny!

Reviewer: bella93 (Signed) · Date: March 28, 2010 07:59 PM · On: Chapter 1

only if you dont update fast enough lol...

i knew i should have been in drama lol



Author's Response:

Haha, you should have! Next chapter will go to be validated on Friday and every chapter after that, OKAY? Good enough?

*drop the pitchfork and lighter*

LOL

Reviewer: roxiegirl (Signed) · Date: March 28, 2010 07:35 PM · On: Chapter 12

I finally figured out how to fet the keyboard on my iPhone to pop up so I could write comments!! Took me forever. Anyway, I've been reading and leaving ratings but this is my first comment. I absolutely love this story!! I usually only like Bella and Edward POV but thr multiple ones sre working with this story. Oh god I nope it has an HEA. Things just look so bleak that I'm having s hard Tim finding it.

I see from this chapter that Edward went back to Novalnie. Can't wait for the nect EPOV. Thanks so much for the chapter!!

Author's Response:

YAY!!!

Thanks for joining the party. I love getting to communicate with my readers. SO WOO HOO figuring out the iPhone!

WOW, thank you so much. I'm glad that you really like my little ditty, and I hope that I can keep you interested in it!

I know what you mean about the POV's, it's been controversial from the start and I knew going into this that it would be a HUGE risk, but I just decided I had to be true to the story I wanted to tell the way I saw it being told in front of me. And that's this here. I sincerely hope that I'm opening up a lot of peoples eyes and minds to multiple first person POV's. If done right, I don't think they are a bad thing. But it's a sticky slope because they are easy to mess up. AND so I work VERY hard at sticking to my rules and guidelines as well as my own style to make sure that the multiple POV's work.

I hope there is an HEA too! As a reader, I sympathize greatly. But as a writer, I have to be a realist and you see it too--this situation is pretty bleak. BUT I promise that, in my mind there will be an HEA all around--it just may not be one that everyone can agree with or will like honestly, but for me (and my characters) and HEA will mean growth and salvation--that's the point of my story. That's about all I can give away right now.

OHH *that and I've left clues all over the place as to what you can expect in an HEA* Yay scavenger hunt! LOL

So this is getting long, lol. Thanks for reading and reviewing/rating. xxNaya

Reviewer: Mora-Cullen (Signed) · Date: March 28, 2010 03:47 PM · On: Chapter 12

keep writing...I need to know what happens next!



Author's Response:

Mora, thanks for always showing your support! I appreciate you buckets hun!

I need to know what happens next too--it kills me, because it's all already played out in my head a million times and it's like sometimes I can't get it down in words fast enough. LOL.

Next one will go to be validated on Friday--you have my word!

Reviewer: courtney1022 (Signed) · Date: March 28, 2010 03:36 PM · On: Chapter 12

OOOO NOW I LUV EMMY HE IS SO LOVING.... THIS STORY IS JUST SO  GREAT .YOU ARE DOING A WONDERFUL JOB AND IM STARTING TO SEE HOW IT WILL ALL START COMING TOGETHER.  (OH AND THANKS FOR MY TINY EDDIE FIX)

 

LUV YA



Author's Response:

Hey lover, you never cease to make me smile! Yep, snippet of Eddie there for you.

I'm SOOOO freaking excited that you're starting to see it all come together 'cause I know you were a bit confused in the beginning. Yay me! *pats self on back*

Isn't Emmett delicious! Sometimes I wonder if I ever get a banner made what it would look like, because there are too many central conflicts that I wouldn't be happy with just a ExB one. You know? Luckily I don't know how to make banners or anything like that. Actually when it comes to computers, I'm pretty dumb.

Reviewer: bella93 (Signed) · Date: March 27, 2010 07:54 PM · On: Chapter 1

yeah totally hes kinda like my mom just clue less!!! lol

cant wait for an update

hurry *lookin for torchpick and lighter*



Author's Response:

LOL, that made me smile!

Whats the torchpick and lighter for, should I be worried?

Reviewer: bella93 (Signed) · Date: March 26, 2010 08:42 AM · On: Chapter 11

loved it i just started reading cant wait till the next chapter....mike is sucha dumb ass lol



Author's Response:

Hi! welcome to my little world. Reviews mean the world to me! I'm SO glad that you like my little ditty. Isn't Mike a total doofus?!?! But I think he makes for a fun POV to pass my fillers, get the important small facts out there and not have to OVERWHELM with all the EMO crap that I'm notorious for! hehe

xxNaya

Reviewer: edwrdcu77enlover (Signed) · Date: March 25, 2010 01:14 PM · On: Chapter 11

OH I forgot! Rosalie's been caught haha! I bet Mike "can't keep a secret even if I signed a disclosure contract" will open his dirty gross mouth soon...

at least she's not a slave like the others...



Author's Response:

Se ha acabado el camino

Y ahora no se a donde ir

Ya presiento que la tristeza

Se acerca, y me empieza a seguir

Hoy se, que mi vida no era tan mia

Tambien el ayer

Y mi orgullo se empieza a caer

Y de nuevo se empieza a encender

Esa llama que quise apagarY que nunca podre. (lalala!)

I wouldn't be too sure about Rosalie. SOMETIMES in life we are slaves to things we don't even realize and maybe things we do. Bella, in my story said "It was when I was two that I learned I had lost all free will, the only difference was that now at least these captors made me aware of it." (DUN DUN DUN)

Sometimes we don't realize who or WHAT actually owns us. Some of us are slaves to passion or to our own desires. Some of us are slaves to our family or friends, to making others happy. Some of us are slaves to our careers and money. And some of us are slaves to our fears . . . that's all I can give away for now . . . .

AND the worst part is the things we will WILLINGLY do in certain instances for the people or things that own us. Remember this!

Reviewer: edwrdcu77enlover (Signed) · Date: March 25, 2010 01:03 PM · On: Chapter 11

Naya thanks for mention me in your notes!!! I kind of felt famous while reading it haha, even showed up to my hubby XD and yeah! I'm your biggest fan here!

It was funny and annoying to read Mikes POV, I mean, can't he be more of a jackass? and calling himself Big Mike all the time, what a cracker!. Still poor Bella to endure such a moron, though she has to endure far more worse with the boss and his mobsters gah!

oh, and Edward finding out Mike and Bella!!!! I was expecting him to beat the crap of Mike haha. Felt a knot in my stomach waiting for that, but hey! I know something juicy must be coming cuz Alice just risk it and said her name ;)

can't wait for next one! I'm so hooked to this story...

ps. so how did it go with your one shot? where is it so I can support you there?

XOXO

 

 



Author's Response:

LOL, I imagined you pulling your husband in to see it! jaja

Oh and SO sorry about the size of the writing in the last review. Sorry! I like using Mike's POV as my filler to pass important information but not crucial stuff becaus that way the POV isn't all crazy emotional, it's a nice balance I think. 'Cause even Emmett's POV is emotional, just in a funnier way . . . eek!

Story, shmory . . . it don't matter . . . I'm so hooked on you!

My one-shot I put the information on the new chapter for when it posts, so it has all the links--it should go up soon!

Reviewer: courtney1022 (Signed) · Date: March 25, 2010 08:40 AM · On: Chapter 11

OOOOO I LUV MY EDDIE AND LUV A MAD EDDIE EVEN MORE. TIME FOR HIM TO GO HELP JAZZY GET THEIR WOMEN... GREAT FILLER CHAPTER.

 

AS ALWAYS LUV THIS STORY



Author's Response:

LOL, yeah you do! Little by little hun, it's getting REALLY close . . . can you feel it?!?! I promise you'll love it!

Reviewer: Cina24 (Signed) · Date: March 25, 2010 06:49 AM · On: Chapter 11

Loved the POV from the last 2 chapters...  you are a great writer...  thanks for sharing



Author's Response:

WOW, thank you hun! Reviews mean the world to me and I'm so glad you're enjoying my little ditty. Welcome to the dark side, lol!

Reviewer: edwrdcu77enlover (Signed) · Date: March 23, 2010 02:33 PM · On: Chapter 1

Naya you're really a genius! everytime I review you amaze me with your witty and insights. You surely thought well about the complex part of your characters and goes very deep. I'm glad you make me apretiate Tanya for who she is and not for canon Bella's previous judgment. And you're right, a woman like Tanya would feel very attracted to a man such as Carlisle =D

pd. por cierto creo que aun sigo cansada por el viaje, aunque no hice nada jajaja... pero creo que viajar y salir de tu rutina puede ser tambien agotador =)

te mando un abrazote y gracias por todo!



Author's Response:

Mari, LOL. Sabes que entiendo completamente, tengo una flojera que no me quita! Y estoy en medio de tratando de responder a tu email, enviar el nuevo capítulo, también lavando los trastes y haciendo la cena--jajaja!

Ah, ese Carlisle me tiene boca abierta y rodada a sus pies!

SIEMPRE TAN amable! Lo único que es cierto es que puse-estoy poniendo-mucho pensamiento a mis characters ;)

Okay, te dejo porque tengo que hacer mis quehaceres, pero espera una letra mia esta noche.

OHHH y sabes, cuando me pongo a limpiar, de cualquier manera, me pongo a escuchar música y TE JURO que lo que toco ahorita es esa de Marisela-Sin Él. LOL Esa me encanta!  

Reviewer: krash86 (Signed) · Date: March 22, 2010 07:39 PM · On: Chapter 10

What an awesome story so far!! I'm really enjoying tomultiple POV's and all the different apsects each character brings and how they effect eachother. I'm looking forward to reading more of this story. It has my emotions allover the map! I go from crying one minute to being angry and then I want to cry again! I just want it all to work out, you know, the happily ever after. But really, in these kind of circumstances, not everybody gets away so easily...but best wishes to the characters!! I also loved that you did a run-down on the characyers in the begining, I haven't read a story that does that yet and found it very refreshing and helped to get me into the story a little more before even reading and of it. It helped knowing what kind of attitudes to expect from each one, seeing how this is such a dark story. Well written and eager to read more!!



Author's Response:

WOW! Thank you! I'm so glad that you're enjoying my story. I know what you mean about emotions all over the place, I have to take breathers sometimes just to get away from it all!

And YOU'RE so right, sometimes in this type of situation, hell most of the time, a happily ever after isn't possible, it's the real world like that, you know. BUT I love that you're hoping that all my characters get one! I think that I have given them all a happily ever after, it just won't be what everyone might want. It will be tough, but I think I've done them all justice and kept my realistic integrity. LOL sort of.

Yeah, that whole summary was a TOTAL mistake, but then I got such a HUGE positive response from it that I decided to keep it up. I'm glad you liked it! xxNaya

Reviewer: edwrdcu77enlover (Signed) · Date: March 22, 2010 03:55 PM · On: Chapter 10

you know? I've always dislike Tanya... I know, jelous of her wanting Edward haha

but though she sounds pretty much like a whore at first, I mean she enjoys using her body and looks to gain something and she did it willingly as oposite to Bella and Alice that are force to do it, and gain nothing but pain. I feel pity for her, cuz she got lost in her way and went to the next extreme from selfish to lose herself to "make" Edward happy again. Poor woman that's a lost fight, hope she can find happiness in the end, of course with someone else, haha =P

love the chapter btw, always great Naya, very insightful =)



Author's Response:

Hola Amor, todavia tengo que responder al email, pero es que sali de la cuidad este fin de, y apenas regrese! Como fue tu fin de?

Ah . . . Tanya! I LOVE Tanya. I think she is a VERY misunderstood character. The book is written in Bella's first person POV and of course Bella would feel threated by Tanya because Bella had a VERY low image of herself and Tanya was everything Bella wasn't--strong, confident, self-assured, independent, knows what she wants and goes after it. Besides Tanya is a succubus, if she wanted to, she could get ANY man she wants. So she saw a single man and went after him, she didn't do anything wrong, and in fact once Edward told her he was interested in someone else she supported his relationship, bowed out gracefully and went to the wedding. AND I'm a hundred percent sure she got over it quickly, obviously, and a good example of that is Midnight Sun, Edward's POV--a better view of Tanya. PLUS another reason I can't stand Book Bella is because it's like, damn get over yourself NOT everyone will die if they don't have Edward and I think Tanya is a good example of that--she moved on.

But between you and me I think she liked Carlisle more--lol!

Yeah, I wanted to keep that whole "succubus" element true to my Tanya, she would be the type of woman to use 'em and abuse 'em before leaving them and not caring about men or standards. And you're right I wanted to have that contrast between the way Tanya sees men/sex/relationships as opposed to the way Alice and Bella see it.

AND have you noticed that, even though the story is about Alice and Bella's stolen souls, NONE of my characters souls really belong to them, if you think about it! HEHE, tricky.

Reviewer: coldplaystalker (Signed) · Date: March 21, 2010 11:42 AM · On: Chapter 10

I like the different point ov views but wonderin when will edward see bella again?



Author's Response:

Hey hun, thanks for reviewing.

We'll see at least some bits of Eddie in most every chapter from now on! And even though he's not in the chapters we still learn things about him and "see" him, like this one.

Sometimes I feel like I've failed as a writer since so many people keep asking about Eddie and Bella, when I've tried to make it very much about everyone. But then I remember that this story is based (sort of) after a story where Bella immediately falls in love with a dangerous man/vampire without any good reason other than his looks--she knows absolutely nothing about him before she confesses her love other than the fact that he's a vampire and can read minds--even their interogations of each other start later. My story isn't like that at all, they will have a natural progression of emotions, like regular people do, and a natural progression of interatction. I want it to be as "real" as possible.

BUT I promise when it does happen it will be worth the wait! You have my word because this is very much a Eddie and Bella romance just as much as it is a Jasper and Alice or Emmett and Rosalie one. Honeslty though the main premise of my story is finding salvation---and that never comes in the same form for everyone . . . .

But then SOMETIMES I feel like I've suceeded as a writer because you sympathize with my Eddie and/or my Bella and you only want good things for them.

Confusing, right!?! Writing is a bit of hell. Lol. Always a topsy-turvy roller coaster, not just for the reader.

Thanks again hun for reading and I promise to get you to the good stuff soon--slow, sweet burn! xxNaya

Reviewer: loveofhenry (Signed) · Date: March 21, 2010 08:38 AM · On: Chapter 10

so are you going to reveal the mystery person who affected eddie so much- i take it probably a twin sister?

also when will eddie boy see bella again>>> since he isnt getting any at home he has to go somewhere.



Author's Response:

Thanks so much for your review hun!

I won't end the story without having reavealed everything. But some things take time to reveal themselves, and others have to be discovered by the characters--that's one of the biggest reasons that this is told through all the eyes of the people who live the story is because we con only discover what they do, when they do.

Which brings me to another point--again with the seeing things through their eyes and discovering when their ready to discover. Of course my Eddie and Bella will find each other again. I love their pairing, but it has to happen naturally. A natural progression of things. In my opinion Twilight WASN'T a natural progression of things--I'm trying to bring that here.

And it honeslty isn't about sex. But you'll see what I mean soon enough. xxNaya

Reviewer: Susie Q (Signed) · Date: March 20, 2010 07:52 PM · On: Chapter 10

Hi Naya,

Poor Tanya, not only is she blindly in love with a fucked up, selfish Asshole but he is in love with a prosititute who is a slave in the Russian Mafia!  Talk about some serious fuckery!!!

Good Times!! (Really, this story is just fantastic!!)

Seriously, great insight into Tanya ----- what to say about her?  She should have stuck to Vogue and shopping and stayed out of the library?  You can't make someone love you - there is no "HEA" to be had! Very Sad For Her!

Gottta run and watch New Moon for the ??? lost count!  Just like to watch "the strut" and them pretend Edward is asking me to marry him!! MWAHHHH!!

 



Author's Response:

Hi lover, I know, it's complicated, right? But Eddie isn't in love with Twilight. Eddie has no idea what love is. And most especially doesn't believe he can ever reciprocate it.

I LOVE my Tanya. I lover her attitude, I love her spunk.

LOL--just like in my story I pretend I'm just like Rosalie and wants to dance with Carlisle so that I can pretend it's my own wedding!

My definition of an HEA is probably VERY differnt then everyone elses. And as stated in the summary--hehe, I've left clues EVERYWHERE as to where I might be going with this story--"This is a story about finding salvation when it's least expected, when you might not even know you need it and when the form it comes in isn't what you may have wanted."

Just putting that out there.

Reviewer: Bluecanoe (Signed) · Date: March 20, 2010 07:00 PM · On: Chapter 10

Nope, sorry, you didn't sway me..:)  I still can't stand Tanya, she's really manipulative.  You marry someone you know doesn't love you against all the advice of everyone you know, especially after he treated her the way he did the day before the wedding?  Nope...That is someone who'll do whatever they can to get what they want.  She may delude herself into thinking she's doing everything to make Edward happy, but she's not, if she loved him, she'd let him go.  Not once has that ever entered her mind.  she thinks she can change him, no one is that powerful, the only person you can change is yourself, the only person you have any power over truely is yourself.  Besides. the way he was treating her on their honeymoon made it pretty clear he really thought he'd made a mistake.  Take the hint lady, take the road Tanya...



Author's Response:

Damn it! I was even crossing my fingers behind my back! LOL. I know your fidelity lies with Eddie, but I'm gonna sway you one my Tanya sooner or later. Mark my words! *Muahaaha!* *I hope that sounded evil*

Heart you Blue!

Reviewer: Mora-Cullen (Signed) · Date: March 20, 2010 01:59 PM · On: Chapter 9

Holy heart bearing Jas!



Author's Response:

Lol, Mora love--rereading were you? Or just trying to boost my review stats?

Eitherway, love ya!

Reviewer: Mora-Cullen (Signed) · Date: March 20, 2010 01:54 PM · On: Chapter 8

Jeeze she so wants to die

Reviewer: Mora-Cullen (Signed) · Date: March 20, 2010 01:49 PM · On: Chapter 7

this chap was full of really good info



Author's Response:

I know! It was the crucial one, the one with all the info you're gonna need for later! And it's one of my favorites, especially writing as Demetri!

 

Reviewer: Mora-Cullen (Signed) · Date: March 20, 2010 01:27 PM · On: Chapter 6

Ha ha Emmett wants to "Bounce" Lily's brother into the ground!

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