Glad to see this story here at Twilighted.  I've read up to Chapter 21 a long time ago.  I'm still with you on this.  I am look forward to your update. 

This is the best story, don't make me wait...more, please, more!

Chapter 1 hooked me in right away.  Your writing is easy to read and I'm not distracted by awkward sentences or repeating words.  Everything flows so easily - it's like I don't notice I'm reading.    The first chapter held a certain level of excitement allowed me to fly right through it.  At the beginning of chapter two, it was a great surprise to find out it was Jacob that Edward met at the end of chapter one (although maybe everyone else guessed that already and I'm slow???).  Anyway that was fun for me!  If I could change anything, I probably would have put the action of chapter 2 - when Charlie and Billy come home with the victim -much sooner, in order to match the energy of chapter one.  Then when Bella asks herself if this is the same boy she fell in love with, then go back and do some history.  That's just my opinion.    I'm looking forward to this exciting new world you've created - a bit grimier than one would expect from these characters and certainly intriguing!  

 

i absolutely luved this story and hope that you'll be able to update it sometime

Yay!

Oh man, I realised it's like, nearly 2am and I can't stop reading this. I have an appointment (blood test, actually - ironically) tomorrow morning at 8, then uni all day. I'm gonna be a zombie... But This is just TOO GOOD. :)

Oooooh my God! This is just getting better and better... I don't want it to end. Incase people read this before they read the story, I don't want to give away too much. But I do want to tell you that I LOVED the end of this chapter. It couldn't have been done better.

Sara

Absolutely brilliant. I love it I love it I love it. I hope you are still updating it - because I know I'll get to the end and be like... 'damn!' hehe!

This is very different.  I'm intrigued!  On to the next one...

 

Wow. You don't have enough reviews. This is a really good story, a lot more original than anything I've read in a while, and you definitely deserve some fangirls... but I suppose most people don't really go for the darker Edward if he isn't a recovering addict covered in tattoos and/or piercings. That's a shame, because now they're missing out on stories like yours. Did I already say it's incredible?

The characters here are incredible, too. Edward's just... well, killing Bella's coworkers for simply being there. How disturbed do I sound if I say I like that about him? Bella isn't a doormat, that's always refreshing. I've never been a fan of Jacob and I love it when someone gives me an actual reason to hate him in a story.

What happened with Esme is something I've never seen before, and these days that's a huge compliment. I really enjoyed that, in the same twisted way as I like Edward's lack of... well, morals. It's a take on Esme that doesn't make her the kind of cliché she's unfortunately become.

I hope you keep going, because I've really enjoyed reading this.
- Alisa

I don't remember how I stumbled onto this story but I'm glad I did. I was a little unsure at the beginning, but was shocked and surprised as the story proceeded. One hell of a story. Please update.

WOW! What a start! I almost never review a first chapter, (usually, I haven't formed an opinion yet) but this is fantastic. I hope you're able to keep this up. Why is it that Edward makes such a fabulous villain? Edward can go to such an evil place so quickly and it is very satisfying. Congratulations on such a great beginning!